Turntable and his squad is set on a mission from Celestia herself. The mission is to find where the changelings are at, and see what they're planning. What they don't know is that their is a lot in store for them. A very deep and dark secret that is to be awakened, and the betrayal that nobody saw coming. It also doesn't help that a group of humans seem to be leading everything. It might even get worse when Bonfire has the hots for Rainbow Dash. Ugh, why does the worst things happen to the best countries.
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Interesting concepts and premise you have here. However, this is bad.
For one thing, you switched up on the narrative style. The descriptions were choppy and the dialogue was okay at best. Certain things needed more detail while other parts were missing crucial details altogether, such as what is this organization and what-not. Even the action sequence in this story I felt was very choppy and lost me quite a bit. In short, you have some work to do.
Recommendation is that you find yourself an editor or at least a proofreader before continuing on.
2662264 thank you