"Encunter," is that intentional?

This is quite nice ^^ a good work.

Trigger: dominance and devotion, rage, prostitution.

The first part made me let out a tear (Yeah, like a good little sad part of a story can't). I would totally love this if Octavia didn't submit to him easily, and the colt's anger would stay for a little longer. Also, 18 inches? That's a big no-no (No pun intended).

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I appreciate the honesty. Like I said, it was written on a whim and posted on a dare, no planning or anything, so I may go back and change a few things.

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Thank you very much :3

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Not at all. Half asleep while writing does that for ya XP

good story thumps up and hope you make a second part to continu this story it dont seem complete

but you get a like and a fav

Eh, it needs work, but it ain't bad. I'd love to see you expand on this a bit.

If you're going to change anything with this story, expand it. Octavia doesn't suffer, which was the entire point

This is a really good story congrats on your first time. I wish it was longer though. would you take in making a second part?

Not bad! I hope you write a sequel.