When Princess Twilight Sparkle and Rainbow Dash are on a visit to the castle of the two sisters deep in the everfree forest Celestia tells them the story of Equestria's most important event in history, and also the most dangerous threat to the fate of Equestria.
This is the story of the three alicorn sisters, and the events leading up to Luna being possessed by a strange dark force. Starting with her first breath, her life has always been an important one. And a dangerous one too. Look trough the eyes of Princess Brightfire as you learn the true story that has been kept secret for years.
Let me know what you do and don't like in the comments. Thanks for bothering to even read my story! 4>
Chapters (7)
Other than the grammatical errors, you clearly have a good grasp of the established characters' personalities and portray them well. I look forward to seeing Brightfire develop and learning her personality, too.
Thank you and I will do my best to fix everything and improve the story!
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No worries! You have a good foundation for the story, and that's what's important (at least to me).
If you ever need any help with editing, I'm always available. Otherwise just keep on keepin' on.
thanks!
i like it is there going to be more???
don't worry I am still working on it, and thanks for liking it!
Just to let you know, Thank you everypony! Thanks to you I have gotten this far. I am making plans to make another fanfic after this one, it will be called Bound To You. let me know about anything you would like for me to edit. Thank you all! I 4> you all! (lol divergent reference!)
Toasted cats!