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Blues In The Everfree

Deep in the Everfree forest, there's a swamp. And to make things stranger, a pony resides in that swamp. A pony by the name of Smokestack Lightning. Smokestack lives by himself far out of the public eye. He only has himself and his clunky old guitar. He's never had a single friend, that is until a certain young dragon finds him.

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Requo

Requo #1 · Dec 12th, 2013 · · ·

Kind of nice, at least considering you're still an amateur. Moved along nicely, and not that many holes in it.

Although, Spike couldn't have been gone for too long before Twilight found her, they played a tune for what felt like an hour, but probably wasn't all that much, and then talked a bit. I'd assume by the time Spike was saying he's an orphan would be around the time Twilight is maybe entering the forest. So thus, saying "I thought I'd never find you" is kind of odd.

But other than that little bitty of detail, 't was aight!