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Steel Quill


A pony with too much time on his hooves and too much plot to work with, in more ways than one. Also on FA!

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That was quite the well made clopfic. Very well done with it. Extremely sensual, not too short, and filled with good descriptions. The grammar and flow of the story was also extremely nice. Finally, let me give you a small piece of advice, because this is really the only thing you need. For your paragraphs, put a space between each one.
Instead of like this, because this makes it look like a bit of a wall of text.

Do it like this, because then there is space and it just has a better appeal to the readers. The only other thing I noticed is that you put multiple speakers in one paragraph on a few instances. When you go to a new speaker, it is customary to start a new paragraph. It makes things easier to follow and all that lovely stuff.

As a first time clopfic, hell, as a first time story, this was damn well made. It was nice to see another story with a Wonderbolt getting some action. I will be looking forward to reading more by you in the future. I wish you the best of luck with your future stories!

~SolidFire

4101471 Thank you for the advice! I'll certainly apply it and update this story so that it's easier to read. And I'm glad you enjoyed it. If you have any suggestions for another, feel free to state them!:rainbowkiss:

4103365 thank you so much! Did you have anything that particularly stood out for you? Or perhaps somewhere I can improve?

A very well written work of romance with quite a lot of heart put into it. Superbly written and engaging.

4133485 Thank you! I'm glad you were able to find it so enjoyable. Did any particular scenes stand out to you?

4133684

I suppose the best way to put it is the slice of life aspects were what drew me in. It's always enjoyable to have good character interactions in a good work of romance. Best praise I can offer in that regard is when I read the scenes around town nothing ever feels forced, the dialogue is natural, and it just kind of leaves a reader saying "This is nice. I could go for more of this."

Filled with plot of both varieties.:trollestia:

Twas recommended to me by a friend a few weeks back.
Gotta say, I am not disappointed.
deserves at least 1,500 more views then it has now. :moustache:

4370842 Your words are a great kindness to me, I appreciate such praise! I'm glad you enjoyed the story. :pinkiehappy:

It is now very clear that you are a very good author. I have no doubt about that, you characterise each character almost seamlessly and I am very much certain that you would get famous someday. You are brilliant in the art of linguistically makin us float into a story and I am very much please with how wonderful your stories are. You should try making a normal romance story, you know without the clop. Considering your talent is, albeit not wasted, but it needs to touch other genres as well, but that is entirely up to you and I honestly wouldn't mind a clopfic.

Good story sir! -silly salute-

I liked it, shame its a one-shot.

Have a like and favorite.

I remember reading this one a while ago. I can't recall the exact 'details' right now, but what I do know is that it's an amazingly well done fic. Can't give any particular scenes that stood out to me; you'll just have to live with the knowledge that while I'm not particularly fond of anthro stories, I'll be giving your other stories a try as well.

That was good. Have a Pinkie. :pinkiehappy:

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