A nervous young stallion decides to take a shot at the new ruler of Equestia... and she accepts
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Okay, so part five is up.
Blargh... I'll take a break and then think about it some more. I'd like to see what you guys all think!
THE D'AWW ALL OF IT TAKE IT NOW
You write faster than I can think...
Sweet Jesus... It's to damn...
I will not cry.
F**** it.
Beautiful story my friend.
D'AAAAAAAAWWWWWW
Man you update FAST
also I love the story...nerds always seem to have a way with immortal moon goddess-queens of the night
Wow...This just keeps getting better...
that feel when you read a fanfic and every time you finish a chapter, it updates...
Love this story
You are updating LIKE A BOSS
Well, a good chunk of this story has been cringe-worthy material, in my opinion. Written very well, but the plot just seems so predictable, almost to the point of being cliched. Some of the more notable examples are the scenes where Dawn is talking to Moon about how much he loves her and whatnot. It's good, but I feel like I've read the same story somewhere before, just with different characters.
The core element of the story, though, the date with NMM, is QUITE interesting and I can't wait to see where it goes. Still a four-star at least, but I think there's room for improvement.
This makes my heart ache in all the right ways.
DAMN YOU! DAMN YOUR TALENT WITH THE WRITTEN WORD.
*throws money at the screen*
WE DEMAND MORE! </royalcanterlotvoice>
Nightmare Moon is best *sniff* Pony!
this is an awesome story! keep on making chapters!
How sweet.
Damn this story is so good I almost cried I can relate to the charecter and how he feels about the night
Because I to luv the night sky and all it's beauty when I can the stars of course and I don't see them to often. But please keep this up I can't wait for the next chapter!!!
This is amazing, I have a feeling that Luna's personality is going to start to override the anger and hate that fulled Nightmare, but she won't change forms
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I agree. Unless something unorthodox happens, I'm not really seeing it.
4/5.
Fly me to the moon
let me swing among the stars
let me see what spring is like
on Jupiter and Mars
In other words, hold his hoof.
In other words, Nightmare KISS HIM!
*ahem*
I love this classic romance stuff.
*Tracking ( 1 unread )*
*Click on link*
*Reads Nightmare Date Part IV*
*Goes to another page
*Tracking ( 1 unread )*
*Nightmare Date Part V*
Mind = Blown
This is such a good story my freind!
I cant fault you for wanting to take a break but... We need moar!
BAM Luna is back now happy ending lol
It's ... so ... it's so ...
ADAWWABLE
where the elements of harmony failed...a single act of caring and passion has broken the moons rage...
I sense a betrayal! I know this is way too soft for such a harsh movement but I think that an alternate turn of events would be rather nice. Something to just break either of the ponies emotions to the core. In my mind two thoughts are warring against each other.
Stay in love and bring on the happy.
Betray the princess and bring her to a whole new low!!! In emotion that is. Break her. Kill with an arctic ice heart and pierce her dreams.
Sorry, that is really sad but still... I'd really love to see it. Alternate endings.
Stories are about conflicts and choices.
The first chapter impressed me quite a bit. Despite the worrisome description (OC pony melts Nightmare Moon's heart!), the characterization of NM, her ennui and lack of direction was interesting.
Then the protagonist showed up and... well. Huh.
I'm not seeing any conflict or choices, here.
Liquid_Rainbows and SilentAuthor both adore the story...
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Of course now, I'm chilled to the bone as to what I should write next... I'll seriously think a while about it...
Nevertheless, I'm so happy at how it's turning out!
152341 The author's dream.
You lucky fuck you...
Anyway, great chapter and I keep sensing the chapters are far too short, but that may be just the quality.
Okay, so I think I also fixed some things in that section as well.
149956 Fixed. Thank you.
Oh, you're going to make me wait for the next update now? This is a beautiful story so far. Everything about this, the writing, the characters, the romance, has been done wonderfully.
I even teared up a few times in there.
It's interesting, I'll give it that.
A Monster with a heart? Or not a monster at all?
Cue everything going wrong due to other ponys attempting to defeat Nightmare Moon, hehe
But really man, I'm not into romantic stuff, but this was great! The writing so good I can almost taste the awesomeness from it! (Tastes abit like Raspberrys)
Anyone who isn't tracking has a screw loose in em ^^
My reaction at the end of the chapter \/
Holy shit... Wat?!
"Okay last chapter before I go to bed".
*Reads end of chapter*
"Next chapter will be the last"
C'mon I have to be up at 3am and its 10:30pm now. Your story is too boss
....WAIT.....TWIST?!?!?!.....Im...somehow ok with this...
Aaaaand downvote. I'll still track it, but this feels rather rushed to me.
It's a good story... but I feel it's escalating rather quickly.... too quickly
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And then they smashed