Screw studying for my exams! If this story is updated in the middle of my studying, I'm dropping everything and reading it. I am glad I took the time to read this. It's pretty good so far.
2482721 Well it won't be quite as long as I plan to make the other one, but I'd estimate around 100K words. And thank you 2531126>>2531250 Soon enough my friends, I just need to write it first. 2531452 A happy ending eh? Hm... I'll consider it. No tragic or sad tag, so maybe? :3 2531497>>2531792>>2532151>>2532170>>2533018>>2533092>>2533191 Yeah! What all of them said! 2532283 xD, don't let me ruin your exams, I'll feel bad! 2532423 You hate it? Don't worry; I'll have more coming soon 2534005 Seems like it, doesn't it? Just wait until they *spoiler blocker* 2534202 Oh no! My patient needs a story transfusion! Nurse! *nurse: I'm on it!
I feel it would have had far more impact for Vinyl to do something a bit less violent when she broke down. Perhaps smeared some blood over her jugular and turned her head up while laughing bitterly.
Also, you replaced 'person' for pony in at least three spots, broke the immersion a bit.
Looking forward to how the whole school thing works out. I hate typing on phones.
I love this story, I honestly don't see where you could go from here, you wonderfully crafted a direction from which only a few outings remain, and I am glad to see you are developing everything instead of just jumping from story point to story point. Can't wait to see what comes next, keep up the quality work!
Pretty good so far, but I am worried about how Vinyl keeps cutting herself to draw blood. I do hope you have some thing in mind for how this is to continue, because I don't want to see that she cuts herself again. She is already famished and weak from not eating properly. This alone would cause serious health problems, and to cut herself again to draw blood on top of this could be potentially life threatening. Anyway, I look forward to the next chapter.
2534809 Well, pony is supposed to be used instead of person. I used pony and Vampony all the time... And I suppose that would have been a different possibility, but it's done and over with now :3 2535286 Oh come now, there are many places I could go from here. I'm glad you like it though 2535491 She's not oeverly malnourished anymore, after all, she did her fruit yesterday. But yes, the blood loss should start becoming a problem soon. 2535898 Well, I'm already a quarter of the way there. It wouldn't be that hard to reach it, I hope
She glowered at me. “You better stop making all these mistakes. I’m starting to like you, like as a person, so don’t make me have to eat you, k?”
Could have used 'pony' there, no problem.
Octavia trotted right past me again, straight to the shower, smelling of sex. Now that I was safely locked up, she didn’t have any issues leaving for personal reasons. I heard the water begin to flow, followed by several satisfied moans of pleasure.
2543752 The first one I chose to leave it person because I wasn't sure if I wanted to put pony cause Octavia is a vampony. For her say she like's Vinyl as a pony sounds weird, and as a vampony sounds weirder, so I left it person. The second one isn't a direct relation to person. Personal just means private, so I think it's valid to leave it as is.
2581165 Indeed, I've always seen vampires as dead people who feed on blood. My head cannon is weird. 2581321 I'm glad you can deal with the difference in head cannon; most people would just give up on the story and leave.
2576798>>2580105 I'm glad you like it :3. Sadly, I'm in the last stretch of my 12th grade highschool year, so this time I actually have a legit excuse for slowing down a bit, especially with university coming up.
I'm loving this story. Could use some editing, as I'm finding quite a few spelling and grammar errors, but the story as a whole is a lot of fun to read and it's drawn me in quite well...so much so that I'll honestly be a little girlishly excited when I see the update for this.
Very interesting story. I will say that the beginning had some.... parts I wasn't too thrilled about (Luna being evil to be exact, but I really like luna and it's your story so I'm not one to complain). However, as the story progressed, I found it to become very interesting. Sort of a different take on the "survive a zombie apocalypse" theme. It's also nice seeing how, in this last chapter, all the stress from Vynils life began to truly show and Octavia showed the "friend" in her that she can be. Only other thing I could say is that I've only found a small count of spelling hicups usually being just an incorrect letter (such as Her being spelled Hew in one spot), so nothing big at all.
Very interested in seeing how this continues. Worried about what going back to school will do for Vynil though. Heh, keep up the good work.
Love the story! I'm not a huge fan of clop though... if it comes up in the future, can you put a small warning, so fans like me can skim/skip those points?
Thanks a ton :), and I can't wait for the next update!
