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The Cannon of Rain

Raindrops has a boring, if not repetitive, life. She wakes up, eats, goes to work, comes back home and sleeps. But one Saturday morning, she looks out of her window and sees filth everywhere around Ponyville.
Raindrops immediately thinks up a plan to get rid of the dirt, but when she puts her plan into action, she gets responses that she isn't looking for.

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Grazy Polomare

Grazy Polomare #1 · Aug 13th, 2013 · · ·

You've pecked my curiosity...

I certainly think you've got a good concept, and I can't wait to see you really flesh it out in later chapters. Keep writing and congrats on your first fic!

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Prane

Prane #2 · Aug 13th, 2013 · · ·

Raindrops is building a Blastoise! And I though I've seen it all...

Interesting idea, especially since you've chosen Raindrops over some more popular characters. Which is good! Background ponies are perfect OCs - known just enough to have a head start in comparison to the totally original characters, but still not explored enough to have a strict personality to which you have to keep. I wonder which other characters will be (hopefully) introduced - some dialogue would be the best way to show your take on Raindrops.

In Author's Note you've said not to expect your writing to be that good. Why, I do expect it to be that good, because it's very nicely written so far!