First FanFic/Story WARNING!
I am not the greatest with descriptions.
The Wayward Horizon is a place for nopony, this place is where your mind is tested against itself. Eventually, you will go insane. A Phoenix, Shadowrunner, is one of the only people who made it to the end, and was told to not leave until he wished to destroy the Horizon, and himself. 1,000s of years have passed,and he has found noone worth going through a 2nd time. But what happens when he finds himself face to face with Fluttershy?
Chapters (2)
Hmmm. I usually don't read stuff like this, but yeah, feedback cuz it's ur first time writing
Be more careful with the punctuation, and maybe you could try breaking it into more paragraphs so it doesn't look like a wall of text.
Maybe I'll give it a rating when the next chapter comes out.
Thanks for the advice, I was doing a slight perspective experiment with the 2nd chapter, hence why it took so long to come out.
I feel good about getting it done.
Ah, Travelers. The only medium that first-time writers seem to be able to write comprehensively through, without the use of a prereader. I mean, look at some of these first fics, here on this site. When you don't capitalize "I" when referring to yourself, I just give up. For a first try, nice job! Hit the Enter key twice when starting a new paragraph, though.