Chapter 21: Unwinding
When the carriage pulled up in front of the castle, Auntie Celeste and I climbed out and stretched our limbs. Celeste even stretched out her wings.
“I really need to invest in bigger carriages,” she said, more to herself than to me. “You know. I don’t really feel like walking up to my room. How about I fly us up there?”
I shrugged my shoulders. “Sure. Why not?” Flying didn’t really bother me much, considering that I had flown with Luna before.
Celeste lit up her horn and coated me with a levitation spell. She then spread her wings and flew up into the sky, taking me with her. As we flew up, I turned my head to look at my aunt, and I took a deep breath before saying what I was about to say.
“Auntie…”
“Yes, nephew?”
“I know this may be a touchy subject for you, so stop me if I cross the line.”
Celeste gave me a concerned look. “Okay… What’s on your mind?”
“Well, about how you can’t carry a foal… have you ever considered a surrogate mother?”
My aunt sighed and stayed quiet for a second, and then she chuckled a little. “Believe me, that was the first thing I thought of once surrogacy became a thing, but when I asked about it, I was told that no normal mare would have been able to bear the child of an alicorn, and while there are three other living alicorns now, it wouldn’t be right of me to have them bear my burden.”
I let out an understanding sigh.
“Not only that, but… After what I had been through, I became really uncomfortable with any kind of invasive medical procedure. It’s almost like a phobia for me.”
“Oh, okay. Sorry for bringing it up.”
Celeste looked at me and smiled, and then she levitated me closer to her. “Don’t worry about it, Marcus,” she said. “I actually feel a little better talking to you about it.”
“That’s good to know,” I smiled back, and we finally reached the window to Celeste’s room. She pulled me closer to her and held me in her arms as she focused her magic on opening the window.
“Why are you carrying me bridal style?” I asked. “I’ve seen you focus your magic on two things before.”
“I have, but I don’t want to take any chances,” she answered, and then she nuzzled me. “You are my precious nephew after all!”
I laughed and pushed her face away from me. “Alright, alright. Quit it.”
My aunt gave me a smug expression. “You used to love it when I nuzzled you.”
“Key word: used to. Can you put me down now?”
She shrugged. “I suppose so,” she conceded as she let me down on the ground.
“You always tend to revel in the days when I was a little kid,” I told my aunt as I took a seat on her bed.
“You are a little kid. Compared to me, at least,” she smirked as she sat next to me.
“Everyone in Equestria is a little kid compared to you.”
“Hmph. Touché,” said Celeste, “but can you really blame me, though? You used to love when I would come over to your house to visit. I remember when you were just a toddler and you loved poking my snout.”
“You mean like this?” I asked as I prodded my aunt’s snout with my finger, and she reflexively scrunched her face, causing me to laugh. “Now I remember why I loved doing it. That face you make is hilarious.”
“What face.”
An evil smile appeared on my face. I raised my finger and poked her again, which made Celeste make the face again. “That face,” I said.
“Stooooooooop!” she whined as she covered her muzzle with her hands.
“Fine,” I easily conceded.
“I hope you don’t do that to Rarity and Octavia.”
“I never really thought about it. I wonder how they’d react, though.”
“Well, don’t do it,” Celeste demanded.
“And why not?”
“Because that’s our thing for us to do.”
I scoffed. “Somepony’s getting possessive.”
“Possessive? Me? Feh, I am not possessive.”
“I beg to differ,” somepony said from outside.
My head, as well as Celeste’s, turned to the bedroom door, which was cracked open a little. The door then opened fully, and Luna poked her head inside sticking her tongue out at her older sister. The elder princess returned the gesture.
“I thought you two were going out for the day,” Luna said as she walked in and shut the door behind her. She was eating a cookie that (I assumed) was left over from her morning binge.
“We just got back,” said Celeste.
“How long have you been eavesdropping?” I asked.
“Not too long,” she answered. “Honestly, the only thing I heard was Tia saying ‘I’m not possessive,’ and I just decided to object.” She then jumped on the bed beside me and Celeste.
