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Dashed Wings

Rainbow Dash gets the chance to audition for the wonderbolts, but when she gets her chance a mad stallion try's to end her. This will put her against a greater challenge than she could have ever imagined.

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Background_Pony

Background_Pony #1 · Mar 17th, 2012 · · ·

Were, not where.

10art1

10art1 #2 · Mar 17th, 2012 · · ·

Sentences are very choppy, and also check character names, for example it's Soarin', not soren. You didn't even capitalize. Also grammar isn't that good and story isn't very exciting

I'm not trying to be mean, I just think this story could use revision. I would expect the same from anyone

Rarity95

Rarity95 #3 · Mar 17th, 2012 · · ·

Is it yet another "RD loses her wings" fic?

Lt Mania

Lt Mania #4 · Mar 17th, 2012 · · ·

well
is intriguing and interesting
Watch out with the spelling
good story

Hungrybear

Hungrybear #5 · Mar 17th, 2012 · · ·

i cant give anymore than a meh for this story.

The_Pen_Brony

The_Pen_Brony #6 · Mar 18th, 2012 · · ·

thank you for your time reading my fiction and thank you for giving me your criticism they are all very helpful and i appreciate it all i guess this is what happens when i rush a fic out lol i will take my time and fix what needs to be fixed and bump up the story line but seeing as this has already been done i should probably just drop this fic and focus on my others at the moment

The_Pen_Brony

The_Pen_Brony #7 · Mar 18th, 2012 · · ·

... i just realized that this .... was the rough draft ..... i saved the rough draft over the finished bit i have already done and edited ....... man im an idiot