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[warning! the following depicts alcoholism, physical and verbal abuse, and an extremely depressing scenario. The story is not for everyone, especially if you can relate. Be careful reading it.]
A few months have passed since the passing of Granny Smith. The Apple Family is...not doing quite so well. Applejack has hit the bottle, and Apple Bloom is just trying her best to deal with her sisters addiction.
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This was pretty damn dark. Enjoyable, but it also reminds me of when my parents use to fight...*like*
Why Canterlot? I'd think that they'd head somewhere like Appleloosa where they have family that can watch out for them. True, that'd make 'em easier for AJ to find, but at least they wouldn't be facing her wrath alone.
This is good but with this language it shouldnt be rated E. It should be rated T.
Did her friends not step in or have they moved away? Only thing bothering me about this. I mean the abuse and drunkenness are obviously bothersome, but the safety net that her friends could give and not doing so is kinda concerning.
This story would be great if it hadn't some illogicalities...
Why don't the friends help? I can easily imagine Twillights reaction when she hears about this!
Why do they go to Canterlot? They have such a great family and they go to the city where they know absolutely nobody?
...and if...
It wasn't the end!
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To answer all the questions all at once. The reason Apple Bloom didn't choose anywhere where her relatives where was most likely due to being scared out of her wits mostly, and the fact that those might be places Applejack would go to first.
Secondly on the 'why her friends don't know' thing; I feel bad not including it in the story, but Applejack is more or less a 'Functional Alcoholic' a type of alcoholic that can baasically work through things, hide it from everyone else and then unwind at the end of the day with alcohol. ((I'm probably using the wrong term and I am sorry.)) Easily explaining why her friends wouldn't know
Good, very good.
I really liked that this is from Appleblooms POV.
Reqlly good as a one shot. You know how would it be even better? With an AJ chapter, showing how she feels about it all when shes not . . . out of control.
Regardless of sequel, you have my 'thumb up'
Pardon any typos or misspells, not only am I from Brazil, but I'm also on my smartphone.
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Oh yeah, I didn't think of that. Some people are the last to know because they don't see anything wrong with the alcoholic. Makes sense now.