“Luna!” the elder sister scolded. “You’re getting crumbs all over my sheets!”
“Am not!” the younger princess argued.
“Are too!”
“Am not!”
“Are too!”
“Am not!”
“Are too!”
“You two bicker like children,” I commented.
The two alicorn sisters scoffed at me. “No we don’t,” they said simultaneously.
I rolled my eyes at their denial.
“So, how was your day out?” Luna asked.
Celeste smiled. “Well, first we went to the arcade, and-”
“You? At an arcade? That’s a surprise.”
“I thought I’d give video games a try. Anyway, Marcus won a ticket jackpot and generously got this little cutie for me!” She held up Sunshine so Luna could see.
“Okay, here’s what really happened,” I interjected. “Your sister cheated and used magic to make the roulette stop at the jackpot, and then she used my tickets to buy the toy.”
“Why am I not surprised?” Luna sighed.
“Anyway, after we left the arcade, Marcus and I ran into two lady friends of his from school, and we all went to a diner to get something to eat.”
“You didn’t embarrass him, did you?”
“What do you think?” I asked.
“You’re exaggerating,” Celeste said with a dismissive wave.
“She started talking about marriage and future children and how good I was at kissing, and at the end of it all, she practically threatened them!”
Luna shook her head. “For ponies’ sake, Tia. You’re a walking mare repellant. Marcus will never court a mare with you practically scaring them off.”
“If they’re so easily frightened, then maybe they shouldn’t be with my precious nephew,” said Celeste. “Hang on, why are you so open to Marcus having a marefriend? Don’t you like him, too?”
Luna’s eyed widened, and then she looked at me. “You told her!?” she asked.
“No!” I answered. “I just said that I liked you, not the other way around!”
“To be honest, I just guessed that you liked him,” Celestia admitted. “After Marcus told me about his feelings for you, I noticed how affectionate you were with him. That affection seemed more than familial to me.” She then looked right at us. “So where do you two stand, now?”
Luna and I blushed. “Well, we decided that… we should just stay friends,” I said.
“Exactly,” Luna added. “We just weren’t… ‘feeling it,’ in laypony’s terms.”
We looked at Celeste for a reaction, and we could have sworn we saw her let out a sigh of relief. “What was that for?” Luna asked.
“Oh, nothing. I’m just glad you two settled things amicably and without any animosity,” she said, although I kind of felt like that wasn’t the real reason why she sighed like that. “However, what are you going to do now, Luna? Marcus may have two other mares he can choose, but what about you?”
“What about me?” she asked back. “I’m in no rush to find someone. Instead of chasing, I prefer waiting on the right one to come along and chase me. Who knows? Maybe I’ll try courting females and see how that fares.”
“You giving up on the male species just like that?” I asked.
“I don’t think that love should be limited by gender.”
“Point taken,” Celeste and I said.
The three of us stayed on the bed for a little while longer until Celeste spoke up. “Anyone up for a movie?” she asked. “I could use a good laugh.”
Luna and I shrugged. “Sure, why not?” we answered.
My aunt smiled and used her magic to teleport us to the castle theater, which had a massive viewing screen. She then walked up to the cabinet of movies she had collected over the years, wondering which one she should pick.
“Um… aren’t we allowed to weigh in on what movie we watch?” Luna asked.
“Don’t worry~” Celeste answered with a singsong voice. “You two are gonna love the movie I’ve picked!”
“Why do I doubt that?” I thought.
My aunt then turned around and showed us the movie she picked.
“Power Pony Adventures!?” I asked incredulously. “That PG movie!? I saw that when I was ten!”
“That’s it, I’m picking the movie,” Luna said with finality as she walked past her sister and looked through the cabinet herself.
“We’re looking for a comedy right? Okay, let’s see… That one’s alright… This one’s a little better… Oh, that one’s just abysmal… Ah! Here’s a good one!”
Luna took out the DVD case and showed it to me and Celeste. It was a buddy cop film that came out almost a year ago.
“Now that’s more like it!” I said.
“I suppose,” Celeste conceded.
