Dear Princess Celestia,
What if Trixie was actually my clone from a later year to stop tearing apart the time-space continuum? Would it mean I have to go back in time? Or would my clone have to go back in time?
Your Faithful Student,
Twilight Sparkle.
Dear Twilight Sparkle,
You clearly are making these up. I appreciate that as my court duties are actually very boring, do send more. Anyway, back to the topic at hand, what if Trixie was your clone?
Reason that she could be your clone are the fact that you both have decent knowledge and the ability of magic. Reasons against her being your clone is that she looks nothing like you, she is not as intelligent, intellectual or as magically inclined as you.
You would not have to go back in time, because she would be your clone but technically you would be going back in time as she would have to be genetically identical, yet you wouldn't because it would not be your personal mind. Anyway, you have already experimented with time-travel, so you would know what would happen anyway.
More practically, she could be a daughter from your future. You would have to send her back in time when you realise that she is Trixie.
Princess Celestia.
Or alternatively you could just ask Time Turner, he knows all about such timey-wimey things.
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superpinkbrony12 his name is not time turner it is the doctor
This evening I was bored and, while browsing fimfiction, found this. The premise was somewhat interesting, it wasn't downvoted too badly, so I decided to give it a try.
End result? I have managed to read 4 chapters. After the fourth chapter my tired brain almost melted and so I decided to whine and complain a bit.
Enjoy!
Chapter 1
Nothing anywhere indicates that Twilight and Celestia are related by blood. Most likely better would be "so close to you".
I don't quite understand how Twilight being a pegasus results in Rainbow Dash abandoning personal hygiene. Might be better as "not as maneuvreable as you".
Most likely, "in".
I seriously doubt that boring, not-exciting shows would bring more money than being a librarian. Also, no explanation on why exactly she wouldn't be an element of harmony. As far as I know, being a unicorn wasn't a requirement for that.
Obvious favoritism is obvious. Also implies Shining on indefinite babysitting duty and basically invalidates the ending of second season - Cadance also implied to fall under 'obvious favoritism' which kinda is an antithesis for 'true love'.
Vaguely depressing chapter.
Chapter 2
Kinda the opposite is implied.
In fact it should be "In fact". And most likely, "to".
Chapter 3
Kinda doubt that Twilight has a personal army. Most likely "our".
No previous or further mention of the identity of the mysterious "him". Oh, of course it is easy to understand that the sentence is about Sombra... But nobody likes to have to remember meta while reading a story.
Kinda went overboard with "far much easier". "Much easier" reads much, much better. "Far easier" too, I guess. The orange part of the sentence my mortal mind simply fails to comprehend in any fashion.
[sarcasm]Absolute unwaivering support of one's faithful student and confidence in her moral integrity[/sarcasm] with generous helping of hypocrisy(conflicting pairs of statements are marked by italics and underlined text of the same color). I especially like it when Celestia states that she would never kill another pony unless she has to, when(by earlier statement) they have execution for ponyslaughter, but only possible banishment for attempted genocide. Not strictly a mistake, but this chapter was seriously not funny or interesting to read.
Chapter 4
My eyes were burned by eloquence of speech and rampant tautology used by millenia-old Princess, so I shall be brief.
Conflicts with "Mares all across Equestria envy you on a daily basis,". This statement already makes her one of the most famous(if not the most famous) mare in Equestria.
Also, repetitive advice to burn or hide the letter. Tautology.
Oh, all of that was done mostly because I despise people who downvote without giving a reason. Basically, in my opinion this fanfic is not funny enough to be either comedy or trollestia-fic. That leaves the story as a badly written fic with few redeeming qualities. So, -1.