I'm not so sure about the part with Pinkie. Twilight is afraid of kissing Celestia, but when Pinkie does it it's ok? Kissing someone else like that while you love somebody else just annoys me I guess.
It almost felt like you needed something to fill in the blanks. I'm not saying that it was bad, but the sudden romance that Pinkie has towards Twilight threw me for a loop. Anyway, I guess it was an one time deal so no harm done. I just hope that the next chapter arrives on time:D.
3578466 I was iffy about it myself, since it sorta crept in while writing the scene, but please don't mistake what's happening there for romance, because I thought I made it pretty clear that Pinkie's not really after that from Twilight. It's more about bonding, and trust, since I got the idea that Pinkie is both very open and very physical when it comes to the way she loves other ponies. Even if she were in love with another (in this case Dash) that wouldn't stop her from wanting to be physically intimate with those she cares for greatly. Be it cuddles, kisses, or other things. Whatever makes that pony happy, and Twilight's been wanting to kiss someone for a little while now. I have a reason for wanting to write this, and it involves Twilight's outlook on life in general, and outlook on lust vs love in particular. It has its purpose, in theory, although I'm pretty sure I haven't handled it too well here . Maybe it's weird because I'm quite used to the concept of open relationships, I don't know. I could definitely do with cutting some sections down a little, though.
Since this is from Twilight's perspective, and she's been through a lot lately with little rest, she's probably not going to be in her right mind, especially since she's convincing herself that Celestia won't want her. That's basically why, whenever she has time to herself, she ruminates endlessly on the situation. Also, I never did make much use of that whole 'mental fluctuations' thing from chapter two, so now seemed as good a time as any. Frankly, though, if you've stolen a kiss from Princess Celestia, half convinced yourself it was a mistake (and that you've ruined your previous relationship with her), then found a friend who's apparently eager to cater to those frustrations for a night? Probably going to roll with it, at least until the overall weirdness of the situation catches up.
Still, I'd have preferred to foreshadow this a little more, so it isn't completely off-the-wall, but never really found the right time to do it. I guess I could've edited Ch 5 a little, but... I don't like editing stuff that's already up. Feels too much like retconning. Still, I'll probably want to revise this chapter a bit in the near future, most likely just before I release Ch 12. Unfortunately, due to the length of this section, a lot of the action I had planned needed to be bumped into 12, hence why I feel this chapter is a bit weak (hence the feeling of filler) .
I feel sorry for the shit I put Twilight through, but it was either this or have her be completely OP, and that way lies the path of the black and red alicorn.
I laughed far harder at this than should've been polite.
Loving how this is progressing, Sunder. I eagerly await more.
Anyway, didn't feel like filler to me. Reminded me a lot of a MLP Pathfinder game I was in, where we wound up spending like ten five hour game sessions talking about our feelings and playing jokes while running around our ship instead of actually adventuring.
So yeah, I really liked the chapter with no complaints to speak of.
This is officially one of my "Hey, it's updated? Drop everything and read it!" fics. This story's drawn me in ever since the first chapter.
3578565 It did kinda come out of left field, and it didn't really seem to fit in well with the rest of the chapter (which was awesome by the way).
I don't know....maybe it's just because of all the talk about 'trust', and yet it really feels like a complete betrayal of Celestia to spend all that time dwelling on how much Twilight cares about her, and then have her turn around and basically have sex with Pinkie just because she's there and willing as soon as Twilight's attempts to woo the princess don't turn out like a fairy tale romance. Maybe it's because Twilight's logic for even considering it in the first place amounts to nothing more than the fact that she's horny and telling Pinkie that she doesn't want to sleep with her will make her sad (can you say emotional blackmail? 'Cause Twilight sure can't.....). Or maybe it's just because the whole 'open relationship' thing is generally a huge turn off for me on a personal level. I dunno, but for whatever reason, the whole inclusion of a sexual aspect in the relationship between Pinkie and Twilight felt unnecessary, arbitrary, and, quite frankly, out of character for both of them (given what we've seen of them so far in the story).
On a more positive note though, I really like all of the stuff you did with Twilight's magic and the spark. I hope we get to see more of that mindscape and the link in the future, because that was pretty awesome. I assume we will, at least in passing, since the other Twilight mentioned that it wasn't her first time there. One question about that honeysuckle smell that Twilight keeps mentioning: is that a side effect of Terminus using her abilities, or Twilight tapping into the link, or something else entirely? It's been a while since I read all the earlier chapters, so I'm probably missing some important detail......I should reread them at some point.........
Is it filler? Kinda in my opinion? Do I care? Nope!
Seriously, seeing that this has updated in my inbox makes me super happy. I sneaked time at work to read this on my phone, couldn't wait to read it.
Twilight feels very much in character with how she is taking things considering the situation. And Pinkie Pie is Pinkie Pie. Considering how she has been on the show lately, this one was a lot more... lucid than the canon version has been!
3580702 Perhaps. I did love the book, actually a lot more than I liked LoTR (in book form), mainly due to FoTR feeling like a complete slog. Also, it was a toss-up between 'Smog' and 'Embermaw'. He's pretty much Smaug atop the Lonely Mountain in canon, minus the attitude, and he doesn't have a canonical name, so... well, Smog also fits the way he was introduced in Dragonshy, so I rolled with it.
3581430 Hmm, I know, I just had second thoughts about the way I've handled some of this, that's all. Like, before I posted it. It's sorta like kicking a shipping hive, tbh.
Dear Princess 3581503 3581430 understands. Don't change it! Even if it feels a little like filler, I think sometimes stories just need a gentler chapter once in a while. Your faithful reader, Selenelion
3581784 I think the issue was more with where I decided to cut the chapter, now that I've had time to mull it over. Really, I should've just cut it after she linked to the spark, although the 'Pinkie in your face' joke would've lost some impact.
