im ultimately haveing the normalist time in my intire life for once and i couldnt be any more happy, untill something just happeneds to flip my world in every direction. Spike falls from my ceiling, SPIKE!!!! and im freaking out. But he doesn't look like him, he's a human.
Thankfully my dad was at the store at the time because if he came home he would of thrown a major hissy fit. But it's so hard keeping him here, especially when he gets angry.
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A few grammar issuses and run on sentences but it seems interesting so far, I'll keep my eye on this.
2831820 thanks, this is something I have been wanting to write but never got the chance, I'm glad your interested.
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2831948 ha ha, it was very late, or early to be more precise and I was very tired so shuty.
Okay, this has some of the worst spelling and grammar I've seen in a while, so I'll do you a favor and fix it up for you.
This is what you have right now for your description.
This is your description with better spelling and grammar. You could probably fiddle around with it a bit more, if I left something essential out of it.
Also, your story and chapter titles should be fixed. Capitalize that shit bro.
My New Brother Spike should be the story title.
I Just Can't Catch a Break should be the first chapter title.
Hide and Please Don't Seek should be the second chapter title.
I really don't think I could help with the spelling and grammar in the story itself unless I had a couple of hours to spare, so that's all for now.
2832952well I know like I said the description and first chapter it was late but I will capitalize the next chapters. Thanks really much for trying to help me it means a lot.
There are TONS of grammar mistakes. Clear them up and this will get lots of more likes.
2838209k will do
Ok now I fixed the mistakes so please give me one more shot and read them again because I'm happy with it now and I felt so stupid seeing all the mistakes.
so please comment so I can see how much better I did.
I would highly suggest cleaning up at least the summary. I honestly thought this was a troll fic until I read your comments.
What do you mean 'troll fic'?
Yeah, it's clear you've got some good ideas, but the grammary-stuff and punctuationy-stuff could use some work. Of course, folks have already said that, but what I think is pretty obvious is that you've got some good ideas. Maybe some fairly creative ideas. It might be easy to get discouraged by all the dislikes, but keep writing. You'll get the hang of the grammar and syntax in time, and when you do, your ideas will become easier and easier for the rest of us to see. You've got guts kid, just keep sticking to it.
how
3009707 regidar I want you to know that the next one will show how.