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Interesting idea, the only thing is that in the episode Fluttershy admitted she didn't understand the bats before the spell had been cast...
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But only because she had never been around them before, and they weren't all that... natural.
No more D:
Short sad story. Excellent premise. Connects with the readers nicely. Well written. But it feels like it can be continued, like it's too soon to end it.
Yeah, I think it still has some steam left for a couple of more chapters. PM-ing you an idea now...
Shelving and Thumbs upping.
Possible corrections/improvements:
1. Twilight mentally berates herself for tempering with something's nature.
- This is kinda stated awkwardly. But I know what you mean, "Twilight mentally berates herself for tampering with some creatures' nature."
2. And what about all the bats she toke care of when they return from migration?