Just a brony, most likely will post at least one story.
Worried about a wailing in the forest that she heard, Fluttershy comes upon an unconscious unicorn. Taking her into her home she notices that he is without a horn. Grey Cloud, the hornless unicorn, now must see if he restore his shattered horn, or live without the one part that made him a magical pony.
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Please explain how Fluttershy knew he was a unicorn, when he has no horn.
Good idea, but there are typos that should get fixed
"mare" means an adult female horse.
large amounts of spelling and mechanical errors lead me to believe this was not edited. it is to the point where it is hard to understand what you are saying. editing is a crucial part of the writing process
the prose is uninteresting and hard to follow. this is my biggest complaint.
was a row of assorted cages fluttershy wouldn't keep animals in cages.
I found you in the forest where i found you...badly hurt.- redundancy
florence nighingale symdrome? fluttershy and this new pony fall in love? please
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There was still a stump left where the horn was broken.
And yes, i do need to edit this. The problem was i hardly was able to get much time to edit this, so this is pretty much straight form the paper i was writing.
when I saw the title, I expected the story to be about somepony wanting a horn, I guess you can call that somepony
*puts on sunglasses*
horny
YEAAAAAAAA
408765 Just... No, bro.
408780 Oh god, not like that! Jeez, dirty minded brony.
408795 I didn't mean it that way, either. Who has the negative mind now?
You need an editor. Even if you edit this yourself I can tell you now you'll need someone else to help you if you want a top notch product. I'm sort of eh about the idea, but if the writing is better I might get on board. I am offering you my services. I pre-read and edit for quite a few authors including the one who wrote 'Dude, We're Ponies' (Only one I can remember right now that was featured fairly recently) Send me this story in a google doc with comments enabled if you want my assistance. Cheers!
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I need to think about that one mr music. Again, lacking time is my problem, so if I do send it it, it might be long in coming. But thanks for offering. I appreciate that a lot.
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So, how comeshe only later notices he is hornless?
It's like seeing a person with an amputated arm, and only notice it's amputated when you go to high-five him.