Welcome to Equestria, the rich golden sun beats down endlessly on the great sand tombs and limestone mountains that make up the landscape. But, that doesn't mean all is calm it is dangerous and terrible. Empress Rarity has an iron grip on Equestria and her thirst for diamonds doesn't make things any easier. If that isn't bad enough great sandworms roam the sandy dunes in search of unwary travelers or the delicious spices that hide in the ores deep in the ground. What awaits you the reader in the sands of Equestria?
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This defiantly has potential, and I love this universe you've created however (and just to be clear; I mean no offense or ridicule) your use of punctuation could be improved, particularly commas. I'm not going to pretend to be an expert at this sort of thing and start telling you how to improve but I can say that the writing guide on this site is very helpful and clearly explains the how's and why's of not just grammar but an and all aspects of writing you may have questions about, and I highly recommend you check it out (and if you have already then maybe do a bit of revision). In short I can fully get behind the idea and plot of this story it's just the few issues of the writing itself that I think need to be addressed.