3882161 no. The Anonymous part serves a purpose in this fic. Besides I don't really think that the fact that the protag is named Anonymous is a sign of low quality In ANY fic.
I didn't mean it like that I just meant that usually fics use names like Anonymous if they are somewhat short. Sorry if I somehow offended you in any way..?
Good. I only approve of the rainbow and Luna relationships. Even if apple kind of redeemed herself she was still to crazy for in the beginning for anon to change his option of her I think.
3881911 it is all good, I too am addicted to this story and wish to over dose on it *snorts the story* YYEEAAAA!!!! Ain't no party like a Pinkie Pie party!
“You're never going to let me live the whole 'Discord-statue-placed-in-the-royal-gardens-and-accessible-to-the-general-public' thing down, are you Lulu?”
The Princess of the Sun turns and huffs. “In my defense, I placed the Grimoire in a hidden compartment in the library of a backwater farming village behind the section containing books on ancient Equestrian tax policy. I thought it was a foolproof plan!”
Luna sighs and facehoofs. “And then you staffed said library with the biggest 'turbo-nerd' of the current era. Your own machinations were your downfall, Sister.”
I honestly would like to see Octavia with a nightmare gift because it would be a charming kind of evil to see. That or see what Fancy Pants, Angel Bunny, Tom, Tatzlwurm, Bulk Biceps, and finally Gummy the nightmare maw. I wonder what you have in store?
Okay...this has been hilarious throughout the entire read but this...THIS fuckin' chapter right here...I can't feel my jaw, that's how bloody funny it was. That song...that fuckin' song... I can't believe how beautiful this is, I just can't and coupled with the now buddin' LEGIT romance just leaves me sayin': "Look at the swing on this kid, that's Major league talent right there."
Glad to see this one made it on FIMfiction. Oh man if this one was so well received I cannot wait to see the reaction to exchange. It is by far my favorite story done by you.
The Princess of the Sun turns and huffs. “In my defense, I placed the Grimoire in a hidden compartment in the library of a backwater farming village behind the section containing books on ancient Equestrian tax policy. I thought it was a foolproof plan!”
I get it....cause foolproof is a financial teaching site.
Oh my god, at first I thought this was a trollfic but I've come to recognize it for the magical masterpiece that it is. I marathoned it. I couldn't stop myself! MORE
♫ Just a man, so lost and hurt Brought here from another world He took the midnight train going anywhere~ ♫
♫ Just a mare with a need to fill Fell from the clouds to Ponyville She took the midnight train going anywhere~ ♫
♫ She saw him through the forest's gloom And knew that she would have him soon Through his fetish she'll win his heart It goes on and on and on and on!
Ponies! Prancing! Down the road outside his house In shadow, stalking through the night Frisky! Fillies! Searching for a special human Clopping, somewhere in the night~! ♫
♫ Working hard on her traps and plans Just for a touch from his hunky hands Doin' anything for monkey dick Just one more time And she may win, she may lose But tomorrow it all starts anew Oh the ride, it never ends It goes on and on and on and on!
Ponies! Prancing! Down the road outside his house In shadow, stalking through the night Frisky! Fillies! Searching for a special human Clopping, somewhere in the night~! ♫
♫ Don't stop believin' Hold on to the feelin' Frisky! Fillies~! ♫
This has to be one of the most nonsensical, and all around wtf story i've read.... yet i like it. And since i've just read Exchange, i'm thinking maybe i like what you do getmeouttahere... :P
oh man.. It's so strange, it's such a similar feeling the more I go through the story like in Exchange, not the same experience, but more in a similar progression of the story and I guess it makes sense, as this was written prior to it. Basically what I mean is, it starts out a little weak, but as I suspected from reading Exchange, it's all set up in place for a reason. Still, Idk what it is about the beginnings of either stories, I think it's how they just happen without warning? it's only after those parts that things start to fall in place more smoothly and events become more self-explanatory. I get why they happened, but you know. we just started and already in the first sentences, Luna was all over Anon and wanting to get in his pants. and did. which, is pretty funny I mean, but, you know.. kinda have to lead me in to that, you know? :p
But enough of the criticism, let me talk things I like now..
1. The train ride. First off, I really like that, it was starting off to go into a weird place, but by God, you turned it around and more important, the mane 6 are actually acting like themselves, it's actually uncanny just how much they cheer themselves up and reminisce me of the way they act in the show and the reason I say this is because of one important thing here that happened, they all kept each others' spirit up, because, they are with each other and they get over it through their strong friendship. Never do I think I've seen the mane 6 do this in any fanfiction, I may have seen consolation from one to another between them, but to see all 6 of them help out each other like this and get over something like this, together, mainly because PP is the catalyst and booster to keeping this group of friend's from depression, then Fluttershy, then Rarity and Aj and all of a sudden, everyone is just enjoying the moment? Good times, good times indeed.. that was easily, the best part so far that I've seen, but there are more anyway, I'm just saying I was really impressed there.