Huh, this is a pretty interesting story. Definitely an original idea for the pony world at least.
Here's an idea for the next Vinyl rant, call vamponies animals. They care about sex and food most of all, some similarities that could be called out out on.
This is a good story, and well written, so you get a thumb-up, but the subject matter isn't really my cup 'o tea so I won't be following or reading any more of it. I'll check out your other works though, and keep up the great writing!
Guy I love and hate you right now. This story is so descriptive and well written it makes me sick because of the images flooding my brain from it. I will follow it for now but already I've seen that this has, and still will, earn it's dark tag.
2581651>>2581658 It's almost done, so I'll hopefully start working on it again soon. 2599949 Buttery or regular? 2601493 Sorry for the wait, and thank you 2636701 Yeah, I do have that problem quite often; I'm glad you like it though, and didn't feel too bad about "evil" Luna. 2659677 Oh you 2664549 Sure thing, but it's been, and will remain for a bit, pretty superficial, I think. 2664628>>2692712 Shhh! Dun spoil anything! J/K, it might be that, or it may not; we'll just have to wait and see. 2711290 Aww, Any particular reason? Not a clop type of guy although it doesn't really have any yet. And thank you :3 2719312 Oh dear, I didn't even think it was that dark... What makes you say that? And Celestia had to die; she's the sun, their only weakness.
2719356 This story is one of the darkest I've seen. You got Luna converting the pretty much the whole of ponykind, including Twilight who then killed Celestia. You then got the few survivors who have to act so out of character that they mentally snap and let the vamponies tear them to pieces....
It just doesn't seem that dark since we're not really focusing on those details.
2719356 Clop doesn't bother me in the slightest; I'll read stories with or without it. I think this one is just a little TOO dark for me. Being the last of your kind when everyone is friendly towards you would be bad enough, but in a world where everyone literally wants to eat you? Unbearable I would think. I'm also not into domination/slavery either, so how Vinyl is being treated bothers me. So there's just a couple themes in the story that I can't really get past, but it has nothing to do with you as a writer; as I said I think the story is written very well and I think you're a very talented writer. The subject matter of the story itself just doesn't really appeal to me. Something else I'd like to mention, and this had no effect on me liking or not liking the story, but when it was revealed that Twilight was the one who bit and killed Celestia it made me very sad. The feels! I think Celestia could have taken her sisters betrayal and moved on after a while, but Twilight being converted and wanting to kill her I imagine was too much; I imagined Celestia on the dais of the throne room, physically beaten by her sister, when Twilight comes walking up towards the throne with that hunger and malice in her eyes, and Celestia's heart breaking from seeing Twilight, the young Unicorn that always loved her like a mother, wanting nothing more than to destroy her. It's at this point I imagined Celestia giving up, having nothing left to live for, her heart shattered, and just lying down on the dais and exposing her neck, waiting for her faithful student to deliver the killing bite. Despite how sad it was I thought it was a brilliant addition and fantastically ironic. If you were going for inducing the sad-feels in people with that little bit, you at least succeeded with me! Anyway, sorry for writing a small novel myself
tl;dr A couple of the major themes in the story bother me so I don't want to continue reading it, despite being well written.
2719376 2721545 Oh dear, I guess it is portrayed as a bit darker then I had imagined... I honestly never thought of how dark it really does seem to people who don't know what I'm planning down the road :3 What? Who said anything about a spoiler? Not me, no sir.
2721717 Unless you plan to somehow bring back Celestia and restore the pony race, this is will never be a light story. The whole thing with Luna being cruel enough to make Twilight into a creature who only saw Celestia as something she had to kill makes redemption kinda impossible.
Moar.
new chapter? WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW
yep, i like where this is going
I fucking love you
DAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW
Screw studying for my exams! If this story is updated in the middle of my studying, I'm dropping everything and reading it. I am glad I took the time to read this. It's pretty good so far.
I HATE WHERE THIS IS GOING!! STOP IT NOW.... Hehe. Just kidding. Loving it. Can't wait for more.
I lerv it!!! Moar please...
All my yes
please make more now
Vamptavia: the womare that fucks up your life and make it a good thing
I require more.
Simple as that.
2482721 Well it won't be quite as long as I plan to make the other one, but I'd estimate around 100K words. And thank you
2531126>>2531250 Soon enough my friends, I just need to write it first.
