“Gimme that!” I yelled at one of the Spartans, making him give me his shotgun. “Come on boys! Follow me and try to keep up!”
We all headed back the way I had come. “Rainbow, get up to the roof tops and tell us if we’re about to run into anyone.”
Fortunately, we didn’t run into any Covenant as we ran back to the alcove.
“OK ponies! Here’s the plan! We’re making a run for safety! Rarity and Twilight, you guys throw stuff at the enemy, but no complex spells! Rainbow, you find a cloud and zap ‘em all! Spartans, you know what to do. The rest of you ponies, keep to cover and keep up. Let’s move up!” I said, the ponies barely having time for it to register.
I ran up to the edge of the city, seeing RD already in position with her cloud. The Covenant were concentrated into 4 groups across the open field, one nearby, one a bit farther in and to the left, another up even farther and to the right, and finally a line of them were the ‘No Man’s Land’ ended.
I focused mainly on the closest one. There were 6 grunts and 3 elite there, along with 3 Ghosts. We had 5 ponies on the ground, as well as 4 spartans. “Okay, Twilight you go with him, Rarity with him…” I continued until I paired them all up, finally taking Pinkie myself. I looked at the second closest group – that one had 4 grunts and 2 elite, all standing over dead human bodies. There were two overturned Mongooses there.
Looking closer at the field, I noted everything. To the left was a cliff face that climbed steeply, as well as a ramp going up the cliff face. A plan formed in my head.
“Okay guys, listen close. Rarity and Twilight and your partners are going to head over there to the group with the four wheelers.” I said, pointing at the second closest group. “As soon as you get over there, the spartan’ll hop on, and you two ponies will have to hang onto your partners. Spartans, go up that ramp over there, and we’ll go along the cliff all the way to friendly territory. Everyone who isn’t going that way, on me. We’ll be going for those Ghosts over there, and doing the exact same thing. Any questions?”
“No? Then let’s move out!”
Me, Pinkie, AppleJack, Fluttershy, and two of the Spartans all ran up to the nearest group. Rainbow Dash was already in position above them, and stomped the cloud. The lightning went down on two of the elites, filling them with a ton of volts and killing them almost instantly.
“Spartans, take out those grunts! I’ll take care of the last elite.” I said.
I ran up as fast as I could to the elite, who was distracted by the deadly cloud, and was about to shoot at it. Before he could, I unloaded four shells into him, killing him. While I did this, one of the spartans had thrown a plasma grenade at a grunt, hitting him. He ran over to his friends to ‘get it off,’ but only succeeded in blowing himself and four others up. The other spartan quickly killed the last grunt.
Meanwhile, Twilight, Rarity, and two of the Spartans ran up to the second group. Rainbow Dash, done helping us, came over and zapped one of the elites. However, they had caught onto her attack strategy.
“Rainbow Dash! Evasive actions!” I called across the field, getting into the Ghost, and figuring out the controls while Pinkie started holding on to me.
Rainbow Dash started doing tricks to avoid the shots being fired at her by the other elite, while the grunts fired on the spartans. They killed three of them quickly, but weren’t able to take out the last one before he threw a grenade. The grenade stuck to one of the spartans, and he took a dive to save the rest from being blown up as well.
The final grunt was killed by Rarity when she picked up an old fallen over tree and crushed him. I rode up on my Ghost, running over the final elite in the process. “S***! We don’t have enough people left to drive!” I said.
“I can *hic* drive this thing!” Twilight said.
“You couldn’t even drive a snowplow SOBER!” I exclaimed. A shot wizzed past my head – the Covenant from the third encampment were coming!
“We *hic* dun have time! I’m doin’ it!” Twilight said, getting on and starting it up, grabbing the steering wheel with her magic.
Having no choice, I just took off. We all went up the ramp, Twilight driving a bit shakily, but it looked like we were going to make it fine. Until a few plasma shots went by us. I looked back for a second – there were three elites on Ghosts behind us!
“Evasive actions guys! Rainbow Dash! Take ‘em out!” I called out.
Rainbow Dash pulled her cloud over top of one of them, and zapped him. However, when he went to the next and stomped it, nothing happened! “My cloud’s all out! And there aren’t any other clouds nearby!” she said.
“Spartans! Throw your grenades back at them!” I commanded.
They did so, but only one of the grenades hit, killing one of the riders. The last ghost was still firing on us, and it was getting hard to avoid. “Rarity! Take the spartan’s gun, and use it to shoot the elite!” I called out.
“But – I’ll just miss!” she said back.
“No you won’t! Just… Imagine it was him who spilled cider on your dress!” I replied.
“THAT SON OF A MARE! I’M GONNA KILL YOU!” she said, grabbing the gun with her magic, and firing at the elite.
The elite tried to evade, unsuccessfully. However, in his evasions, he accidentally fell off the cliff to the ground below. It wasn’t far, and Ghosts stay upright, but now we were very close to the spartan’s line, and the elite was soon killed.
“We’re home-free now!” I said. Then I noticed Twilight was still evading. “Twilight! You can stop evading now! They’re all dead!”
“I’ve lost control!” she shouted, going off the edge.
I quickly went after her, realizing the spartans would shoot her if she didn’t surrender. “Everyone, we’re going down! We’re at the line!” I called out, going off the cliff myself. Of course, Mongooses don’t stay upright. Luckily, Twilight used telekinesis to set herself down safely. “Twilight! You’ll have to catch the other Mongoose as well!” I told her, landing next to her. Once all of us were down, we went up to the line and surrendered ourselves.
