Page generated in 0.025 seconds
Total duration
996 users online
1,394,064 hits today, 1,870,739 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
Got to admit I now like Dusk even more then I already did lol. He is going up on my lips, Still not as high as Spike but up there. (and once Spike finds what he wants to live for and spot being lack of a better term a bitch I will really start liking this Spike and put him in my Spike hall of fame lol.
Pot meet kettle.
Damn..... And yet the Elements haven't figured out how to connect with Spike and Quill. Not to mention that they lost RD.....
again---damn.
The truth hurts. But we have to endure it. Life is not all gumdrops and chocolate.
Looks like Mia is doing well and is trying to coax RD off her ass. The Elements had this talk coming for a long time, I was hoping the twin would be the one to give it but I'm happy with the way Dusk handled it. Looks like Dusk won't be playing nice with the EH for a long time and with the way they've been acting I can't blame them. Anyway it seems Iris is fitting in just fine, though I wonder what the confortation between her and the princesses will be like?
4417646
Hard to have someone quit on you when you never had someone in the first place.
4420164
gah! this must be fixed! This story is too good to be held back by minor discrepancies known as grammatical errors!
4421265
Well, I would try finding an editor, however I'm currently writing the forty-first chapter. Which would mean there are close to twenty or so chapters that would have to go under edits. That's not even counting what I still have to add in between to make things better.
If I ever find someone willing to do this without flanking out on me, I would quickly do so, but I'm not sure who as that kind of time. You're welcomed to recommend any editors if you know of any that may be able to help.
And thanks, I know my grammar isn't the best, but to hear that you deeply enjoy the story is a good thing.
4422060 'well ill help as best i can. I cant guarantee my help on all chapters, but its better than having no editor. I will re-read each chapter again soon so i would be more inclined to note the grammatical mistakes.
4422105
Well, if you're going to do that, send it as a Pm so not to take up space here. Thanks.
4422389
alright
Everyone's talkin' about how great Dusk is this chapter, am I the only one who thinks he's not a really cool character, but an arrogant jerk who's supposed to seem cool 'cause he can kick ass?
I mean... the Elements have lost their way on friendship, but Dusk's strong relationships apparently are limited to having girlfriends (and his relationships have not been tested, as far as we know, fighting to save your friends is a very different beast than having conflict WITH your friends), but this is portrayed as giving him the right to judge them harshly, and it's sorta annoying. Not to mention he insults them for being weak, and degrades their accomplishments (which, even if they're "just fighting Nightmare Moon and Discord", involve y'know... saving the world still. Pretty sure getting into gang fights is not as important as saving the world, which until lately was the scope of his accomplishments), and am I supposed to like him for this? Supposed to agree that this means he has the right to tell them all their accomplishments are worthless and they're pathetic?
He just seems like you're really pushing to make him seem awesome both for being a badass and being wiser than all the other characters, but he's not even really that interesting to me. The journey from "already an awesome badass" to "a bigger badass who's self-righteous" is not an interesting character journey to me, and aside from having to fight the animated armor that was tough (not that I expected him to lose, and he becomes an Element accidentally as a result) he has no struggles. Not even the kind of struggles like Obsidian or Wolf have (which aren't based in their flaws but in a delicate or tough situation they are dealing with), much less the huge character flaws Spike has been granted.
Not that I dislike what's happening with Spike in this fic: I really like the character arc that portrays his self-sacrifice as right next to a martyr complex and something that hurts him, while trying to balance it with the thought that doing things for a loved one is still great, when it results in you being alone and unhappy what's the point? He's got this implicit low self-esteem others-are-important-and-I'm-not complex in a LOT of stories (and is basically his canon interpretation) but so many stories either praise it or simply ignore it, and I like that this story addresses it. It's just a bit frustrating when Quill, for example, stumbles accidentally onto true love, and just happens to be perfectly balanced because she figured out all the stuff Spike is struggling with when she was younger.
4424966
Um...wow, just wow. I don't really agree, nor do I disagree with what you're saying, however I do have to say that it's still a wee early.
Yeah with Spike, I have him acting as the shoulder to carry everyone's weight, but this will come at a price later on; of which I'll say no further of. Quill...yeah you're right, she dose 'seems' to have it easy, but again just like Spike; this will come at a future cost.
The main reason I have the twins like this is cause I'm taking ALL of the qualities from the show about Spike. We already know that he is willing to place his own head on the chopping board for someone else, however, he also have easy going qualities and (sometimes) have good luck that in someway backfires on him.
With Dusk, I'm not even going to defend. I made him the way he is cause frankly I wanted to have some one to force the elements to become better whether they truly needed to or not. Dose this make him cool? No, not in my opinion. It just makes him someone that would go a bit further than someone else, and not make the mistake of giving them a shoulder to cry on while THEY are the ones who messed up.
In no way or fashion am I trying to make Dusk seem like some kind of badass that flies in and save the day for everyone. In my honest opinion, I kind of hate characters that do this, canon or not.
Also, to say that Dusk is without flaw is sort of wrong, and you gave the reason why. Dusk, yes is rash and harsh with his choices, but they are his choices. Be right or wrong, be nice or mean, he's going to make some kind of choice, or leave it alone altogether.
That's why I made him the element of resolve. He sees everything through to the very end and deals with it in his way. This is his flaw, and this will be shown more through out.
The same goes for both Wolf and Obsidian, however, for the point of not ruining any more than I have; I'll just keep my big mouth shut.
I'm happy that you are finding some enjoyment with my story, and I'm sorry if it seemed I was trying to make anyone who their not, I'm just telling it how it is. I do hope you keep reading and see just why I have everyone the way they are.
4426064
I'm not really worried about Quill seeming to have it too easy... I was mostly pointing it out in comparison. If I'm annoyed at Quill about anything it's her self-centered nature, and willingness to blow off other people's problems as unimportant, often even when they're staring her in the face. But this is clearly not something the story glorifies so I'm not worried about it.
And Spike acting as the shoulder to carry everyone's weight is already costing him twice, once for how he gives and doesn't get, putting him in usually worse situations afterward and hurting his self-esteem, and once for how his draconic magic is rejecting him because of it. Apparently it's gonna get worse before it gets better... I'm looking forward to it. Should I maybe not be?
I guess jumped the gun on that. I saw the unconditional favor he was getting in the comments and how the narrative basically agrees with him this chapter (and pretty much always does) and generalized it to "will continue to always be portrayed in a positive/dominant/better than the other characters light, with no significant flaws." I like him less for his arrogance than his harshness, though. Shouldn't have made it about you trying to push the readers to see him as cool and just voiced my opinion: sometimes I like him, but here he's being an arrogant jerk, even if he's dispensing useful advice.