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Fyn16


I've been a brony for a year and a half, and a pilot for a year, and I plan on using both of those experiences to write my stories. Be awesome, everyone!

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(New rating- T for violence. one instance of mild language, and mature themes). All his life, Nimbus had dreamed of being a Wonderbolt. He had the flying ability- what he lacked was dedication. It wasn't hard for him to be accepted to the Academy, but when he failed to understand the true commitment it takes to be one of Equestria's elite flyers, Nimbus found himself kicked out just as quickly as he'd been let in. Now, haunted by his failures at the Wonderbolt Academy, Nimbus is once again dedicated to serving in the skies of Equestria, this time as a Royal Equestrian Air Force Aviator- an elite aerial defender of Equestria. Nimbus must confront the challenges he faced at the Wonderbolt Academy again as a cadet in Aviator Training School. ATS, however, has its own unique set of challenges, and predictions of the return of an ancient evil known only as "Nightmare Moon" are beginning to surface, throwing Equestria into a state of anxiety. Through all of this, can Nimbus persevere? Set approximately one year before the events of "Friendship is Magic," in a slightly altered reality, this story marks a new start for a character who's been waiting for his full story to emerge. This is that story.

Chapters (18)
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Comments ( 27 )

Um... not to be a nit-picker or anything here, but a century is 100 years... I think what you meant was millennium for 1000.

Yeah, you got me. Thanks for the catch! Corrections have been made. What do you think of the story itself?

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GASP! A comment! You are awesome! Holy cow! Okay, no joke- you are the first person (other than Itchy, who I know personally) to comment on any of my stories. I salute you a thousand times over!

Okay, maybe that was a tad melodramatic, but you may be able to tell by now that I don't get comments often. At any rate, thank you very much for the feedback! I should have the next chapter up within the coming week!

Not bad. Enjoying the set up for the [censored] and the [censored] of the [censored]. Furthermore, the [censored] that should be [censored] about [censored] are clear to be [censored], but not obvious. My question is will they be noticed? And if they are, will people [censored] about them?

P.S.- All [censored]s are in place so as not to spoil the story for others, furthermore they aren't set in stone yet. YAY BEING A SOUNDING BOARD!

Hmm... quite intuitive. Care to send me an un[censored] message? Because I think I filled all those [censored]s with rubber ducks and lollipops

Very nicely done. And poor Sun Blaze...

Dang, one thumbs-down. I suppose it was only a matter of time. :applejackunsure:

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At chapter 11 though. That's a new record for ya! Oh, and well done on the chap and fight. Gotta love Sun Blaze's attitude.

Looked who just earned a Like! I'll be watching.

This story rocks, I can't wait to read more. This is a really good down to earth story with a legitimate threat now present in the story. I want to really see wherre you are going with this. :pinkiehappy:

Oh this is a great story. I love the action and the suspense (Cliche I know but I call it like I see it). The excitement of Nimbus participating in the competition combined with me dying to know if Sun Blaze is alright along with the question of what The Awakening is planning is one heck of a rush. I have so many questions as well "Will Nimbus find out what's going on at the school and if he does how will it affect his performance? Will Nimbus pull off something crazy at the meet that will get him noticed? What are Storm Runner and Dusk Shine planning? Is Sun Blaze alive and if so what is she doing right now?" And those are just the immediate ones. Another is "Is the story almost over? It seems to be reaching it's zenith with an epic climatic build up, but will there be more? Will Nimbus pull off a sonic rainboom and will he and Rainbow Dash meet and compete in the future?" still more questions. "Seriously though is the story reaching it's climax or do you have a lot more planned for Nimbus and his crew. I want there to be more. This story is well written and it's a shame more people haven't found it. It's balanced and the story is good. The character development is decent. The story is a good story of a pony coming into his own. In short you've done a good job and succeeded where many fail in my opinion. This story is exceptional and you've got me hooked I look forward to more please update soon.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::moustache::moustache:

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This is awesome! You are by far my most enthusiastic reviewer! I have much planned for Nimbus's future, including having him explore some morally tough choices right around season 2 (which is as far as I'll say for now). The next chapter is in development and I look forward to releasing it!

I predict a 100% chance of awesome battles and kick ass moves in the near future with a chance of awesomeness on the horizen:moustache::moustache:

Very well done man! I loved seeing how things evolved as you wrote this, and after reading kyubbiman's review I couldn't help but laugh knowing the answers to his question. Being your sounding board rocks! I'll see if I can't get my lazy butt in gear to work on my own stories now (I really need to compete with this...)

That was freaking epic. One of the best combat scenes I have ever read. I can't wait to see what happens next. When is your next chapter coming out? I must read it now.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::moustache::moustache:

3333710 Thank you your laughter is much appreciated and chapter 15 will rock your socks off.

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Funny you should mention that- it's about a third of the way done as we speak. I'm looking at a release early this week. Glad you liked the combat scene- they're something I've been trying to work on for a while now. Looks like only two chapters left if my story outline's anything to go by, but the next in this series is already planned, and I'll start writing as soon as the final chapter gets posted. I'm not going to say much, but watch the next chapter closely. Nimbus's actions may very well have some interesting consequences later on down the road...

3376813 sweet thanks for this info

"Intents and purposes" not "intensive purposes".

slight mistake
“Breaking to pursue,” Polaris called, flying off after the pony and leaving Nimbus and Storm Runner to deal with the other.

shouldnt that be corona rather than storm runner?

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Very true, thank you!

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Problem is now solved. I should really look into sending these chapters through a pre-reader first...

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Ya know that if ya need one I'm just a quick click/email away man!

yay new and awesome chapter. Can't wait for the Finale

nice job and good story. Can't wait for your next one

Very well done dude, looking forward to seeing how ya go about topping this one. And send me a word sometime- I haven't heard from ya in ages!

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