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I cant believe its the END.
Beautiful!!!
Feels like there's a lot of character arcs that weren't quite wrapped up. The Luna romance just got dropped. Nothing came of the hints of Twilight/Flash romance. Never found out if Celestia and Shining Armor found what was missing from their lives, or kept on being sad and lonely. Never found out what happened to the corrupt nobles. Bat-horse just kind of disappeared.
In the end, I find I'm not disappointed with the loose threads, because It's moments like this that I read for.
very nice ending
Whhhaaat. Delete the last section of this chapter. It was great and then you just end it? Whaaaat?! There was still so much more to do and resolve, Luna had like barely started courting them!
perfect!
What about the ...what were they, clans?...the ponies who kidnapped Ares?
7328831 I agree. I feel like we just dropped everything for the Windigo and just decided "Eh fuck it let's get this done"
I guess that is the main problem with sequels though, they often can't get to the same place that the first one gets to.
That being said this story wasn't bad at all. It was quite enjoyable. I don't have to gush over how amazing the characters are, you already know.
That being said, the entirety of this saga lasted throughout my side suite getting constructed, moving, and going to college. Every single chapter I saw updated really excited me. I cannot wait to see what else will be released and what new adventures we will see.
Ending feels rushed, I mean they take their time looking for a cure the entire time and ZAP get hit by the elements and everything is fine...And also all that build up with Luna came to nothing in the end, hell you could probably go back and edit all of that out now since nothing came of it.
I'm sorry but this ending... I'm just not buying it sorry.
How disappointingly anti-climatic.
I won't go into to much detail since a lot has been said already. However; dropped sublots, dismissed continuity, and the hurried pace of the chapter makes this a BAD ending.
Look, if you felt like you had gone as far as you wanted with this story then at least take the time to properly end it. There was no way you could have thought people would be satisfied with this.
I feel...disappointed in the ending, what happened with Luna? Sorry but it feels really rushed.
7329022 I kinda agree with what he says... I did like the last chapter, but I feel as if the whole scene with the purification was rushed the last chapter back... And I kinda hoped to see more Luna love. Because I too love the moon! Other than that it has been a good story.
This fic just fell on its face... hard. The pacing seemed just fine untill the wendigo possession part. Then it just seemed to drag on and then *snap* they are all good. What it looks like is that you just decided to kill the story and end it. I do have to thanks for giving us an ending.
There are so many unfinished arcs in this story. The biggest of them is the Luna romance arc. Luna was so worked up that their date had to go perfect. This is not the sign of a pony looking for casual dating. Yet we were just given one sentence that stated "nope nothing happened, its over". The nobles of the crystal empire did not have a conclusion, no Flash / Twilight, no Shining finding peace after the divorce, the new captain of the guard.
Your writing is very good but it looks like you put too many things into the story and it kicked your ass.
Good story but what was the point of Luna wooing them? Nothing came of it so what was the point of it? It's like it just got forgotten about or something, really weird.
But! I still love this story, just kinda scratching my head about that one point.
oh BOY the timing on that typo
maybe fix that
You're planning a story on Princess Skyla aren't you?
Ah, I see. Taking some Inspiration from the Spiderman comics clone arc, so many things unsettled.
Hohoho, a glorious tale well done! Goddamn I loved this story, hehehe!
NIcely done! Now the last bit!
Sequel :D
The end just fell off. I was honestly surprised this was the last chapter. Several arcs weren't finished and it just abruptly ended, it didn't really wind down at all.
Really suprised it ended, though i suppose this was a good enough place.
BOOM sudden ending. Forget all the other stuff, this story is just ending right away. Screw Luna wooing and her lonely arc. Screw shining and his conflict. Forget the bat horse. Just close it right up on a dime.
Elements fix everything. They fixed Luna, they fixed Discord and now they fixed this story. And by fixed I mean "Ignore all the little things, magic boomed big thing away", everything is fine now.
I think I missed something. Where is the part where Cadence was able to get pregnant? Wasn't one of the main plots in the first story that she was infertile? Skyla just kinda pops in from nowhere. This story finished just to be finished.
