Ion Clockwork is a unicorn pony, fascinated with technology he spends most of his time finding new ways to replace magic with what he thinks is more practical.
When the princess invites him to the academy of experimental magic however. He has to contend with having a room mate that doesn't exactly share his views on magic. Contains grimdark in chapter 3.
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Hello and welcome to my first published fan fiction.
Creative writing has long been a hobby of mine but I have never written for someone other than myself. Please leave comments on my grammar and spelling, constructive criticism is very appreciated.
We begin the story of Ion, an OC pony of my own creation. If you wonder about his appearance, see my avatar. His cutie mark will come in later, don't worry.
Hope you enjoy the ride as we continue in the next chapter.
Updates will probably happen once a week, as I am taking education in IT. Expect updates on weekends, because that is usually the only time I have for writing.
I can imagine twilight bursting into flames soon...
I have already started writing the next chapter, expect it next saturday.
Watched and tracked, waiting for the update.
Holy dooly, im at 1095 words on the next chapter already. Who knew I could be that productive through history class!
Well, because of this, the next chapter might be a bit longer than the first.
Still planning on waiting til saturday to give out the chapter, that way I can take the time to make it as good as I can!
And here I am in a conflict of conscience about berating you to bypass history with ponies in order to write what I want to read.
..on the other hand I skipped my physical chemistry class today and spent the time reading, so I'm not really in aposition to argue..
j/k. Feel motivated! And keep the chapters coming. This setting has potential and is definitely something new around here.
♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪
Deploying surprise in 3... 2... 1...
Welcome to a new chapter in Ion's story.
The plot thickens.
The snark lurks in corners.
And oh my god its not saturday yet?
Enjoy chapter 2 far ahead of schedule!
I finished it earlier on account of doing quite well on my recent presentation on economics in school. I was given free the rest of the day and finished up this chapter.
Decided to split the next parts up a bit. The original thought was to have a 4000 word chapter. But with smaller chapters. I can still meet my self imposed atleast one chapter a week deadline even if I need to work on other things.
*Taps the description* "Bloody hell! It's real, I've found it. A genuine pony sitcom!"
...
I just noticed that actually, probably related to me wondering how much plot to reveal.
In the end I decided pretty much nothing except the setting. But it does indeed sound quite like an episode description from a TV channel.
Hello again. I'd like to give you some quick pointers if you're ok with them.
(In order not to let this look like another 'your spelling is horrible!'-post I read so much of lately, I'm trying to be as specific as possible)
-Your spelling is good but you always seem to end 'your' and 'their' with a ’ , which I think is incorrect.
-You changed the Spelling from Phillydelphia to Fillydelphia during writing.
(Since I got no idea myself and I'm too lazy right now to look it up, I'll leave that up to you)
-You didn't capitalize the name 'honeysuckle' and a few lines down
-you left out a ’ when using 'Honeysuckles' in second case.
No biggie, (counting the first as repeating, that sums up to fat 4 mistakes in a total 3,736 words. [I wish I had that kind of quota back when I had to write essays in English..] So pleeeease don't be one of those writers that spend the next 5 comments apologizing while giving you the feeling you just killed of an author you wanted to read more from.
)
I just wanted it mentioned for the sake of positive criticism.
..and, you know, for the sake of completeness..
Looking forward to saturday.
Fixing all the mistakes except the first, which depends. The addition of the ' means with ownership of. Like if I said I had your' monkey.
But as for the other mistakes. I am about to fix them after I type this comment. I stated in my description that I wanted people to do this. So don't feel bad about commenting about my errors. Tell me them instead, so that I may fix them.
sent it in PM as just just proclaimed.
Then went on to delete the wrong post.
(*sigh* ..redoing from scratch..
)
I'd like to share an enlightenment I just had:
)
)
A comment is from you for all to see.
It is basically meant when you want to adress all readers
(as in 'hello everyone!'
or have all readers see you adress one or several in specific.
(as in 'you're doing great!' or 'you two shut up!'
It just ALSO happens to be the default method of communication in here so here a quick reminder:
If you want to send a message to one specific person: (and not put a special emphasis on having that act broadcasted)
(as in making the writer aware that he/she just made a spelling mistake that you just want corrected/edited but not nessecarily published)
If you feel like doing this, why not just send a message?
Since that's pretty much what they are cut out for.
Love 'n' Tolerate!
(I would continue to point out how proud I am of myself for figuring this out on my own.. but I just had to re-write this post because I accidentially deleted it before so I'll take that as an omen not to boast.
)
Added a little tidbit in the description about my policy for updating. Also since I have updated this week, this could mean I will wait past saturday for the next update. But I will most likely have another chapter for you guys (or/and girls) by saturday!
Excellent
A shorter chapter.
You could almost say this fanfiction is my experiment, I am trying different genres.
Each chapter marked as a BONUS will be of a genre non-standard to my main chapters.
PLOT SPOILERS BELOW THIS LINE.
A mad combination of pinkie's reality tearing abillities and improbable existance and a unicorn.
Witness the birth of bonebird. Our villain for the evening.
Rest assured she will be returning.
So yeah, I wanted to try my hand at some gore and grimdark, woooh.
Next chapter will concern what happened after, then we will be flashbacking to the first lesson. which happened before this bonebird thing.
inspired by this song http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OSZlAltkYoc.
DEAR GOD MEGA SPOILER BELOW THIS LINE.
NOW THAT I WROTE THIS, I FEEL SAD FOR PINKIE
im thinking Zalgo...
This shit is gonna give me nightmares!
Don't worrry, next week we will be returning to non-grimdark.
I have almost gotten over my disease, expect writing to start again soon.
UPDATE: Chapter 4 almost done. Will be releasing within friday.
So short
I can't survive on these rations.
I need bigger portions!
Big delicious plates stacked with pounds and pounds of stories!
Omnomnom
The chapters are short mostly because I am still quite sick, and not up to writing large chapters.
I will see if I can work on the length but there are times when I cut them when appropriate. I just reach a point in the writing where I see "This is the end of this chapter." So it just kinda goes from there.
Anyway, next chapter will be my license to DOUBLE THE FUN, or atleast the comedy.
ONWARDS! *Sneezes*
Dratted norway and its stupid snow climate.
163970
*gives you hot soup*
*buries you in oranges*
Soup and lotsa vitamins should cure you in notime.
Sorry about the delay people, but I have a realisation.
I attempted to put a time limit on a creative process. Writing can not be done when you want to, only when you are inspired to. And as such, updating by a schedule would produce abominations that I would not be proud to call chapters. The next chapter is 2000 words long and only halfway done, I am waiting for that sudden stroke to make me finish it now.
It will probably end up being around 5000 words.
205635 wise choice.
"From this day forth I would like you to report to us your findings on the magic of creativity-
when (and only when!) you happen to discover them."
I decided to split up the superchapter I was writing instead, so I could post something here to make myself feel less bad for lacking the inspiration to write. Have a chapter.
Note that Storage Door is a character from a dungeons and dragons game with friends, one of them made me promise to include it in this story. Do not worry however, it is not dangerous. At least not very.
The sudden moment the next chapter pops up will include our villain. As an interlude chapter. With lots of evil laughter, stroking of hamsters and a general omnipresent wrongness.
Also, honeysuckle is my way to make up for the horrible thing I did to pinkie, her power may live on in bonebird, but her personality will continue with honeysuckle.