“Then it’s settled! We shall watch this one!” Luna declared happily.
While Auntie Celeste started the movie up, I helped Luna get the popcorn machine going. The last time she tried to do it by herself, it didn’t work out so well.
And by that, I meant her mane got caught in the machine.
Thankfully, with me helping her, that didn’t happen again. Once the popcorn was all ready to go, Luna and I took our seats next to Celeste and got comfortable. I didn’t go to the castle theater that often since I usually opted to just watch movies on my computer, but the seats in there were very comfortable.
As the movie went on, Luna and I were practically dying from laughter. Celeste laughed, too, but not as much as we did. By the time the film ended, Luna and I were in tears.
“Oh, man…” I said, trying to steady my breathing. “That movie was a friggin’ riot-OW!”
“Tia! What was that for!?”
“I warned him about his language, Luna,” the older princess answered.
“Stop being so strict with him,” said the younger princess. “We’re all having fun here, aren’t we?”
Celeste paused for a moment, and then she chuckled. “I guess you’re right. While the humor was a little crude, the movie was still enjoyable.”
“I’m glad you feel that way,” Luna giggled. “Now, if you two will excuse me, I need to find Withers and, as they say, ‘mess with him’.”
“Mess with him?” her sister asked, confused about what she meant.
“I think he needs a quick reminder from my guardian angel.”
“What just happened to your voice?”
I chuckled. “Don’t worry about it, Celeste. It’s an inside joke.”
She raised an eyebrow at me. “Hmph. Okay then. See you later Luna.”
The younger princess lit up her horn and teleported out of the theater, and Celeste and I opted to walk back to my room.
“I hope you two aren’t spending your spare time picking on that poor old stallion,” she said.
“Pssh, we’re not picking on him at all.”
“Then what are you doing?”
“I said not to worry about it, didn’t I?”
“Whenever it involves you and Luna, I always worry. You two are diabolical.”
I laughed. “Diabolical? Now you’re just exaggerating. We’re mischievous, maybe, but not diabolical.”
Celeste rolled her eyes. “Bottom line, you two cause trouble. You’re like Bonnie and Clyde.”
“Hm… I never thought of it that way,” I pondered. “We should totally call each other Bonnie and Clyde!”
My aunt shook her head with a chuckle. “You are something else, Marcus.”
“Yeah, well, so are you.”
“I guess you have a point there.”
“Oh! Before I forget, do Rarity and Octavia have any plans for Hearth’s Warming this year?”
“Well, Octavia said that her old roommate was coming to town, but aside from that, I have no idea about their holiday plans.”
“Well, when you get the chance, Marcus, let them know that I’m holding a small get-together for Hearth’s Warming Eve, and that they’re welcome to come if they want. Octavia can even bring her friend if she wants to.”
“I’ll try to remember that,” I said.
After a few more minutes of walking, Celeste and I finally reached my room.
“Well, I should get to lowering the sun,” she told me, “which means that the day’s over.”
“Bummer. It seems like it went by so fast,” I said.
“Even so, it was still fun. Thanks for spending the day with me, Marcus. It really means a lot to me.”
“No problem, Auntie.”
“I’m glad I was able to spend some auntie-nephew time with you. I was starting to wonder if you had outgrown me.”
I laughed. “Believe me, that’ll never happen.”
Celeste smiled, and her eyes began to water. “Oh, come here, you!” she said as she pulled me into a warm, surprisingly soft hug. “You are just the sweetest little thing! You always know what to say to me.”
“I try,” I chuckled, and I hugged my aunt back, but then I felt her grip get tighter on me. It wasn’t long before I felt my bones beginning to crack. I began to hit Celeste’s sides with my fists in an effort to get her attention.
“Air, air, air, air, AIR!!!” I yelled, losing more oxygen with each passing second. My aunt looked down and saw my face turning blue, and she immediately let me go.
“Oh, I’m sorry Marcus!” she said. “I didn’t know I was hurting you.”
“It’s fine…” I sighed as I rubbed the sides of my arms. “It’s a wonder where you get all that strength, though.”
