Twilight peeked out from the kitchen when she heard voices from upstairs. From what she heard Spike hadn't come home yet. And it sounded like two female voices. One was easily recognized as Scootaloo. But she couldn't really hear who the other voice was.
She cried up towards the stair. "Scootaloo, who are you talking to?"
The voices died down and soon a response came. "Come and see for yourself Twi!" A really familiar voice cried back. A voice that to Twilight sounded like heavenly music played by angels.
She rushed out of the kitchen and up the stairs. But she trips on the last step. She screamed and started to fall. But there was no impact with the hard wooden floor. Instead something had catched her midair. She looked up and looked into a pair of magenta eyes. Her eyes teared up. "Rainbow?" A tear rolled down her cheek.
The cyan pegasi nodded. "The one and only." She gave her marefriend a beaming smile.
Twilight threw herself around Rainbow's neck in a big hug and began to cry.
"And i thought she would be happy that you woke up Rainbow." Scootaloo said from behind the cyan pegasi.
Both of the grown up mares started to chuckle. Scootaloo looked at them in confusion. "What's funny?"
Twilight looked at the filly with a smile on her face. "I'm happy honey. I'm so happy that i cry. You don't cry only when you're sad. You can cry when you are really really happy or releaved over something." She walked up to the filly and brought her into a hug. Seconds later Rainbow joined into the hug.
Suddenly they heard the voice of the outer door being opened and Spike called out. "I'm back!"
Twilight cried back. "We're upstairs Spike. Put the grocieries in the kitchen and come up!"
"Alright Twilight!" Were the response from him. They heard him go out to the kitchen and the sound of him putting the groceries where they should be. Then he walked up to the stair and looked upward it. He saw Twilight and Scootaloo standing up there with beaming smiles on their faces.
Spike got a little wary. "Girls, what are you up to?" He continued to walk up the stair but slowed down.
Twilight smirked. "Us two? Nothing."
Scootaloo's smile just got wider.
"It's not them you should be worried about little guy." A voice sounded from behind them.
Spike's eyes widened when he recognized the voice. "Rainbow Dash?" He reached the top of the stairs.
Twilight took a step aside so he could see Rainbow.
Rainbow gave him a confident smirk. "That's my name, don't wear it out."
His eyes teared up and he threw himself around her neck in a tight hug. "I was starting to think that you were never to snap out of it."
Rainbow padded his back softly. "Well, i might not had snapped out of it unless it were for Scoots."
All turned their gazes to the little filly who looked really confused. "Me, what did i do?"
Rainbow slowly put down Spike on the ground and went over to Scootaloo and nuzzled her. "You reminded me of that my life still has a meaning. That i still have to take care of you, twi and spike. Godness knows what would happened to you three if i just disappeared." She gave them a soft smile.
Scootaloo didn't answer and just hugged her adoptive sister tight. Twilight just shock her head before she joined in the hug. Spike wasn't late to join the hug either.
Good Chapter
3257344 Thanks, glad you liked it
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yay glad to see the storys back
3257422 And i'm glad to have it back on tracks
Loved reading this, and being a big Spike fan, I am just glad that he was included in the hug at the end and also RD showing care for him.
3258799 I'm really happy that you like my story ^^
3260115 Yes I do, and just take your time with your chapters. Like I've been known to saying lately, it is about quality not quantity.
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That's alright, one last problem that pops up in other chapters. You have a weird paragraph structure.
It looks like this. Where It'll have a few lines. That look normal, and then break
in a random area.
(note: this isn't made to tease you, just show a comparison between normal, and broken paragraph structure, look below.)
Rather than the normal structure you see in most fics. I'd go through real quick and just use backspace to make the paragraphs look nice and neat. This way it's less jaring when a person reads it. And for a person whose primary language is Sweedish you're doing quite well using the English language.
3262364 Ok. I will se what i can do about that. And thanks, studied english for about seven years now i think.
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That's good, and when you have gone through them a bit, I'll be more than willing to read this. I actually like the premise, and what's written. I just find it too jarring atm, but I haven't down voted it and am going to give it an honest go since it looks like something that'd be a instant favorite shipfic.
It's good to see an author who not only takes, but listens to constructive criticism. I really look forward to reading this fic. I love ScootAdoption, and I like TwiDash so this should be an interesting mix. Btw, one question. As of Chapter one is Scoots already adopted? And if so do we learn more about that in later chapters?
3267429 Well, Scootaloo isn't offically adopted yet. That's all i say
3267429 Okay, i went through the prolouge. Was it like that you meant with the paragraphing? Grammar isn't really my strongest card so to say.
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Yay! Something to look forward too!
take my wiafu twi you deserve her *weeps* just take her