Love it when this story updates. Kal is my new favorite side character in the story with his bucket list. Also, it was nice to see Celestia put the reporters in their place, comfort a child, be embarrassed by the "love news," intimidate the police/agents, and...proving that she's a female to the agents. This chapter showed the most development of Celestia's character which, along with Marcus' reunion with his mother, makes this one of the best chapters of the story.
Poking fun at your own MC? Love it. Hm....after a while the government would send a couple people into Equis to check it out right? Like, live there and relay info back or setting up an embassy or something?
While I think the government would want to try and establish peace, they would probably want to be on the top when it comes to defense and military. And what Celestia said probably made them frightened enough to think of a way to counter it. With the little tidbit about emps and and weaponizing magic, the US government might be already in the works of creating things to try and counter it. They will need it incase they find oil in equestria need to combat terrorist changelings
5328396 Yeah, I know right! Who knew their stomachs can stretch that far! They probably need to drink Nebulas filled Pepto Bismol to calm their guts. Damn!
In all seriousness, Yes I noticed the countless spelling and grammar Errors in this story, but by the likes of me I'm too lazy to correct them. Maybe I'll edit the story some time in the future but who knows, I can't even trust myself with making deadlines with these stories now.
That entire meeting was painful to read through. I ended up just skipping most of it. Yeah, let's just have everyone act as hostile as possible, and have Celestia outright threaten war.
I honestly wish this entire plot line of getting a treaty or whatever never happened and that he just stayed in Equestria for this story (preferably without ever mentioning humanity), because the moment politics (or really humanity in general) is mentioned all forms of characterization and suspension of disbelief goes right down the drain. I don't think I've ever seen so many idiot balls being thrown around by just a couple of characters, but it made this chapter extremely painful to read through.
Just, cut out the stupid misanthropy. It's outright wrong, doesn't fit with the story, makes the main character sound absolutely idiotic and hypocritical, and is more annoying than interesting.
5808503 Yeah, I'm with you on this. I've been meaning to edit and rewrite everything about this story, but I either don't have the time or just being too lazy to do so. I know something was wrong with each chapter and the characters, but I couldn't see them at the time. I don't have an editor to look them over and I can't really trust myself to spot every error whenever I look it over. I was on a strict schedule at the time and had too many stories that needed my attention.
It's fine. Really, I shouldn't have even bothered mentioning it when I saw that the chapters were several months old and the story itself was on hiatus. I guess my criticism was more for if you ever decide to go back to it later on. In which case, good luck with your writing.
Ignoring the fact that humanity has made some absolutely incredible advances in every field you can think of, and ignoring the fact that those advances made by "stupid" people are the only reason you are currently able to leave a comment on the Internet about how horrible people are, and ignoring how civilization as it is currently is the only reason you have a life that does not consist solely of survival, let's instead focus on the ponies.
Yes, the princesses have created an absolutely incredibly country.But, there happens to be this lovely thing most of these ridiculous misanthropic stories forget about called Context. There are also reasons why they have such a paradise and we don't (which, to be honest, is completely debatable). First, nature in its entirety works differently on their world. The weather is controlled, the animals are controlled, even the seasons are controlled. Consider the Everfree Forest; the reason that place scares them so much is mainly due to it not being controlled. Yeah, there are monsters there (oh yeah, real paradise there. ), but you'll notice that when they mentioned what scared them, it was the uncontrolled aspect. The fact that the weather is random, the plants grow on their own, and the animals can fend for themselves. In other words, to them our entire planet would be one gigantic Everfree Forest. So yeah, they definitely have a paradise, but because their world basically gave them everything they needed on a silver platter.
Another big reason they have their great lifestyle is that their leaders are pretty much the textbook definition of a perfect leader. Celestia and Luna (and now Cadance and Twilight) are both incredibly kind ponies who are just and noble in their rule as well as being very smart and all have a genuine interest in doing what's best for their ponies. Now, there have been human rulers with similar mindsets. The difference? As far as we've seen, the princesses are immortal. They have the perfect form of benevolent dictatorship because their rulers don't die to old age. The reason humanity can never have a perfect benevolent dictatorship is due to the fact that whoever great leader happens to be ruling will not always be ruling, and there is no way to know if their descendant will be as good a leader, and even if their descendant is also a great ruler, then it is still pretty much impossible for every single descendant to also end up a good ruler. The ponies don't have this problem.
