While the scars of the War will forever remain, Schneeblume has been helped along by the three Crusaders over the years. Now, she must lay to rest some more demons that have haunted her. To do so, she must return home to where it started: Alemaneia.
One Nightmare Night the Cutie Mark Crusaders take an unfortunate turn into the Everfree Forest, and Sweetie Belle is afflicted with a a terrible curse.
One day, the Crusaders happen upon Ponyville’s newest, specialty flower vendor: a young mare from Alemaneia named Schneeblume. They think she’s hiding something. Turns out she is, though not in a way they expected at all.
I could imagine A.B. talking like this. Minor complaint, the dates! I wish there was some so I can get a sense of time with this. But regardless, an enjoyable read, and I hope you prosper on FimFiction, friend! Welcome!
I remember reading this years ago and it’s still one of my favorites. I think I might have liked it if the show went in this direction and had the CMC realize they could still live fulfilling lives even without a cutie mark.
I could imagine A.B. talking like this. Minor complaint, the dates! I wish there was some so I can get a sense of time with this. But regardless, an enjoyable read, and I hope you prosper on FimFiction, friend! Welcome!
I'm a pre-reader or critique-r in 'training'.
There were a few problems with the grammar and consistency.
1) Ponies became people.
2)
I've always tried/I have always tried
3) A few times you've made some words present tense when they should be past.
Other than that, this type of story method isn't my forte. Good luck with further fictions
I remember reading this years ago and it’s still one of my favorites. I think I might have liked it if the show went in this direction and had the CMC realize they could still live fulfilling lives even without a cutie mark.