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Good Luck to You

After moving to a new, horrible neighborhood with only one neighbor, my dad leaves me. A light coming from the backyard got my attention, and led me to my new life.

Chapters (6)

My Life Until Then · 1st Feb 2012 · 532 words
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Realization · 1st Feb 2012 · 425 words
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My Priorities · 1st Feb 2012 · 627 words
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Side Effect · 1st Feb 2012 · 262 words
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Somepony I Knew · 1st Feb 2012 · 282 words
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My Last Chance · 1st Feb 2012 · 394 words
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Sparkle

Sparkle #1 · Feb 2nd, 2012 · · 1 · My Life Until Then ·

I would like to say that this is really well written so far and I am interested in reading the rest. Planning to do so right now, in fact.

Oh, and one more thing, I find the star bombing in the ratings absolutely despicable.

Oatmeal Are You Crazy

Oatmeal Are You Crazy #2 · Feb 2nd, 2012 · · · My Last Chance ·

Plz longer chapters

Oatmeal Are You Crazy

Oatmeal Are You Crazy #3 · Feb 2nd, 2012 · · · My Last Chance ·

Ima dumbass its done....

Elastas

Elastas #4 · Feb 2nd, 2012 · · · My Last Chance ·

Everything you wrote, could be better. Being quite frank. The entirety of what you have now, could be a whole chapter, or half of one considering the lack of detail. Like most stories, it has potential. I am not damning you to the bowels of hell where writers are doomed to never lift a pen or click a key ever again, it is merely a reader wanting to give you advice on improving the quality of what you do have. If it is any consolation, the title is a catch. You had me there. All I can tell you is to condense what you have now, and improve on the next go a bit. Take your time.