2531452 A happy ending eh? Hm... I'll consider it. No tragic or sad tag, so maybe? :3
2531497>>2531792>>2532151>>2532170>>2533018>>2533092>>2533191
Yeah! What all of them said!
2532283 xD, don't let me ruin your exams, I'll feel bad!
2532423 You hate it? Don't worry; I'll have more coming soon
2534005 Seems like it, doesn't it? Just wait until they *spoiler blocker*
2534202 Oh no! My patient needs a story transfusion! Nurse!
*nurse: I'm on it!
2485253 Woops, somehow I missed this one. Sorry friend; I try to reply to all my comments.
I'm glad you like it and I hope you liked the new one.
2534476
*going into cardiac arrest*
CLEAR! zap
He lives!
2534512 Oh good, I don't want to live with a death on my hands
I feel it would have had far more impact for Vinyl to do something a bit less violent when she broke down. Perhaps smeared some blood over her jugular and turned her head up while laughing bitterly.
Also, you replaced 'person' for pony in at least three spots, broke the immersion a bit.
Looking forward to how the whole school thing works out. I hate typing on phones.
I love this story, I honestly don't see where you could go from here, you wonderfully crafted a direction from which only a few outings remain, and I am glad to see you are developing everything instead of just jumping from story point to story point. Can't wait to see what comes next, keep up the quality work!
Pretty good so far, but I am worried about how Vinyl keeps cutting herself to draw blood. I do hope you have some thing in mind for how this is to continue, because I don't want to see that she cuts herself again. She is already famished and weak from not eating properly. This alone would cause serious health problems, and to cut herself again to draw blood on top of this could be potentially life threatening. Anyway, I look forward to the next chapter.
2534476 O_O 1-100-100k words *faints out of joy*
2534809 Well, pony is supposed to be used instead of person. I used pony and Vampony all the time...
And I suppose that would have been a different possibility, but it's done and over with now :3
2535286 Oh come now, there are many places I could go from here. I'm glad you like it though
2535491 She's not oeverly malnourished anymore, after all, she did her fruit yesterday. But yes, the blood loss should start becoming a problem soon.
2535898 Well, I'm already a quarter of the way there. It wouldn't be that hard to reach it, I hope
2534476 o lord
2536914
**'person' for 'pony'. This is what I get for writing comments at 2:00am on a phone.
2539981 I'm sorry, but I still have no idea what you mean...
2541239
You said person when you meant pony. Several times. In the latest chapter.
2542194 Do you think you could point them out? Cause I only see one, and I did it intentionally to avoid confusion
2542658
Could have used 'pony' there, no problem.
You can use 'her own private' here.
2543752 The first one I chose to leave it person because I wasn't sure if I wanted to put pony cause Octavia is a vampony. For her say she like's Vinyl as a pony sounds weird, and as a vampony sounds weirder, so I left it person.
The second one isn't a direct relation to person. Personal just means private, so I think it's valid to leave it as is.
God I love the irection you are going.
This story hooked me up immediately. So update maybe? lol :33 Waiting for the new chapter
need more
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loving this so far, great work.
2581165 Indeed, I've always seen vampires as dead people who feed on blood. My head cannon is weird.
2581321 I'm glad you can deal with the difference in head cannon; most people would just give up on the story and leave.
2576798>>2580105
I'm glad you like it :3. Sadly, I'm in the last stretch of my 12th grade highschool year, so this time I actually have a legit excuse for slowing down a bit, especially with university coming up.
2581630
WHYYY? SCHOOL how I hate it...
2581630 it all good, would rather have a completed story well thought out in time than a rushed or incomplete story. and this one is worth waiting for
Oh, dis gun be good! Where's my popcorn?
I'm loving this story. Could use some editing, as I'm finding quite a few spelling and grammar errors, but the story as a whole is a lot of fun to read and it's drawn me in quite well...so much so that I'll honestly be a little girlishly excited when I see the update for this.
Very interesting story. I will say that the beginning had some.... parts I wasn't too thrilled about (Luna being evil to be exact, but I really like luna and it's your story so I'm not one to complain). However, as the story progressed, I found it to become very interesting. Sort of a different take on the "survive a zombie apocalypse" theme. It's also nice seeing how, in this last chapter, all the stress from Vynils life began to truly show and Octavia showed the "friend" in her that she can be. Only other thing I could say is that I've only found a small count of spelling hicups usually being just an incorrect letter (such as Her being spelled Hew in one spot), so nothing big at all.
