Ditzy Doo is having financial difficulties and so takes on a second job on the weather patrol. The last thing she is looking for is friendship, let alone romance, but life has other plans for her. Can she find the treasure at the end of the rainbow?
Note: Events in the story are a continuation of Chapter 4 of my other story I AM DEATH. It is not required reading but would be good to read for further insights into the story. Also current cover is just placeholder until I finish proper one.
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The story is good and I am looking forward to reading the rest. Dont wurry about editing it looked great.
It actually gave me a nice idea for a different story about Derpy :)
Keep it up
Well tracking I AM DEATH so I think ill follow this one too.
Well I haven't read the story yet since I am on my IPod.
But I will read it soon and give you what I think.
Well I thought it was pretty good. You seem to have done a good job on this chapter and I only seen 3 mistakes on this run of the story.
“I-I’m sorry momma. I j-just got sc-scared.” Ditzy managed to stutter out into her mother’s soft and familiar chest.
You need to change that to "Dinky"
this one is in the third to last paragraph
she wasn't going to have an easy time with this mare. She reminded the pegasus of the many bullies she had had to deal with growing up.
Take out one of the 'hads'
And there was one more but now I can't find it. OOWW that error is such a lucky duck, but I will go back and find it some other time.
And again my over all review was I really liked it, you seem to set the mood very well. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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Thanks for the compliment, and thanks for pointing out those mistakes. This may not have garnered the attention my other story has yet, but I'm pretty happy with it. I seem to like making ponies cry, I'm so cruel.
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thanks to you sir. My desire is to make a believable romance story with rounded out characters
Tracking! But... only if Carrot Top is her special somepony.
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Am I the only one that took the whole 'Pot of Gold' motif to be a pretty clear indicator of who the special somepony is? I mean, "end of the Rainbow," right? Maybe I'm looking too far into it, but it seemed kinda obvious.
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Sorry Gabriel, but 310337 is right. I too thought the "Pot of Gold" thing was pretty obvious, but you're comment gives me an idea; I really should give Carrot Top some love. Perhaps later on? Stick around to find out!
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Yea, you can probably guess that ain't gonna happen. Compounding off-ships doesn't make a story MORE attractive, it makes it less. It's a logical property.
The pot at the end of the Rainbow could be considered a Golden Harvest. WHAT A
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Interesting tangent from I AM DEATH. I actually feel like it would've been better if I hadn't read I AM DEATH first, it would of kept some of the mystery.