So yeah, ponies have a pretty good life. Humanity does not currently have a perfect and benevolent dictatorship. Obviously that's due to people being horrible ("except for me, because I'm the special snowflake every other human should be!" - Every bad HiE protagonist ever) and no other reason.
6289191 Sorry. I'm in Guatemala right now and I don't really have that much time to think and write while I'm here; too much work to be done, and I'm not entirely comfortable here. I should be going back home in Canada in about a week and a half, though.
6290708 Well, I'm back in my humble-home now, so probably either next month, or the month after that. I'm working on a story that I really want to finish, and when I do finish it I'll work on "Life's a Beach" first to get it out of the way, then move onto "Lovely Rarity" the next.
Oh Marcus…TMZ most be feeling like Christmas came early, and to a princess no less, I think this is the biggest news, Earth had face to the day
5090121 Yeah, pretty much.
Love it when this story updates. Kal is my new favorite side character in the story with his bucket list. Also, it was nice to see Celestia put the reporters in their place, comfort a child, be embarrassed by the "love news," intimidate the police/agents, and...proving that she's a female to the agents. This chapter showed the most development of Celestia's character which, along with Marcus' reunion with his mother, makes this one of the best chapters of the story.
5090215 Glad to hear you enjoyed it.
Poking fun at your own MC? Love it. Hm....after a while the government would send a couple people into Equis to check it out right? Like, live there and relay info back or setting up an embassy or something?
Ohohoho! Things turned out really interesting really quickly!
I also like the attitude of Kal. Seems like a swell dude.
5090754 Yeah, something like that.
5091631 Methinks I have an idea.
5090833 Swell, indeed.
While I think the government would want to try and establish peace, they would probably want to be on the top when it comes to defense and military. And what Celestia said probably made them frightened enough to think of a way to counter it.
With the little tidbit about emps and and weaponizing magic, the US government might be already in the works of creating things to try and counter it. They will need it incase they
find oil in equestrianeed to combat terrorist changelingsI should really stop over analyzing stuff
5091938 Eh, you're not far from the truth, anyways. I and Lightingace were talking about the problems that would arise with first contact.
cant wait for wats next
5091938
Eeyup believed or not, that was why we put the kiss scene, it will had a function later on, just so you know
This story getting good, i can't wait to read more, i better re-read again.
Not a bad story. A little cliche at points but I can gloss over that easily enough.
Keep 'em comin'.
5127766 Glad to hear.
5129976 aahh...i see.
man I just read everything you have so far and I can't wait for the next chapter
5153684 Glad to hear you enjoyed it.
5154281 thanks see you next chapter
looking forward to more, love this story
stay classy
5328396 Yeah, I know right! Who knew their stomachs can stretch that far! They probably need to drink Nebulas filled Pepto Bismol to calm their guts. Damn!
In all seriousness, Yes I noticed the countless spelling and grammar Errors in this story, but by the likes of me I'm too lazy to correct them. Maybe I'll edit the story some time in the future but who knows, I can't even trust myself with making deadlines with these stories now.
I can't wait for more!!!!!! :D
I want more!
5457259 Hopefully we'll get the story started once more this month, if not, then the next month, but no promises.
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5457306
5457306 Got it.
15 weeks has pass...no update yet.
5548272 So sorry for the long wait, I'm just a little occupied with other things that needs my attention.
5548709 Alright...thank for reply. it you have alots time in you school or work - busy.
then don't worry. but don't ever leave this story.
5570168 Yeah, made a mistake there. I meant "bare" not "bear".
That entire meeting was painful to read through. I ended up just skipping most of it. Yeah, let's just have everyone act as hostile as possible, and have Celestia outright threaten war.
I honestly wish this entire plot line of getting a treaty or whatever never happened and that he just stayed in Equestria for this story (preferably without ever mentioning humanity), because the moment politics (or really humanity in general) is mentioned all forms of characterization and suspension of disbelief goes right down the drain. I don't think I've ever seen so many idiot balls being thrown around by just a couple of characters, but it made this chapter extremely painful to read through.
