Three very special sets of sisters meet, for the first time, at the Sisterhooves Social. Their relationships will never be the same--to say nothing of Equestria.
The Crusaders learn that they aren't like other ponies. As they uncover the secrets of their origins, the trio grow closer than ever, discovering not only their unique nature, but the incredible power that comes with it as well.
Something has attacked the moon, and everypony is scared. In Ponyville, everypony evacuates, but our faithful heroes go to their princess for a big suprise
First, Luna was on the moon for 1000 years, not 100. It's not Big Mac 'n Tosh, it's Big Macintosh. I'd suggest finding an editor so that it doesn't appear so sloppy. Finally, I don't like the way the POV is presented. It would be fine if it was written better, but it just seems awkward and sloppy. It has potential, you just need to fix some things.
It has a good premise, but the execution is sloppy. Luna was on the moon for 1000 years, not 100 years. Big Mac'n'Tosh is Macintosh. It is confusing, and you really need an editor. Otherwise, I'd like to see where this goes.
232791 I understand everything, this was my first fanfic, thank you for how I can make it better. But somethings were ment to be confusing, Twilight won't write down EVERYTHING. Also, I have no idea about how to get editors and stuff
Note to everypony: This is in Twilight Sparkle's POV. And this is my first Fanfiction!Don't judge me about spelling errors!
First, Luna was on the moon for 1000 years, not 100. It's not Big Mac 'n Tosh, it's Big Macintosh. I'd suggest finding an editor so that it doesn't appear so sloppy. Finally, I don't like the way the POV is presented. It would be fine if it was written better, but it just seems awkward and sloppy. It has potential, you just need to fix some things.
It has a good premise, but the execution is sloppy. Luna was on the moon for 1000 years, not 100 years. Big Mac'n'Tosh is Macintosh. It is confusing, and you really need an editor. Otherwise, I'd like to see where this goes.
232840 This was my first fanfic, I'm new to FIMFictionm, so please excuse how I had errors and stuff
232791 I understand everything, this was my first fanfic, thank you for how I can make it better. But somethings were ment to be confusing, Twilight won't write down EVERYTHING. Also, I have no idea about how to get editors and stuff