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Awkward word choice and sentence structure. Poor descriptive voice.
Take this one back and throw it into the edit machine. I like the basic idea, I really do, but you need to work on it a lot to make it readable.
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I disagree. I think his choice of words was far superior to what you would normally see in this sort of fic, and although there are a few errors here and there, t'wasn't anything that made much of a difference. It could use a TINY bit of editing for grammatical changes, but don't change anything too drastic, this story is literally PERFECT the way it is.![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
Anyway, thank you to the author for writing this; you have no idea how refreshing it was to read an AJ clopfic that DOESN'T involve Rainbow Dash (for the most part. I also like how you made Dash straight in this as well, contrary to popular belief). Anywho, great story, and I love the concept of Applejack and Soarin'. HIGHLY original, and I do hope you write more of this sort of thing. Believe me when I say you have a talent for it.![:raritywink:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritywink.png)
Change the title. The typo makes it look like a trollfic
Change the title. The typo makes it look like a trollfic
This is my first fanfic I have ever written, so I know there are some errors and poor sentence structure as Wirepony pointed out. I posted it like this first to see peoples reactions, whether it was good material or not. And I am quite surprised that it is taken as a rather decent or even good fanfic despite my horrid writing. For that, I am grateful. I'll fix and spiff it up some more while I write the sequel, my only regret was posting it too soon.
besides a few grammatical errors here and there, this is a really well made fic. Especially for your first one ever written. I look forward to continue reading your work.
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though it does need better grammar,spelling,and sentence structure.but those things really don't matter to me as long as i can clop to it.
not bad.
And thus did AJ break Soarin's heart.![:ajsleepy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajsleepy.png)
hey what happend next?
This is interesting. I like it but the way you discribe AJ is off she would never go for a place with ponys that don't respect the law. Other than that well done.![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
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I would first like to say thank you for showing AJ some love (lol double meaning), and for ApplejackXSoarin I love that couple.
Very sexy story you have here, I sure hope there will be a sequel one day.![:ajsmug:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajsmug.png)
10611 In short: decent fic, and you write well. Some striking grammatical errors, though. Also, I applaud you for the ending, totally wasn't expecting that...![:fluttercry:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/fluttercry.png)
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I would like to see more, so keep it up!
I like this!![:heart:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/heart.png)
![:rainbowwild:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowwild.png)
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this is a great start i hope you make more for this fanfic
it dose not feel complete anyway i liked it
Make a sequel!
I have read many Clop/Fanfics, and i must say for your first Fanfic is that really![:raritywink:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritywink.png)
great!
I think you will make more better Stories, followet ;)
I hope it come a sequel![:ajsmug:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajsmug.png)
11147![:rainbowhuh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowhuh.png)
Ok, I read this fic and Followed this author years ago, so why wasn't it added to my Fav list?
10611 so a question? why didn't you write a second chapter to this? Or save as completed. it's been like three years since you wrote this. it's like you disappeared.
*Four years later*
That incomplete tag tho
Where's the story description?
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6723794 Well the artist is gone for years so...
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6724164 Will the author be back?
6724772 After 206+ weeks?
6724785 Yeah. I'll wait.
Oh boy I can’t wait for the sequel