“I’m an alicorn, sweetheart,” she boasted. “I’ve got the grace of a pegasus, the magical prowess of a unicorn, and the brute strength of an earth pony.”
I rolled my eyes at her bravado. “Don’t you have a sun to lower?”
“Alright, alright. I get it. I’ll see you tomorrow, okay?”
“Sure.”
Auntie Celeste smiled and bent down to give me a kiss on the cheek. I instinctively raised my hand to wipe it off, but then I saw her light up her horn.
“Don’t you dare,” she warned.
I smirked and walked into my room, wiping my cheek once I closed the door.
It was nighttime. Minutes to eleven, to be exact. I spent the last few hours either doodling away in my sketchbook or using my computer. I had already showered and changed into my sleeping clothes, and I decided that it would be best to finally go to sleep since I had class the next morning.
However, just when I had gotten comfortable and was about to turn off the light on my nightstand, I heard a knock at my door.
“The hell?” I thought as I got out of the bed and approached the door. I slowly opened it, curious as to who would want to see me at this hour, and not a second later, I got my answer.
Unfortunately, it wasn’t an answer that I was particularly happy with.
“Honey Pot?” I asked in disbelief.
“Hello, Marcus,” the mare said with an uncharacteristically serious tone.
“What the hell are you doing here so late?”
“Never mind that. Can I come in? We need to talk.”
I rubbed my temples in annoyance. “What could we possibly have to talk about that can’t wait ‘till morning?”
“Could you just let me in, please?” she snapped insistently.
I rolled my eyes and let the mare in, knowing that if I kept this conversation going, I’d never get any sleep. “Fine, but make it quick. I have class tomorrow.”
Honey Pot nodded and walked in. Now that she was in the light, I was able to see her, and what she was wearing, more clearly.
She wore a white nightgown with thin straps. Not only were the straps thin, but so was the fabric of the garment itself; I was able to see the silhouette of her figure underneath; her delicate hourglass figure with those proportionate double D's, her lithe waist, her womanly hips and perfectly developed thighs...
I'll give this mare some credit; she never fails to make herself known.
“So, what do you want?” I asked.
“Like I said, sweetheart, we need to talk,” she answered.
My eye twitched at the irritating name she called me, but I didn’t voice my annoyance and instead tried to get her to say what she needed to say. “About what?” I asked.
“You seem to be ignoring me lately, Marcus. You’ve been out all day today and yesterday, and you’ve been staying late at school for the past week, too.”
“Have you not noticed that I’m always ignoring you?” I asked as I walked towards my bed. “If this is all you need to tell me, then- HEY!”
All of a sudden, Honey Pot wrapped her arms around me from behind, hugging me close to her. She smelled of peach-scented shampoo and her coat felt more delicate and tender than before.
Had she been conditioning it for me?
“Will you let go!?” I asked angrily.
I felt her shake her head against my back. “I miss having you around, Marcus. I’ve been seeing you less and less often, and I won’t have it!” She then took in a big whiff of my scent, and I shivered uncomfortably. “You have no idea how badly I’ve missed you.”
I pried myself out of the mare’s grip, only to fall forward onto my bed. By the time I rolled onto my back, she was already on top of me. Her nimble fingers were clamped onto my wrists like steel traps as she leveled her head with mine, her mane cascading down my face and almost into my eyes. From this point of view, I had a clear shot of her almost bare hanging breasts, erotically swaying under the slightest motion.
“That’s it, Honey Pot!” I quietly yelled. “I’m done joking around! Get off of me!”
“You don’t seem to understand, sweetheart. I’m not joking,” she told me with a tone that scared me. “I’ve made my desires very clear, and you haven’t done a thing to satisfy them.”
“That’s not my responsibility!”
“I know. I’ve realized that. I shouldn’t have left it up to you. You know what they say; if you want something that badly, you have to take it.” The mare lowered her head towards me and nuzzled my cheek. “I’ve given you enough chances. Hell, I’ve practically thrown myself at you, but you haven’t done a thing about it, so I’ll have to take matters into my own hands.”
