The trot over to the Sweet Apple Acres was a lot more enjoyable than their earlier trip to the bakery. Twilight chalked up the difference to the fact she was no longer enduring the ache of unappeased hunger.
She was now firmly adamant she had to try Pinkie' signature egg assortment sometime she was less ravenous ...and less carnivorous.
As the Twilight and Fluttershy passed under the gateway to the Acres, they could once again see the familiar light of the farmhouse.
"Fluttershy, how about you go first this time? I'd rather not get bucked in the face by Granny Smith or Big Mac." Twilight dropped back a little so Fluttershy was now leading.
"...but what if they are all asleep. I don't want to wake them up, or what if they’re doing something del-" the demure mare responded as she exponentially decreased her speed approaching the door.
Twilight got behind her timid friend and pushed, “Come on Fluttershy, it's not like you're doing this alone! I'll be right back there. I just don't want the first thing they see to be-"
As if by prophetic vision, the next thing to happen was exactly what Twilight was attempting to avoid.
"Get away from Fluttershy you varmint!" the Apple yelled, coming out the front door. Before she could react, or Fluttershy could say anything, the Apple had run over and impacted Twilight as hard as she could.
...but while no one could discredit her bravery, Applebloom was not getting her wolf-fighting cutie mark today.
Twilight watched as the filly charged straight at her in an apparent attempt to tackle. She couldn't dodge in time and the little filly impacted tight into her, and bounced right back off.
Twilight didn't want the filly to try again (and hurt herself) so she did something she knew dogs commonly did with pups who were getting in over their heads. She bent down and picked up the filly by the scruff of the neck.
"Help! Applejack! Big Mac! I'm being eaten!"
Twilight supposed it wasn't the most accurate assessment of the situation, but it could still raise problems.
Applejack was the first to the door. As she came out her expression turned from fear to anger as she saw the wolf with her sister in its mouth, but when she took notice of Fluttershy (and the lack of filly eating going on) her expression turned to relieved amusement.
Twilight was trying her best to not drop the flailing filly.
"Help! Sis! It’s got me!" Applebloom's little limbs reached towards her sister in desperation.
Applejack was struck by the strangely humorous sight. "Calm down there Applebloom, Twi's not gonna eat ya."
Twilight gently lowered and released Applebloom who ran over to the safety of her sister's undercarriage.
"Fluttershy? Ya mind taking little Applebloom here off to bed? I'd like to talk with Twi for a bit."
Fluttershy looked to Twilight, silently questioning if she'd be alright with it, and with a nod from Twilight, Fluttershy collected the frightened filly and went inside, leaving a mare and a wolf standing outside the farmhouse.
Applejack coughed "So, uh, Twi..." she shifted awkwardly, looking away from her canine friend, "I'm not gonna make excuses for what happened this morning, but believe me when I say I'm sorry about hittin' ya in the gut. I'll make it up to ya. I swear to it on the Apple name. Just say it and I'll do whatever you want to get you to forgive me." tears began to form around her eyes as her apology became less and less rehearsed, "Really Twi, I may not have been the best friend to ya so far, what with denying your help when ya offer it, and with me being the first to decide to offer comfort to the changeling cadence before the wedding and..." Applejack was hardly coherent through her sobbing now. "...and I've been thinking... It actually took me seriously hurting one of my friends to do it, but I thought back to all the times that I've not been the best friend to ya' and it's just like it all came together at once... I'm so sorry Twilight, really, I'm so sorry..." the sobbing mare spent a few minutes composing herself before continuing. "You always said it wasn't my fault afterward, but my silly pride was keeping me from seeing that I wasn't practicing what I preached. I was just..." she choked up again before she could finish. "Now look at me! I couldn't even say it to you when you were... I'm sorry for being such a bad friend that I couldn't even say this to your face... That I had to do it when you didn't look like yourself... Even now I'm making all this about me, when you're the one we should be thinking about..."
She was spiraling and even through wolf's eyes twilight could see it plain as day. She temporarily forgot about her own situation and focused solely on Applejack. She edged up to where Applejack was sitting and leaned into her.
"Thanks Twi... You really are a great friend." Twilight was content to stay like that all night, but after a bit Applejack continued, "-but seriously anything you want and I'll get it for you!"
Twilight shook her head.
"There is nothing I want more than your friendship."
They sat staring out at the acres together, just enjoying each other’s company. After a while Applejack broke the silence, "You know I didn't understand a word of that right?"