2. The little thing at the end of the previous chapter was also really good. Again, kinda like with Exchange and seeing how this was written before it, I was worried about what I'd see from Twilight (given that AJ previously pulverized Anon's penis not too long ago.. JESUS AJ!..). That didn't go as I expected, it blew my mind how well all of that went.. You expert, rootin' tootin', eagle-eyed, Pony-lovin' writer! You did it again, you set up EVERYTHING in that!!! And in the end, Everybody still loses! God Damn you, that went so good at the end.. The heartfelt speech, the honesty, the little moment and then, the guilt followed by anon doing what he did for Twi. I may be building this up too much tbh, the earlier part was far more unexpected and off-guard catching, plus it seems kinda pedantic when I explain the steps, formulaic really, but there are so many pitfalls and little traps there and things that could go wrong, something any writer would just write something that just feeling good at the moment as opposed to feeling like it's the right thing to happen, in any case, it's not how it sounds, it's how emotional it ended up being and that's what matters in the end, because I felt that Twilight and Anon genuinely got a better bonding from that than anywhere else.
3. [time stop] [time stop time stop time stop 7 seconds 7 seconds 7 seconds X seconds] ZA WARU- I'll show myself out.
eh, enough listing.. All I can say is, I'm having fun with this! I'll admit, at some points it is a little bit on the cringe side, but this is turning surprisingly fun. :) I like the moments that turn into very genuine acts, I think that's what draws the most enjoyment in what you wrote here, they can get really good and I don't think that was done on accident, it's just what I like best in all this. Still, I'm not going to knock away some pretty funny moments, like the armor, or Anon beating Luna at the game, Anon's little chat with Spike, there are many small moments that made it all worth while. I see what you mean by Exchange being better though, still got a few chapters to see by how much/little, but it is pretty much as you explained and a little bit of what I was expecting too. :)
nice Plot device
I wonder if Anon goes darkside due too magic exposure
Amazing chapter love nightmare derpy
This story is equally hilarious and deep. It's my drug and I want more of it~
love it, keep it up!
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We can only hope. Also would you agree that this story is too good for just having a character named Anonymous?
3882161 no. The Anonymous part serves a purpose in this fic. Besides I don't really think that the fact that the protag is named Anonymous is a sign of low quality In ANY fic.
I didn't mean it like that I just meant that usually fics use names like Anonymous if they are somewhat short. Sorry if I somehow offended you in any way..?
Egads, I love this story so much
An absolutely awesome treat to return to FiMFiction and find not one, but TWO updates of a story I'm already in love with :D
Good. I only approve of the rainbow and Luna relationships. Even if apple kind of redeemed herself she was still to crazy for in the beginning for anon to change his option of her I think.
I really, really, really hope Anon is the fourth nightmare. I really do.
3881911 it is all good, I too am addicted to this story and wish to over dose on it *snorts the story* YYEEAAAA!!!! Ain't no party like a Pinkie Pie party!
Oh where oh where is that Troll face luna!!!!!!! Hmmm ahha!
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no that's not it . . . oh well.
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This chapter was awesome and derpy is stronger than celestia be careful when her eyes line up
Luna x Anon is my new favorite ship ever
Interesting story. Funny and weird.
Also, need more belly rubs.
sweet
I honestly would like to see Octavia with a nightmare gift because it would be a charming kind of evil to see.
That or see what Fancy Pants, Angel Bunny, Tom, Tatzlwurm, Bulk Biceps, and finally Gummy the nightmare maw.
I wonder what you have in store?
Okay...this has been hilarious throughout the entire read but this...THIS fuckin' chapter right here...I can't feel my jaw, that's how bloody funny it was.
That song...that fuckin' song...
I can't believe how beautiful this is, I just can't and coupled with the now buddin' LEGIT romance just leaves me sayin': "Look at the swing on this kid, that's Major league talent right there."
Glad to see this one made it on FIMfiction. Oh man if this one was so well received I cannot wait to see the reaction to exchange. It is by far my favorite story done by you.
The Princess of the Sun turns and huffs. “In my defense, I placed the Grimoire in a hidden compartment in the library of a backwater farming village behind the section containing books on ancient Equestrian tax policy. I thought it was a foolproof plan!”
I get it....cause foolproof is a financial teaching site.
3882224 na man im the one who's sorry that was a bit harsh of me.
Oh my god, at first I thought this was a trollfic but I've come to recognize it for the magical masterpiece that it is. I marathoned it. I couldn't stop myself! MORE
3881836 Kingdom Hearts Darkside, or Star Wars, becaue Star Wars is a tad overused.
3884919 Thanks, he was delicius
3884720 Do you really think i'd make that bad of a pun?
Well do you?
