I think understood what happened here, but am hoping the next chapter(s) will clear things up. So Celestia spoke to Terminus (when Twilight came back to life), who says he didn't speak to her later on in the chapter, am I right?
2153563 Let's look at the facts here from a skeptical perspective. A Being that calls itself Terminus talked to Celestia, while Twilight is unconscious and with one other witness. This Being seems aggressive and alien. Celestia then talks to a Being that calls itself Terminus in front of Twilight, and it claims to have no memory of having met her, while seeming quite civil. There are several reasons this could be the case, but I will leave that for you to ponder.
2153601 'Those were', not 'that were', unless you're from the southwest of England and speak (+type) in a dialect . Otherwise, it's okay, if a little awkwardly phrased. Perfectly intelligible, just a little odd.
Edit: I was tempted to leave it a full week, but I'm honestly not particularly mean, plus I was pretty impatient to post another chapter.
great chapter! interesting, so who was the 'terminus' that spoke to celestia the first time? did he simply fake the confusion or was something else going on? i have to say, even though impressive that she would not give in and die, i was hoping that twilight herself would fight her way back to the living, although i guess that would have a been a little overpowered considering the time relative to the progression of the story. also, the 'marker', his last world was dead, was it not, what if the other 'terminus' "marks" worlds for "death".
the interactions between twilight and celestia are incredibly cute, and definitely interesting, looking forward to more of that. celestia's interactions with terminus are quite funny as well, considering non of them enjoy the other very much, but both of them are rather 'attached' to twilight in some way.
2153620 That wouldn't work because terminus is recently called to equestria however Nightmare could have been caused by one of his siblings.
I think Terminus has two states of entity, State one is while Twilight is waking and he is understanding and kind, state to is while both of their waking presences are sleeping therefor his sleeping entity allows him to subconsciously delve fully into Twilight's memories and in extreme cases act through Twilight's body in self defense.
You have a rogue kneck loose in your story. A slender white kneck bent low, and she felt hot breath at her ear. She could feel the princess's heart thumping and unconsciously snuggled closer. “Do not ask my forgiveness, for I am not deserving to give it to you. There is nothing I would not forgive of you at this moment, little one.”
Dang, Twi, those magical compacts are starting to pile up. You'll have a whole gaggle pretty soon (though I guess it would be a flock if you ever become an alicorn.)
well...that was most interesting. so celestia knows something of terminus' race, or at least she thinks she does.
So.... this escalted quickly.... ah till the next chapter then.
I think understood what happened here, but am hoping the next chapter(s) will clear things up.
So Celestia spoke to Terminus (when Twilight came back to life), who says he didn't speak to her later on in the chapter, am I right?
Hmmm interesting.
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Let's look at the facts here from a skeptical perspective. A Being that calls itself Terminus talked to Celestia, while Twilight is unconscious and with one other witness. This Being seems aggressive and alien. Celestia then talks to a Being that calls itself Terminus in front of Twilight, and it claims to have no memory of having met her, while seeming quite civil. There are several reasons this could be the case, but I will leave that for you to ponder.
That were my exact thoughts at the same moment! :D
(Ugh.. is the grammar okay? I can't engrish)
Edit: I must thank you for not letting the cliffhanger linger for longer than necessary :3 Thanks a lot, in fact.
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'Those were', not 'that were', unless you're from the southwest of England and speak (+type) in a dialect . Otherwise, it's okay, if a little awkwardly phrased. Perfectly intelligible, just a little odd.
Edit: I was tempted to leave it a full week, but I'm honestly not particularly mean, plus I was pretty impatient to post another chapter.
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when you put it like that...
Also, my theory is that Terminus is Nightmare Moon or caused Luna to become Nightmare Moon.
Why I think this:
and that it said that Twilight's eyes were
Going back over that part, I just realised that it was a part of Celetia's flashback, but I'm still sticking with it.
Awesome!
Loved this chapter and how it progressed things.
Especially like this portrayal of Celestia.
Good show sir!
One mistake I did see:
I have never experienced a pact such as hours, and this... this was not present any records to which I was privy...”
Emphasis in bold, I think you meant 'ours' not hours.
Terminus is supposed to be an offshoot of some greater being, right?
It's possible the conversation discrepancy is due to that.
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Thanks for the compliment, but mostly thanks for pointing out that mistake .
I join the endless ocean of cries for MOAR!
I love this story more and more as time goes on. It's quite an engaging read. Just a shame I have to read it one chapter at a time i think.
great chapter!
interesting, so who was the 'terminus' that spoke to celestia the first time? did he simply fake the confusion or was something else going on?
i have to say, even though impressive that she would not give in and die, i was hoping that twilight herself would fight her way back to the living, although i guess that would have a been a little overpowered considering the time relative to the progression of the story.
also, the 'marker', his last world was dead, was it not, what if the other 'terminus' "marks" worlds for "death".
the interactions between twilight and celestia are incredibly cute, and definitely interesting, looking forward to more of that. celestia's interactions with terminus are quite funny as well, considering non of them enjoy the other very much, but both of them are rather 'attached' to twilight in some way.
Thank you for not making this another 'Twilight gets possessed and becomes evil' story.
2153620 That wouldn't work because terminus is recently called to equestria however Nightmare could have been caused by one of his siblings.
I think Terminus has two states of entity, State one is while Twilight is waking and he is understanding and kind, state to is while both of their waking presences are sleeping therefor his sleeping entity allows him to subconsciously delve fully into Twilight's memories and in extreme cases act through Twilight's body in self defense.
another awesome chapter and Twilestia all the way
2153848 That's what I had been thinking.
You have a rogue kneck loose in your story.
A slender white kneck bent low, and she felt hot breath at her ear. She could feel the princess's heart thumping and unconsciously snuggled closer. “Do not ask my forgiveness, for I am not deserving to give it to you. There is nothing I would not forgive of you at this moment, little one.”
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Fixed, I think. Replaced 'a slender white neck' with 'Celestia', therefore it should be a little less awkward sounding.
I think you just needed to clear the rogue 'k'. The line seemed fine to me.
This just keeps getting better and better.
Dang, Twi, those magical compacts are starting to pile up. You'll have a whole gaggle pretty soon (though I guess it would be a flock if you ever become an alicorn.)