"I know Applejack, I know." Twilight barked back.
I think it would be funny to see Twilight chating with Winona
so, only two of Twilight's friends can understand her, huh?
Fluttershy and her concection with animals
Pinkie Pie being our beloved Pinkie Pie
this could get fun
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Yesh
This was glorious
I loved the ending joke too
There should be instances where Twilight unconsciously starts doing dog things like licking everyone they meet, chasing squirrels, barking at the mailman(mare?), etc.
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I think you shouldn't worry too much about being a little serious from time to time as long as it's for good reason. My favorite artist runs a comedic online comic but it has its sobering moments. Generally each posting ends with some kind of joke even if the rest was serious. Sometimes the joke is simply in the title for the posting, though I wouldn't recommend that here.
In my mind so far, so good.
Sorry that this comment is a chapter late, but in the last chapter there is a repeated typo. You refered to Mr. and Mrs. Cake as cake. Their names are proper nouns. They need to be capitalized.
Loving the story. Humor and heartwarming moments sitting right next to each other. Wolf Twi is something I have not seen before. Keep up the fun.
Edit. I just noticed that you left Cadence's name uncapitalized during Applejack's appology. Correct it please.
Twilight's mane will always looks good on anything and everything, whether mop fibres or Chunk from The Goonies.
Prove me wrong, internet.
I thought the chapter was fine, comedies can have serious moments.
For the language barrier, I see no reason for Twilight to lose her ability to understand the pony language, she did spend 98% of her life speaking it after all. Let's just say the canine mouth is incapable of replicating the same sounds for pony speech.
Also Twilight talking with Winona, this needs to happen.
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Barking at the mailmare, huh?
Oh yeah, I can see it now. Twilight needs to chase poor Derpy all around town. Comedy gold.
Twilight Barkle versus Opal.
Featured for the next three months. I got your back, author.
Why stop at Winnona? Why not have her talking with all the pets? Also, she is now a wolf. Maybe she could encounter the pack of Timberwolves in Everfree. Then she could accidentially get in a fight with the Alpha and beat him/her. Then she is new Alpha Wolf. (Who says that the wolves have to be the same breed of wolf to control the pack?) All the angst of being a ruler, with the fun of chasing each others tails.
2237012 The last two you listed seem a bit to far fetched as the situation is quite simple to explain. Twilight botched a spell, doesn't seem to hard to understand, i cant see full blown panic escalating that far or for even that long, minus the initial panic of the towns people, but i assume that would be cleared up quite fast. lol, Twilight doing dog things however... GOLD! even better if she doesn't realize she's doing it, then gets horribly embarrassed.
I vote for Twilight unconsciously doing canine things! Especially chasing the mailmare or a squirrel, comedy shall be made!
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Agreed on chasing a mailmare or a squirrel. Especially if it happens after the squirrel provokes Twi in some way, like throwing acorns. Or if it's Angel. + = creepy smile?
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Good advice. Furthermore, which comic is this? I might be interested in reading it.
Imma be straight, I really like this so far.
Eh you know you can't make humor really good without a bit of drama to ramp it up. Not alot not someone getting killed drama but a bit of OMG what the hell moments really make stuff funny.
How about later in the story they goto Zekora and she understands Twi, AND twi accedently somehow talked to either diamond dogs or/and timber wolves and they understand each other
Good chapter, was a nice little bit of sadness but it is definitely time for ze comedy.
I honestly can't think of any jokes but some hilarious situations would be visiting Rarity, Shining Armor and Cadance, Celesita, Luna, and if this is post DIscord reform than Discord.
Why don't dogs make good dancers?
It's because they have two left feet.
If Twi can still use magic shouldn't she just try and make it so she can talk to everyone?
Oooh yeah!
Reformed discord would be the best!
Especially because he obviously DOES understand her, but will naturally refuse to actually tell anyone else what she is saying.
I think having Twi' instinctively licking Rarity to show appreciation for something and mussing up Rarity's mane could to shenanigans and/or conversations about Twilight's sexuality, and having Flutters be too embarrassed to speak on the subject could lead to a communication break down. It's a stretch, but you never know till ya reach.
Molly says hi...
You must have her be entranced by a tennis ball! And bark like an Australian Shepherd when someone knocks on the door!
Little criticism on the side here:
Twilight is supposed to be a wolf, right?
Wolves don't bark. They are not able to.
But for the sake of the story, let's just roll with it.
