Double Edge: Tales of darkness

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themouthofmush

themouthofmush #1 · Oct 11th, 2013 · · · Chapter 1: Welcome to my story ·

got to say, this shows some potential. i haven't seen many episodes of dexter and i haven't seen any of the newest seasons, but this really piqued my interest. there are some errors here and there, mostly just from sentences that don't seem to make sense, but so far it's nothing too severe. i shall keep my eyes on this.

Blue Moon24

Blue Moon24 #2 · Oct 11th, 2013 · · · Chapter 1: Welcome to my story ·

3332720 thanks for the feedback, yeah I know some of the sentences don't make some sense, but it gets better. And I highly recommend Dexter it's such a great show

themouthofmush

themouthofmush #3 · Oct 11th, 2013 · · · Chapter 1: Welcome to my story ·

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rightio then, my fellow writer. also, just as some helpful advice, try to keep in mind that names and I's need to be capitalized. like i said, some errors here and there, but nothing too much.

Blue Moon24

Blue Moon24 #4 · Oct 11th, 2013 · · · Chapter 1: Welcome to my story ·

3332775 Thanks ill make sure to look more carefully next time I edit

themouthofmush

themouthofmush #5 · Oct 11th, 2013 · · · Chapter 1: Welcome to my story ·

3332798
if anything, microsoft word could help spot out a few errors for you

Blue Moon24

Blue Moon24 #6 · Oct 11th, 2013 · · · Chapter 1: Welcome to my story ·

3332810 yeah I did this in gdocs but I guess when I copied it to fimfiction it changed

themouthofmush

themouthofmush #7 · Oct 11th, 2013 · · · Chapter 1: Welcome to my story ·

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yeah, it does that. fimfiction has some "decent" editing software in this site, but it's not as good as it should be. guess just try to pay attention and try to get some to pre-read it for you before posting or something.

Blue Moon24