Hmm.. be a real dick move if I ended the story right now... reeeal dick move..
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damn! i need the sequel to this coz the messenger did not gave the message!
what was the message from the messenger?!
sequel to the messenger!
nice fic dude!
I couldn't finish reading this chapter :/
for me the story did a complete 180 degree turn and flopped. So many things abandoned left unexplored, unresolved conflicts, little character development for side characters, half assed conflicts, and half assed conclusions Im seriously at a loss and i have to quote Derpy on this one, "I JUST DONT KNOW WHAT WENT WRONG". The story was going so well and then this happened. I honestly thought the series would end on a cliffhanger then you would continue to resolve to conflict on a third and final sequel wrapping up everything and continuing the slice of life romance and then show them getting married, kids and whatever happened to the others like, fFash getting with Twilight, Shinning finding his happy ever after, did Luna end up with them? Also cant forget to mention as one of the comments said, wasn't there a whole arc where cadence couldn't get pregnant? not even gonna have some bs explanation about ares being human and this and that? Personally wasn't really a fan since chapter one of the whole "Cadence telling someone a story" type of narration.
Instead we get all this crammed in a 6 k word chapter. Like i really want to like the story but damn the ending is one of the most memorable parts of a story and well this just left me with a bad taste and HUGE disappointment because i invested so much time into finishing this. I could go on and on but frankly i dont know what caused this. It could have been something on your end like having a bad day, not caring anymore, fans pestering you as to where to take the story. I really do however wonder what you were thinking when deciding on the ending. Like not in a mean or negative i just really do wish to get some insight as to what caused this.
Regardless i want you to know that i did enjoy the story excluding the end and some parts and the characters were lovely. A shame it doesn't live up to the prequel but alas. Thanks for writing this and hopefully you walk away from this sequel a better writer.
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The elements of Harmony probably did the trick.
7328817
Amazing!
7328831
But we got a really fun ending.
I liked the ending right up to the pan out into Cadence talking to the message
man, but I'm glad we got an ending. I hope for a sequel!That was awsome.
Kind of an odd end, bet eh, it was a neat ride.
But what happened to Echo if Shining was the new captain of the guard? D:
This was just... I agree with the others. The story just kind of fell apart completely from the start of the possession arc. It feels like you wrote yourself into a corner or something like that and just wanted to end things. That tickle and date chapter was one of the few great parts of the story because it fit so well with the theme and style of the first story and the first bit of this story. That possession bit just killed it. The pacing, the characters, the plot; everything just felt like it was tossed away and forgotten.
So what happened to the bat pony?
I figured that was gonna happen.
This is honestly hands down one of the best stories i’ve ever read
Ah, this story was still as good as I remembered it.
Though the ending is still horribly rushed and disappointing.
It seriously needs a rewrite/extension as it just time-skips over their marriage and cadance's pregnancy like they aren't important story points.
And I also dislike that the whole "Luna trying to woo them" thing was also just cut off so suddenly like that, after having a lot of build up over the entire story and luna being so dead set on it.
I feel like that could've been done slower as well.
with a few more dates including her where she either realizes she likes cadance and ares more as friends than romantic partners, or where their bond grows closee together until they accept her into the relationship (And she gets her own foal ;) ).
Alternatively you could also just drop in another human and have luna realize she has a lot in common with that guy and redirects her wooing to him instead. Which would probably cause Celly and cadance to help her out, which could lead to a lot of adorable and awkward scenes (and maybe even marriage and another foal near the end).
Overall there is a lot of amazing potential here that this ending seems to be just throwing away.
It's honestly just a shame
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I feel the same. Hearing 'Luna just gave up eventually' was very disappointing to read. And the ending feels super rushed. There were so many loose ends that were hastily knotted and incredibly frayed. However, even though I would love to try and pick up where this story left off, a sort of noncanon continuation, I don't think my skills as a writer are up to the same level as this guy's who wrote this.