“But I have-”
“Shhh…” she said as she gently placed a finger on my lips. “Not another word. You don’t need to say a thing. Just relax and let me do all the work. You’ll love it, I promise.”
Despite Honey Pot’s vow, I wasn’t convinced that I was going to love this at all. I struggled underneath her, only for all my squirming to be in vain.
Damn her and her earth pony strength.
I soon had my face forcefully pressed against her soft bosom. I couldn’t deny I did kind-of enjoy the feeling of that soft-as-a-cloud rack mashing itself against my visage, forcefully making me motorboat it. The mare also started grinding her legs against my crotch, moaning at the contact it was making with the tent I had long since pitched, and also… Oh God, she wasn’t wearing anything down there!
I didn’t know how much more I can take without cheating on my mare friends! I had to do something! Anything! My mind went into full panic mode when I felt her reaching for my pants!
Thankfully, because of Honey Pot’s small size, my legs were mostly free, and I kicked around in an effort to get out from under the psychotic mare. One of my legs ended up knocking into my nightstand, and not two seconds later, I heard the sound of glass breaking.
My eyes widened, and I began to panic. “What was that?” I thought. “Please don’t let it be…”
“What’s with the look on your face?” asked Honey Pot. She sat up and looked behind her, and in that momentary lapse of attention, I pushed her off of me and looked to see what fell off my nightstand. I looked and saw that it was a picture frame that fell, and when I picked it up, I saw that the glass on the frame had cracked.
The picture was of me and Octavia.
The more I looked at the crack in the frame, the angrier I got. “You see what you did!?” I scolded Honey Pot. “You just can’t take no for an answer, can you!?”
Instead of responding to me, the mare’s eyes were fixated on the picture I was holding. “Who… who’s that?”
“That’s not any of your business,” I said coldly. “Besides, even if I told you, I doubt that you would care.”
The maid continued to stare at the photo, taking notice of how close Octavia and I were to each other. “She’s your marefriend, isn’t she?” she asked.
I sighed. “That’s one way to put it.”
“That’s what you’ve been trying to tell me, wasn’t it… You liked another mare, and that’s why… you didn’t want me.”
Finally, she was getting it.
The mare looked down and sighed. “Fuck… I’m such an idiot. I can’t believe I was so stubborn.” She sighed again and somberly stood up from my bed. “I’m… I’m sorry for causing all this trouble, Marcus, and I’m sorry for ruining your picture. I know my apology probably isn’t worth much, but… I’m really sorry.”
I didn’t say anything as the mare walked away and left my room. It was strange; while I was incredibly angry at her for nearly raping me and making me break my picture frame, part of me was a little glad that she finally got the message that I wasn’t into her.
I sighed and set the picture back on my nightstand. “I’ll have to replace the frame one of these days,” I thought, and I climbed back into bed, pulling the covers over me as I drifted into slumber.
Wait, so Honey Pot took the hint?
I guess you all are still recovering from that. Don't worry. Just because Honey Pot has seen how crazy she's been, doesn't mean I'll just abandon her. There will be some closure with her, just not now.
We're getting closer and closer to the end of the story!
Again, sorry for the confusion that people have been getting over this chapter's submission. Hopefully this was worth the wait.
As always, let me know what you thought of the chapter in the comments. I'm not too sure how well this one came out, especially the first half, so let me know how you guys felt.
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Yay update!
Thought that it was really good!!
And that ending…
Dafuq
Oh hey, it has updated for real
I laughed at the image of Marcus poking Celestia in the snout and the face she made. Then it got even better when he called her out on being possessive, and Luna chimed in just to disagree with Celestia. They are definitely siblings.
I want to see what on earth is going on with Honey Pot now. She downshifted from rapetastic to stop and bypassed all the gears in between. There's a story there waiting to be told.
He is introducing her to some of his human friends, or convince her to go to earth on vacation to find love, I can see that happening, she work on the castle she must had money
Had I not had a mouth full of food when I read the ending I think I would have laughed hard enough to make my lungs hurt. That being said I loved this chapter a lot.