First of all, I am loving this story so far, a good combination of jokes and serious moments. As for joke oppotunities, how about, for a more of an adult joke, having her inappropriately lick herself in a moment where she isn't aware of it; another one could be her sniffing ponies' backsides. I also think that interaction between her and other animals would make for good joke oppotunities. Hope I've given you some ideas, and I look forward to the next chapter.
I just thought of another funny thing that you could try; Twilight tries to speak to her friends, like Scooby Doo does.
not to bad dude. the communication barrier limits you a bit, but, at the same time, it sets you up for some funny stuff. Love the story by the way.
This is absolutely wonderful. And humor would be awesome. Spicifically PUNS. they are inetivitble hilarious. I can just tell that this story will have its fair share of them, and I'm a professional punner, so I would know.
But be careful. I know very well that puns can get out of control, if hue no what eye meme.
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2237686 My thought is that she doesn't have a spell to make animals talk RIGHT OFF HAND(HOOF). Not much importance until now. She may start working on one as soon as she gets home
A fun story that has certainly earned the right to a little character moment with Applejack. Glad to see this continue!
As for comedy ideas, I do wonder if Ponyville has a dog catcher... They do have a vet beyond Fluttershy, after all. It might be fun to see her have a conversation with poor, barking mad Screw Loose. I really liked the bit with Apple Bloom this chapter as well... Surely the CMC could come up with a scheme that makes use of a super-intelligent dog. Perhaps showing up Diamond Tiara's pet, whatever that may be? Putting on a Cutie Mark Crusaders Animal Trainers show? There's likely something to be done with her heightened senses, be it whistles only she can hear or smells that make her aware of things she otherwise wouldn't notice.
2240254 you know I didn't think about that........I am so ashamed
2247314 By miss them I assume you mean you didn't see my awesome and numerous comments?
Or are we talking site issue here cause I've seen such issues...
Only two errors I could see. Also, I think I read somewhere that dogs' neck has thick skin because/for that, I am not sure about ponies. Not really the best source to go by for that though, just wanted to toss in my two cents.
EDIT: Colors are FUN!
2241281 Maybe she is perfectly fine. She is let out with the Nurse in Season Three (Which I don't like...)
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Yes, I saw her and the nurse react to Winona's bark in the pet sitting episode... I liked that gag, myself. And surely she or her nurse would be a bit worried about backsliding sanity if she were to happen across another pony who thinks she's a dog... and actually convincingly looks the part too.
I HAVE A JOKE! Wolfs are lupine, dogs are canine, ponies are equine, and germans are just plain nien. (no offense meant, if you take offense go scream into your pillow until you feel better.)
Personally, I approve of this chapter
Comic abuse can only be funny for so long before it becomes depressing. Especially for a character as loveable as Twilight Sparkle, so it was really nice to have Applejack give a heartfelt speech on how much she cares for Twi and what she's willing to do for her. Plus I agree with Applejack's speech of there, and we need the writers of the show to realize Twilight's friends haven't been true to her for a long time and reinforce that love
So yes, even comedic stories can have serious moments
You hunger for humor like Wolflight hungers for steak
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YES! just like this video. ( the example starts at about 0:30 in the video )
I see what you did there.
No complaints, ending was awesome
While I understand that AJ would be sorry and deeply regret having bucked her friend in the gut, I think her reaction is a bit too... overdone here. As I commented in the previous chapter, she's very levelheaded and I don't think she'd break down crying like this.
If you look at The Return of Harmony part 2 where Twilight brings her back from her "Discorded" state, she's more one to swallow her pride and sincerely ask for forgiveness, rather than breaking down sobbing. I get that this is more serious in a way, but I'd imagine Aj to be one that is strong enough emotionally that she doesn't cry in such a situation, at least not as much as you make it to be.
well, 4 chapters in. so far the biggest problem I can see is that the chapters are a bit on the short side, though that could be an after effect of me just reading a story that had words coming from every orifice.
that thing about this chapter being too serious, all I have to say is: 'Marley and me' , only film to make me cry with laughter and sadness
Not too serious at all and after the bucking in the ribs it was needed. Anything else would be... Applejack needed to be forgiven by the readers.
that was a pretty stupid idea of Twilight to grab applebloom.
I think she should have showed submission to her or something.
Maybe they could buy a collar for Twilight. It may make ponies at least a little more at ease.
I feel this what toothless and Hiccup are like, best buds who talk with eachother only one has try and figure out what the other means by his body language.