"The first time I beheld my King was amidst the shops and parks of the Crystal Empire, beneath a cerulean firmament. From the uppermost spire of the Crystal Palace he descended, taking each megalithic tier in a single stride, until his final step cracked wide the world itself. "
Took a break from my main fanfiction. Decided to take what was originally a crappy villain and give him a darker and more lovecraftian bent in a prose. Heavily inspired by Lovecraft and Lovecraftian Authors.
Special thanks to Mbulsht, Abladeinthenight, Pominator, MDGusty, and Cytwex for going over it before I published it.
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pretty good. is this just a 1,000 word 1-off? cuz i want to see it continue, somehow
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Initially I wrote it to get my mind off my other story. It was about 600 words and was initially about Princess Celestia as recalled by Luna. I worked on it some more and it came to be what it is now.
So no I never intend this to be anything more than what it is, but I've had others point out to me that a build a world and a setting here. So I think I may continue in the future with another story or two. We will see, but as you can see from my other story I am rather slow and get easily distracted from writing by things like work and life.
I did have one person interested in setting their story in the world. So I do encourage other authors, if you want a post apocalyptic setting to put your story into then you have permission and encouragement from me.
Bad end is best end. That was neato.
Very nicely written. I haven't read any Lovecraft yet, so I can't tell you if it sounds like him or not, but on its own merits it's a great story.
It's sentences are very intricate, and sound very grand and mythical. It really helps paint Sombra as a very powerful and feared creature. Other than a few awkward phrases that I had to go over a couple times, most of the text flows very well. I also liked the ending a lot.
A nice short read. Now I'll be catching up with your other story.
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I can tell you from reading the first couple paragraphs that emdefmek comes about as close to Lovecraft's writing as one can get, it's unique in style and structure.