It's been two years since the Marelaysian Battle Squad was disband and after two years they had finally been able to get on with their lives but apparently fate has bigger things in stored for them.
Ponies all over Equestria are starting to change. As if somepony out there are influencing them. It time once again for the ponies of MBS to uncover this sinister plot before Equestria is plunged into chaos.
(Warning: Contains OC ponies. All OC ponies belong to their respective owners.)
Also thanks to my prereaders ComradeCommissar, ZE_ALIF and Maple Sunrise
kudala lumpur
also “Yeah, it’s actually a very long story but in short. He got injured and went blind after words.” its afterwards not "after words"
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Damn how did i miss that....
What in the world...?
Tracked because of blatant self-insert warning about Malaysian bronies.
Hmm. Interesting story. Tracking.
Great Chapter and it's looking like a good story that needs to be continued.
Although I found a couple of grammer errors:
“But we just got here?” (you need a period instead of question mark)
“Alrite then we better get this done fast. ('Alrite' is spelled 'Alright')
“Twilight… you shouldn’t run offso suddenly (off_so)
Its all godd....just a little grammar and spelling mistakes here and there....XD
tracked btw...
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Wow... and i got this past a grammer Nazi... Time to change my Grammar Nazi
but in all due seriousness i hope the minor and very small grammatical errors didn't spoil to much of the story.
512909 You have to watch out for those grammer nazi, you never know what side they are on..
But no, a couple of errors will not drive is away, keep writing!