I love how Honey Pot is all for rape until she learns her victim is in a relationship. Priorities!
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First real piece of criticism, across both this story and FC, is that you have used this little phrase a decent amount recently and I have to say I never much found the purpose of this across either it's humorous application nor it's actual 'serious' usage. It feels kind of like what people would say to 'kind of' get something but not fully interpret it. It's a short, not that sweet way of avoiding a real personal response, to me at least. There could've been a nice discussion at this part, more personal teasing and and interaction about the topic but it was filled with 'point taken'. It's so blank, I notice it immediately and it pops out and just feels...ugh. It saves words but doesn't apply a real understanding through verbal usage and is kind of saying 'That's it? Okay.' I don't know, it's a phrase that always strikes me as being simply...I'd even say slightly pretentious, anti-climactic even. It defies personality too, seeing as it had comparatively no change in tone or meaning between it's usage here and in FC. Although maybe I'm being a bit over-exaggerative...but it's always good to keep an eye out for phrases you might use too much anyways.
Other than that, I think this came out alright. Happy environment and everything, followed by a revelation. I feel Honey Pot's character is a little sporadic here, having been mentally desperate enough to nearly rape him, only to 'see the light' the moment she assumes he has a girlfriend. Or, 'marefriend' in this case. If she's going to deny him the right to tell her he has someone in the first place, it should make sense that she'd deny it through and through. Even become more desperate, harmful or insane even as she becomes more focused on him. Competitive. To think, she might've had a chance if she wasn't so overly-assertive on the first meeting. I get she has to come to her senses or be dealt with somehow, but I think an important thing you might want to work on is character stability, making sure characters can remain appropriately designed for their situations. And don't always let the 'good ending' influence a character and their actions. Just because it 'has' to end nicely doesn't mean the path there has to be full of understanding. That's one of the big things I'm glad for with FC is that it's whole basis is more on the darker aspect so I feel it might be both a good read and good practice in writing things with negativity in mind, as opposed to what everyone normally thinks about with writing positively. Granted characters don't ALWAYS have to be bad and things don't always have to be dark but I did feel like that whole scene with Honey pot was...like a firework...that didn't go off. Big build up, huge expectancy! Then a quiet...sudden and peaceful resolution.
So big points: Phrase repetition and character stability. You're still doing very well and I still enjoy your style, I just want to give my two cents considering I LIKE your stories and hope I can be a part of the influence that can help them improve.
Jeez these do get kinda long...
With such great stories, they must end. For this story i wish it never ends haha
Loved the chapter though, it was nice seeing tia,luna, and marcus together.
I really don't want this story to end. I love it too much.
I feel kinda bad for Honey Pot. Not about her rape attempt failing, but for not realizing Marcus was in a relationship. I hope those two make up and become just friends.
Fimfiction didn't tell me this updated...
I'm kinda hoping for reconcilliation between Marcus and Honey Pot just so they aren't on bad terms (despite the near rape experience)
You know, I'm surprised Honey Pot accepted this so easily... Almost TOO easily. Just tell the raper that you're in a relationship, and *snap* she gives up just like that? I don't know about you, but I KNOW there have been cases like this that didn't end like Honey Pot and Marcus did.
I'm wondering how the story finishes, but I'm not gonna let this lie down so soon yet. Plus, you mentioned you were gonna post a chapter that takes Honey's perspective right? At least we can get some depth on what's in her crazy noodles she calls a brain.
The story gets even better! Sad it has to end, but all great stories do.
When i first read that Honey Pot actually stopped, i had to read it like 3 times to make sure i wasn't just seeing things.
Still rooting for Octavia!
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Honey Pot's perspective will be explored in a parallel story that I'll publish titled "MOA: Alternate Perspectives". It'll be published after this story ends.
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Nice. Will you be doing something like that for "Facing Changes" as well?
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Unfortunately, no.
As usual, the Honey Pot scene is the show stealer of the chapter
. Also, it is cute that Celestia and Marcus are bonding together.