Luckily, they had some sort of shot type thing that took away inebriation, and we gave it to Twilight. Finally no longer drunk, she reversed the spell, and we were finally back. I turned the Xbox off, and collapsed on the bed.
“You guys better not cause any trouble, just come up here and go to sleep. And I swear, if anything like that happens again, you’re gonna be in big trouble.” I said.
Around 30 minutes later, after we had all fallen asleep, the local news came on the TV I had accidentally left on. “Happening now: toys are reportedly coming to life. More on this after the break.”
A/N: People actually still read this P.O.S. story? This was my first story and it sucks, let’s be honest. I have a plotline planned for this thing now that they’re out… Do you guys really want me to continue it though? Or should I spend my time on my better stories?
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471679 da fuq??? stalker! I JUST posted this ya freak!
Continue, yes. Please. Don't leave us hangin'
I say you should continue this one... or maybe even re-write it if you don't like it so much. The premise is interesting.
more story or i shall have to call down the wrath of the pinkie pie for ending a perfectly good party
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471713>>471711>>471687 I post this story, and within about 5 minutes I have two, and within 15 I have 4! WHY ARE YOU ALL STALKING ME!?!?!
I suppose I have to. Seems I'll have a riot otherwise. But seriously, why do you guys like this thing??? *sigh* well, at least give Cthulhu in Equestria a try sometime...
471826 I'm guessing you're saying the site? Ya, I tried putting this up earlier, but it wasn't workin'...
I followed this story when we could still track it, and I want to follow it the the end Celestia damnit. So please finish it.
471872 ah, the good old days. Tracking's a TON better then stupid stinkin favoriting I don't even think I get emails from fave's but I still get emails from those tracks...
471831 im not stalking you. just have the story on my faves list...also riot would be an understatement
471916 you REALLY think this story is good then?
*slap* I can no longer trust your literary opinion
Just kidding... kinda. What in the world do you see in this thing though???
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Listen to us, sounding like a couple of old people.
"Back in my day we only had four Elements of Harmony and one princess. We also had nine planets. And young people wore pants, not underwear. And I tell you what...zzz."
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471948 the story is just plain funny. a welcome breath of fresh air from all the lame crossover, tragic, and gore stories that keep getting posted. mlp is supposed to be fun, happy, and lighthearted and your story is very fun and lighthearted.
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472071 blame it on Poultron
472019 you really mean that eh? huh. I just see it as a disappointment. I must agree, though, I hate all those stinkint HiE stories... BLEH.
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I don't get it
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I think yes, continue the story, I wanna see what happens next and this held my interest. Also...when you say, "I ran up as fast as I could to the elite, who was distracted by the deadly cloud, and was about to shoot at it. Before I could, I unloaded four shells into him, killing him." I think that should be, "before HE could" as in, before he could shoot at the cloud...right?
471831
I'm not stalking you... I just have this on my favorite list and I spend a fairly large part of my time in front of my computer. I read it fairly quickly once I noticed it had updated and I thought I would toss in my two cents concerning your question.
Ultimately though, what the readers want shouldn't really matter. If you don't 'like' the story then don't bother with writing any more of it. Move on to something else. You are the author after all. Write what you want to read for yourself and screw the rest of us. :D
Why do I like it you might ask?
I admit, I find that your writing does need a little work, it's fairly obvious it's the work of an inexperienced author but that doesn't mean it's bad. In fact, I think this is the first fic I've seen on the site with the 'idea' of toys coming to life and I like ideas and concepts as much as I like technical accuracy, strong characterization, or cohesive plot however there's a difference here I think needs to be made clear. Technical accuracy, strong characterization, and cohesive plot are all the sorts of things an author can learn over time. Take some writing courses, spend more time writing. You'll figure them out in time and you'll only ever get better than you are now. Ideas though, those are the difficult part. Anyone can study and get the details down but having the idea in the first place? That's not so easy.
So when I say 'I like it' you can rest assured that I really do. I may not like 'all' of it, the entire 'stuck in the halo game thing was just terrible', but I like enough of it to spend my time giving it my attention. :)
Buck up Senial! It could be worse... you might decide not to write at all and that really would be a shame because then you'd be like me. I might be technically capable of writing... but writing isn't something I'll ever get a cutiemark for.
472247 XD Poultron, the owner/main mod/whatever of fimfic
472389 oops, yup XD I'll fix that. XD apparently fighting dialogue is not my forte...
472854 haha, but you guys DO matter to me even if I only use you for motivational purposes... I'd never finish a story if it wasn't for my readers, I lose interest in things quickly if only I know about it; but I know you guys are out the bein' all when I don't update regularly. As for ideas, they constantly come and go through my head. I have at least three or four stories I have partially written but haven't taken the time to complete / put up... Like that interactive shipping fic... hm. Might work on that later. I lol'd that you didn't like the halo part - I thought that was the best part yet! XD although kinda stupid, even for me... But thanks for taking the time to write out such a long comment, it really does mean a lot to me. I promise myself that even if I get famous on here someday I'll always read all the comments put on my stories
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sounds awesome keep going.
Moar. MOAR!
In all reality, this is awesome and you should keep writing