Well, can't say I enjoyed the way you handled the dream too much, as it was far too obvious after they began the escape, I still liked the development of the relationship.
Some more development with Scratch getting outside in the sun would be fun to see, although I can't say how well it would fit.
Out of curiosity, will this story ever have a clop scene, or will everything be implied?
2721745 Oh, don't you worry dear; this will be explained in full detail... eventually
2723733 I know that feeling; embodying the character. I do it too, but I guess since I've seen how the story progresses, the little amounts of fear I inject every few lines doesn't hit me as hard, having a global view and all. As to Celestia, her situation will be explained eventually. I;m very thankful you took the time to tell me how you feel about it; it's reviews like this that help me grow as an author.
2742248 I try my best :3, hope you like the new chapter
2753734 Uh oh, pressure... I'll try and rise to the challenge!
2786591 She looks like a whore because she IS one, although if everyone around you is also a whore, doesn't that make it the new normal? I think it would be better to call Vinyl a weird prude :3
2835487 Yay! Vamponies! 2835644 Sorry; I didn't want it to be too obvious, but enough so the reader suspected. And yes, there will be clop at some point, assuming my plan doesn't take a face plant and change entirely. As for day light... you'll see :3 2836732 I'm happy I could give you a little boost . And I'm glad you like it. 2836927 Woohoo
YEEESSS FINALLY, IV"E BEEN WAITING FOR MONTHS!!!!!!!............
I am sorry for the out burst, i am very happy that this story has been updated and that there is going to be clop in it........................WOOOOOOOHOOOOOOOO.........
2837744 Ok well it has to do with my weird obsession with bananas... That being said...VINYL ATE A FUCKING BANANA!!!!!!! DOESN'T SHE KNOW THEY ARE EVIL MY GOD MAN...
With the ripping and tearing I to like Vinyl felt betrayed by Octy, But then it was all a dream and I can't help but feel as if Octy can't be trusted. Wow... poor Vinyl.
Well, bravo. Even though I'm sleep deprived, highly caffeinated, and slightly twitchy, this is still amazing. You've pegged octavia's character perfectly, grasping that elusive noble high-society dominative air. Vinyl feels a little off, but thats easily explainable by the eight years of hiding. As for the chapter, even though you've posted more, I have to say this: Luna's getting edgy. She is the princess of the night and controls the dreamscape, so she would know Vinyl is who she is. Not to mention now, she may be trying to claim the little pony for her own. If I'm slightly right, I'll find out. If i'm spectacularly wrong, then blame it on the debilitating mental processes that arise from chemical imbalances caused by the forementioned opening line.
I thought the dream was real. At the end of the dream, my thoughts were along the lines of 'Your behaviour is very disappointing, Octavia.' And then the dream ended, and I could stop crying.
That woke me up. I joined her in her whispered tone, so as not to alert our hunters. “What do we do? They’re unicorns, and they probably have keys. Even if they don’t, we have to go out eventually…”
They're your dildos, Octavia, just pull rank and tell 'em to fuck off.
Dayum.
Moar vampony goodness!
Well, can't say I enjoyed the way you handled the dream too much, as it was far too obvious after they began the escape, I still liked the development of the relationship.
Some more development with Scratch getting outside in the sun would be fun to see, although I can't say how well it would fit.
Out of curiosity, will this story ever have a clop scene, or will everything be implied?
This was a VERY good gift before i left for my week trip
You made my day, and i am NOT disappointed with this chapter. Keep it up!
Ya, update!!!
2721745 Oh, don't you worry dear; this will be explained in full detail... eventually
2723733 I know that feeling; embodying the character. I do it too, but I guess since I've seen how the story progresses, the little amounts of fear I inject every few lines doesn't hit me as hard, having a global view and all. As to Celestia, her situation will be explained eventually. I;m very thankful you took the time to tell me how you feel about it; it's reviews like this that help me grow as an author.
2742248 I try my best :3, hope you like the new chapter
2753734 Uh oh, pressure... I'll try and rise to the challenge!
2786591 She looks like a whore because she IS one, although if everyone around you is also a whore, doesn't that make it the new normal? I think it would be better to call Vinyl a weird prude :3
2789630 Thank you for trying it :3
2835487 Yay! Vamponies!
2835644 Sorry; I didn't want it to be too obvious, but enough so the reader suspected. And yes, there will be clop at some point, assuming my plan doesn't take a face plant and change entirely. As for day light... you'll see :3
2836732 I'm happy I could give you a little boost . And I'm glad you like it.
2836927 Woohoo
YEEESSS FINALLY, IV"E BEEN WAITING FOR MONTHS!!!!!!!............
I am sorry for the out burst, i am very happy that this story has been updated and that there is going to be clop in it........................WOOOOOOOHOOOOOOOO.........
XD best chapter ever
2837388 Sowwy, I don't like to make my readers wait, but life comes first. I'm glad you like it though
2837534 Ah, best chapter. I was confused there
2837557
Yeah sorry... And I noticed something that caught my interest...
Wanna hear it?
2837612 I always want to hear suggestions, ideas and criticisms, an yes I would love to hear it
2837744
Ok well it has to do with my weird obsession with bananas... That being said...VINYL ATE A FUCKING BANANA!!!!!!! DOESN'T SHE KNOW THEY ARE EVIL MY GOD MAN...
That is all... Thank you.
XD
2837796
...that made me smile
2837816
It was supposed to... :-/)
Have a nice day...
2837557 I understand but don't make me wait again or
i am starting to find many good stories, this one coming out on the top 2. congratz. keep up the work brochacho!
dammit finally some good gore and then you go all M. Night Shamalamalamalamalan on us.... CURSE YOU!!!!!!!!
Lol just joking I love a good
With the ripping and tearing I to like Vinyl felt betrayed by Octy, But then it was all a dream and I can't help but feel as if Octy can't be trusted. Wow... poor Vinyl.
Looking forward to the clop if you make one.
Come on! Next chapter, Please! I'M DYING HERE!
I am curious on how this will and you are very good at suspense got to give it out to you you were made to write books
Well, bravo. Even though I'm sleep deprived, highly caffeinated, and slightly twitchy, this is still amazing. You've pegged octavia's character perfectly, grasping that elusive noble high-society dominative air. Vinyl feels a little off, but thats easily explainable by the eight years of hiding. As for the chapter, even though you've posted more, I have to say this: Luna's getting edgy. She is the princess of the night and controls the dreamscape, so she would know Vinyl is who she is. Not to mention now, she may be trying to claim the little pony for her own. If I'm slightly right, I'll find out. If i'm spectacularly wrong, then blame it on the debilitating mental processes that arise from chemical imbalances caused by the forementioned opening line.
That dream legitimately scared me. Halfway through, I was thinking to myself, "Please let this be a dream. Please."
I thought the dream was real. At the end of the dream, my thoughts were along the lines of 'Your behaviour is very disappointing, Octavia.' And then the dream ended, and I could stop crying.
Is the dream Luna's doing? Not good
They're your dildos, Octavia, just pull rank and tell 'em to fuck off.
6071917 i had that exact dream
Personaly, I cried.