Very interested in seeing how this continues. Worried about what going back to school will do for Vynil though. Heh, keep up the good work.
Love the story! I'm not a huge fan of clop though... if it comes up in the future, can you put a small warning, so fans like me can skim/skip those points?
Thanks a ton :), and I can't wait for the next update!
Huh, this is a pretty interesting story. Definitely an original idea for the pony world at least.
Here's an idea for the next Vinyl rant, call vamponies animals. They care about sex and food most of all, some similarities that could be called out out on.
Wouldn't it be a perfect solution if other body fluids would taste almost as good as blood? If you know what I mean
Well, I hope they can become friends or even lovers
We have to see
This is a good story, and well written, so you get a thumb-up, but the subject matter isn't really my cup 'o tea so I won't be following or reading any more of it. I'll check out your other works though, and keep up the great writing!
Guy I love and hate you right now. This story is so descriptive and well written it makes me sick because of the images flooding my brain from it. I will follow it for now but already I've seen that this has, and still will, earn it's dark tag.
Although I will say; killing Celestia?
2581651>>2581658 It's almost done, so I'll hopefully start working on it again soon.
2599949 Buttery or regular?
2601493 Sorry for the wait, and thank you
2636701 Yeah, I do have that problem quite often; I'm glad you like it though, and didn't feel too bad about "evil" Luna.
2659677 Oh you
2664549 Sure thing, but it's been, and will remain for a bit, pretty superficial, I think.
2664628>>2692712 Shhh! Dun spoil anything!
J/K, it might be that, or it may not; we'll just have to wait and see.
2711290 Aww, Any particular reason? Not a clop type of guy although it doesn't really have any yet. And thank you :3
2719312 Oh dear, I didn't even think it was that dark... What makes you say that? And Celestia had to die; she's the sun, their only weakness.
2719356
This story is one of the darkest I've seen. You got Luna converting the pretty much the whole of ponykind, including Twilight who then killed Celestia. You then got the few survivors who have to act so out of character that they mentally snap and let the vamponies tear them to pieces....
It just doesn't seem that dark since we're not really focusing on those details.
2719356
Buttery with sour cream and onion seasoning.
2719356 Clop doesn't bother me in the slightest; I'll read stories with or without it. I think this one is just a little TOO dark for me. Being the last of your kind when everyone is friendly towards you would be bad enough, but in a world where everyone literally wants to eat you? Unbearable I would think. I'm also not into domination/slavery either, so how Vinyl is being treated bothers me. So there's just a couple themes in the story that I can't really get past, but it has nothing to do with you as a writer; as I said I think the story is written very well and I think you're a very talented writer. The subject matter of the story itself just doesn't really appeal to me. Something else I'd like to mention, and this had no effect on me liking or not liking the story, but when it was revealed that Twilight was the one who bit and killed Celestia it made me very sad. The feels! I think Celestia could have taken her sisters betrayal and moved on after a while, but Twilight being converted and wanting to kill her I imagine was too much; I imagined Celestia on the dais of the throne room, physically beaten by her sister, when Twilight comes walking up towards the throne with that hunger and malice in her eyes, and Celestia's heart breaking from seeing Twilight, the young Unicorn that always loved her like a mother, wanting nothing more than to destroy her. It's at this point I imagined Celestia giving up, having nothing left to live for, her heart shattered, and just lying down on the dais and exposing her neck, waiting for her faithful student to deliver the killing bite. Despite how sad it was I thought it was a brilliant addition and fantastically ironic. If you were going for inducing the sad-feels in people with that little bit, you at least succeeded with me! Anyway, sorry for writing a small novel myself
tl;dr A couple of the major themes in the story bother me so I don't want to continue reading it, despite being well written.
2719376
2721545
Oh dear, I guess it is portrayed as a bit darker then I had imagined... I honestly never thought of how dark it really does seem to people who don't know what I'm planning down the road :3
What? Who said anything about a spoiler? Not me, no sir.
As for the domination thing, well... Kinky ftw~
2721717 Nothing wrong with kinky, I'm just one of those people that aren't into the BDSM thing.
2721717
Unless you plan to somehow bring back Celestia and restore the pony race, this is will never be a light story. The whole thing with Luna being cruel enough to make Twilight into a creature who only saw Celestia as something she had to kill makes redemption kinda impossible.