Just, cut out the stupid misanthropy. It's outright wrong, doesn't fit with the story, makes the main character sound absolutely idiotic and hypocritical, and is more annoying than interesting.
5808503 Yeah, I'm with you on this. I've been meaning to edit and rewrite everything about this story, but I either don't have the time or just being too lazy to do so. I know something was wrong with each chapter and the characters, but I couldn't see them at the time. I don't have an editor to look them over and I can't really trust myself to spot every error whenever I look it over. I was on a strict schedule at the time and had too many stories that needed my attention.
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It's fine. Really, I shouldn't have even bothered mentioning it when I saw that the chapters were several months old and the story itself was on hiatus. I guess my criticism was more for if you ever decide to go back to it later on. In which case, good luck with your writing.
5817104 Thanks, it means a lot.
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Ignoring the fact that humanity has made some absolutely incredible advances in every field you can think of, and ignoring the fact that those advances made by "stupid" people are the only reason you are currently able to leave a comment on the Internet about how horrible people are, and ignoring how civilization as it is currently is the only reason you have a life that does not consist solely of survival, let's instead focus on the ponies.
Yes, the princesses have created an absolutely incredibly country.But, there happens to be this lovely thing most of these ridiculous misanthropic stories forget about called Context. There are also reasons why they have such a paradise and we don't (which, to be honest, is completely debatable). First, nature in its entirety works differently on their world. The weather is controlled, the animals are controlled, even the seasons are controlled. Consider the Everfree Forest; the reason that place scares them so much is mainly due to it not being controlled. Yeah, there are monsters there (oh yeah, real paradise there. ), but you'll notice that when they mentioned what scared them, it was the uncontrolled aspect. The fact that the weather is random, the plants grow on their own, and the animals can fend for themselves. In other words, to them our entire planet would be one gigantic Everfree Forest. So yeah, they definitely have a paradise, but because their world basically gave them everything they needed on a silver platter.
Another big reason they have their great lifestyle is that their leaders are pretty much the textbook definition of a perfect leader. Celestia and Luna (and now Cadance and Twilight) are both incredibly kind ponies who are just and noble in their rule as well as being very smart and all have a genuine interest in doing what's best for their ponies. Now, there have been human rulers with similar mindsets. The difference? As far as we've seen, the princesses are immortal. They have the perfect form of benevolent dictatorship because their rulers don't die to old age. The reason humanity can never have a perfect benevolent dictatorship is due to the fact that whoever great leader happens to be ruling will not always be ruling, and there is no way to know if their descendant will be as good a leader, and even if their descendant is also a great ruler, then it is still pretty much impossible for every single descendant to also end up a good ruler. The ponies don't have this problem.
So yeah, ponies have a pretty good life. Humanity does not currently have a perfect and benevolent dictatorship. Obviously that's due to people being horrible ("except for me, because I'm the special snowflake every other human should be!" - Every bad HiE protagonist ever) and no other reason.
better, hope you start up the story agian soon
Why are all the amazing stories on hiatus Good work. Please keep it up!
Man what's taking so long you need to get the store rollin something this good shouldn't take this long
6289191 Sorry. I'm in Guatemala right now and I don't really have that much time to think and write while I'm here; too much work to be done, and I'm not entirely comfortable here. I should be going back home in Canada in about a week and a half, though.
6290640 how long do you think it will take before you get the story going again
6290640 ooohhhhh... love this! I can't wait till next chapter.
6290708 Well, I'm back in my humble-home now, so probably either next month, or the month after that. I'm working on a story that I really want to finish, and when I do finish it I'll work on "Life's a Beach" first to get it out of the way, then move onto "Lovely Rarity" the next.
so......when the next chapter?????
6804441 I don't really know, actually. I've been working on a few others things.
6806461 Ah that's understandable but I cant wait till the next part
So Amazing please continue
7313922 I've been thinking about the story as of late but I don't know when exactly I'll post another chapter in the future.
I hope a new chapter comes soon
7314786 if you do post another chapter ill be your best friend