Well OF COURSE I DID!
It was too good to pass up XD
B-b-but what about going out with RD tomorrow?
This is why people at the library think I'm the weirdest motherfucker they've ever seen.
hummmm
Awk, ain't that just brilliant? Four Nightmare Moon's all with strange and not-so-wonderful powers!
BTW, the phoenetic alphabet for E is Echo, not Epsilon.
I was kind of hoping that Derpy's power was not being in the place it looked like she was, like a displacer beast. Time works too I guess.
Here's hoping for Nightmare Bulk Biceps.
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So Derpy could stop time temporarily...
Reminds me of someone
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4343741 shoulda got the "I AM THE ONE" matrix clip too, and also, any nightmare incarnation comes after me aaaaannnnd....
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Weeping angel reference, check.
Also, why do I know I can control the craziness of the Nightmare forces if I had them?
Derpy's magical power was bad luck.
Wow, I think that might be the best parody of a Journey song I've ever heard, and it's actually singable too!!!
This has to be one of the most nonsensical, and all around wtf story i've read.... yet i like it. And since i've just read Exchange, i'm thinking maybe i like what you do getmeouttahere... :P
Oh look logic is leaving ... Bye logic... Oh hello hilarity how are you...yeah this story must have been created by fucking and awesome.
>time stop for a few seconds
Nice jojo reference ya got there m80
oh man.. It's so strange, it's such a similar feeling the more I go through the story like in Exchange, not the same experience, but more in a similar progression of the story and I guess it makes sense, as this was written prior to it. Basically what I mean is, it starts out a little weak, but as I suspected from reading Exchange, it's all set up in place for a reason. Still, Idk what it is about the beginnings of either stories, I think it's how they just happen without warning? it's only after those parts that things start to fall in place more smoothly and events become more self-explanatory. I get why they happened, but you know. we just started and already in the first sentences, Luna was all over Anon and wanting to get in his pants. and did. which, is pretty funny I mean, but, you know.. kinda have to lead me in to that, you know? :p
But enough of the criticism, let me talk things I like now..
1. The train ride. First off, I really like that, it was starting off to go into a weird place, but by God, you turned it around and more important, the mane 6 are actually acting like themselves, it's actually uncanny just how much they cheer themselves up and reminisce me of the way they act in the show and the reason I say this is because of one important thing here that happened, they all kept each others' spirit up, because, they are with each other and they get over it through their strong friendship. Never do I think I've seen the mane 6 do this in any fanfiction, I may have seen consolation from one to another between them, but to see all 6 of them help out each other like this and get over something like this, together, mainly because PP is the catalyst and booster to keeping this group of friend's from depression, then Fluttershy, then Rarity and Aj and all of a sudden, everyone is just enjoying the moment?
Good times, good times indeed.. that was easily, the best part so far that I've seen, but there are more anyway, I'm just saying I was really impressed there.
2. The little thing at the end of the previous chapter was also really good. Again, kinda like with Exchange and seeing how this was written before it, I was worried about what I'd see from Twilight (given that AJ previously pulverized Anon's penis not too long ago.. JESUS AJ!..). That didn't go as I expected, it blew my mind how well all of that went.. You expert, rootin' tootin', eagle-eyed, Pony-lovin' writer! You did it again, you set up EVERYTHING in that!!!
And in the end, Everybody still loses!God Damn you, that went so good at the end.. The heartfelt speech, the honesty, the little moment and then, the guilt followed by anon doing what he did for Twi. I may be building this up too much tbh, the earlier part was far more unexpected and off-guard catching, plus it seems kinda pedantic when I explain the steps, formulaic really, but there are so many pitfalls and little traps there and things that could go wrong, something any writer would just write something that just feeling good at the moment as opposed to feeling like it's the right thing to happen, in any case, it's not how it sounds, it's how emotional it ended up being and that's what matters in the end, because I felt that Twilight and Anon genuinely got a better bonding from that than anywhere else.3. [time stop] [time stop time stop time stop 7 seconds 7 seconds 7 seconds X seconds] ZA WARU-
I'll show myself out.
eh, enough listing.. All I can say is, I'm having fun with this! I'll admit, at some points it is a little bit on the cringe side, but this is turning surprisingly fun. :) I like the moments that turn into very genuine acts, I think that's what draws the most enjoyment in what you wrote here, they can get really good and I don't think that was done on accident, it's just what I like best in all this. Still, I'm not going to knock away some pretty funny moments, like the armor, or Anon beating Luna at the game, Anon's little chat with Spike, there are many small moments that made it all worth while.
I see what you mean by Exchange being better though, still got a few chapters to see by how much/little, but it is pretty much as you explained and a little bit of what I was expecting too. :)
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Damn fine chapter. Dont see Derpy as a villain before ♡ I loved it
Oh yeah~