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Eh, it happens I suppose. Anyway, looking forward to how this ends.
Dayuuuuuuum, Honey Pot. You so cray!
i loved that pound and pumpkin picture Lol, also about time honey got a clue xD. Also it is sweet of Marcus to allow Celstia to smother him a little.
Finally, honey got the hint!
Great story by the way, can't wait for more!
When reading the Honey Pot scene, thought that Celestia might come in. After all, she did say she was keeping tabs on her right?
I still wonder, where is Blue Blood? wouldn't he be noticing that Celestia its paying more attention to Marcus than him?
I half wonder what if Blueblood hired someone to send Marcus very far away so Celestia has no choose but to put more attention to him
I was expecting Honey Pot to go into Yandere mode there for a moment. And it would have been awesome if Celestia crashed in just in time to kick some ass, or at least fire her. XD
I'm going to call this. Honey Pot doesn't give up that easy. She is going to get in the middle of the three of them causing more trouble. I'm sorry but there is no way in hell Honey Pot can be done that fast. It's to simple.
Mayby I'm just messed up, but I was actually hoping for her to rape him and to have the righteous anger of celestia smited upun her. And jail, that to.
Hey I remember something, isn't herd common in Equestria? do you think Honey will come back to her ways once he has an official girlfriend? or now she is going after Octavia since she think she is 'the lead mare' to ask her if she can join the herd?
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You'll find out next chapter.
Honey Pot's change of heart felt a bit rushed. It would have flowed better, if after breaking the picture, Marcus throws her out in a rage, but then, later on feels guilty and settles everything then. But hey, just my two Bits. Good chapter nonetheless.
mind fuck
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Honey Pot still seriously needs to be kicked off the staff and at the very least put into some mandatory psychiatric counselling, and Celestia needs to beg Marcus's forgiveness for not taking his concerns about her seriously :p
I didn't see this update until right now :s when you unpublish and republish a chapter, it doesn't send out notifications the second time, unfortunately. I've accidentally published a chapter before, only for it to be nearly invisible to readers when it went up for real.
Well, this has certainly been quite an amazing ride. And it has yet to end, but so soon and so close it is... I am readying up for the ending. Be it an awesome climax to a wonderful story, or an amazing piece that has yet to complete Marcus' story I will have something for you.
A gift, if you will.
Kinda hope honey pot gets a human she can love and who will love her.
Honey pot should get with Luna.
Awesome she got the hint finally, to bad it's getting close to the end, I want more please
I feel that Octavia is the right one for Marcus. I just don't think that Rarity's and Marcus' personalities really match. As always the new chapter is great, I was surprised to see the character progression in Honey Pot. The two can become really good friends now, god knows Marcus needs a frickin' friend that isn't royalty or a love interest, lol.
Marcus will report Honey Pot for trying to rape him right?
Slow thinker isn't she
Honey Pots about to commit Seppuku
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Wow Honey Pot.
Such strange. Much confusion.
Almost thought she was going to him becouse blueblood forced himself on her and whatever his feelings for her he'd have to hurt somepony.
4175433 Nooooooooooooooo
You're technically not dating them so you won't be cheating on anyone. At the point you're just trying to choose who to date.
Well MAYBE if you TOLD her EARLIER!! You wouldn't have this problem!! Seriously what kind of logic is that? And with that, I shall take Honey Pot to dinner.
And then there were two...
4513236 The second point is invalid because every time he actually tried Honey physically silenced him and prevented him from doing so. Therefore making it impossible to tell her he was in a relationship.
Five minutes later, and my eye is STILL twitching. Honey Pot needs counseling and/or jail time. Regardless of whether or not she knew Marcus is already in a relationship, that does NOT excuse attempted RAPE! This is NOT OKAY!
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Prolly afraid she'd get murdered.
Second type yandere. Worst kind.
Oh, lets see, there was a particular point I wanted to have... Oh yes
When he goes to wioe off the kisses, what I used to do was put my palm or the flats of my fingers on it and then start making circles, then say zi was rubbing it in.