3582397 I appreciated the degree of progression it brought when you finished out the scenes in the library. Too many authors try for the per-chapter impact of cutting very shortly after a climax point, but you're eleven chapters in. Explanations and lulls are important to toss in now and again.
We followed you this far. It's safe to assume you have our attention. Keep up the good work.
Eh the thing about physical intimacy vs emotional intimacy is that there is still the key word 'intimacy' there. Also when you make a character more into 'open relationships' and 'physical intimacy' it's rather a nice way of saying that they are a slut, and it devalues the impact of actions they would take towards 'emotional intimacy'. Though I can understand where you are going with this seeing as the story is intended to be a Twilunestia type story, I just assumed you would be taking a different route and that was presumptuous of me.
3591560 Well, that was awfully passive aggressive of you. You seem to imply that those in open relationships cannot be emotionally intimate, because they are 'sluts', whatever that word means anymore. Usually, the meaning of that word has trended toward 'woman who likes to have sex, just not with <man doing the slut-shaming>'. It's a word used when a woman who has declined your generous offer of strings-free sex, usually uttered with a bitter sneer. I doubt you're basing these assertions on your own experiences with open relationships.
Being 'into open relationships and physical intimacy' devalues emotional intimacy? Bullshit. Open relationships don't work that way (It's actually more about emotional intimacy with more than one person, silly), but if you're in the business of slut shaming, perhaps this isn't the story for you. I highly doubt you'd have an issue with Pinkie's behaviour in this chapter if she were male. I'm amazed you can handle the lesbian shipping, honestly. As for this being a Twilunestia, read more than the character tags next time. I have said in the past that I was considering making this a Twilunestia, but as of now, Luna is merely an important character uninvolved in the Twilestia shipping.
Thanks for the criticism. Leave your assumptions at the door, please.
I actually considered adding a parenthesis of "Or a sleaze if its male" but it seemed arbitrary. Slut is just a word, apologies if it triggers a need for social justice.
"It's actually more about emotional intimacy with more than one person, silly" For when that special someone is actually that special some people? Hahaha. And in moments of intimacy you will know that its intimate because they would do it with any other? Of course I'm fine with the lesbian shipping or the m/m shipping, do you really think that because one has monogamist views they are immediately unprogressive, or that monogamy is solely for straight people? I've actually been reading it for some time, this is after all not the first time I've posted here. It just strikes me as odd for example, why when she was horny did she simply not proposition Pinkie Pie or her friends if she was openly intimate the whole time, or Dash when she confronted Twilight in the act of masturbating?
3596294 I getcha. I have a little explaining to do, but I'll send you a PM so as to avoid spoilers for the other readers regarding some of the stuff in play at the moment.
Always fun to read what you write, but the whole conjuration bit took its sweet time. You do a fine job of constructing and distilling the concept in a way we can understand it, but it was not able to hold my interest over the course of thousands of words. Something may have been getting accomplished in a narrative sense (I can only presume this is not pointless and in fact is important later on), but it is common practice for important things like this to be spread out in a way that doesn't frustrate the reader/try his/her patience. Save some of Twilight's practice for later. Or, if you feel you are in a hurry to get it all out now so that it can be used shortly and you feel you can't waste any more time before explaining it, you need to start taking a deboning knife to it. The "kill your darlings" advice might be best used here: You may like what you write, but if it doesn't get the job done quickly enough, kill it with extreme prejudice. "But, my darlings," you will say. Kill them and get the job done.
3600876 Heh, I've no issue with editing my work, it's just editing parts that have already been posted makes me a little nervous, idk. As I said, I'll probably rework this later since that whole section should've been two chapters in my own opinion, just so it won't irk me so much. It was sorta important to shut down the conjuration avenue of inquiry for now, since I'd mentioned it several times previously, and having her talk to Terminus while drained seemed like a really, really good time to explain the deal with the honeysuckle. It's a little slow, but I realised I hadn't had any of those magic sections for a little while (spark doesn't count), and I'd mentioned conjuration too much to let it hang. Too much was going on at once, and I felt if I pushed any further without giving Twilight the mental reprieve of a magic lesson she'd snap, honestly. As it is, my draft for chapter 12 isn't looking too hot for her continued sanity.
As it is, I'm not sure whether to split it into two chapters, or try to rework the pacing there, because I don't really see where else I can put certain scenes. It's a lull, really, but then I didn't want this story to be all drama. I mean, I wanted to go with Adventure/Slice of Life, but apparently those aren't kosher on fimfic.
You're worried about Twilight snapping? I mean, you've basically walked into this great oasis of drama, and you're walking the other direction? Hell, let her snap! Use it! It's right there. Unless her loss of sanity completely destroys what you're trying to do, of course. Don't be nice to your characters - put them through the wringer. People love that shite (or at least their subconscious does), which is why slice-of-life and adventure tend to garner less interest: General lack of drama.
Meta-thinking indeed! Your writing style is a much different one compared to what I'm used to. I feel like you're writing with emotions and psychology in equal parts. This taxes my poor brain in ways it desperately needs.
That said, I was sad to notice a glaring lack of the Princess Celestia in this chapter.
3609060 Heh thanks. Writing chapter twelve right now, actually. I'll try to put in some Celestia, but it likely won't be loads because chapter twelve is looking like it'll be pretty packed as it is. I've got 6k words at least, and, well... poor Fluttershy . Celestia's not so much out of the picture as 'important, but there are some really pressing matters that have arisen', and since her feelings aren't an immediate issue right now, throwing her in here might screw up the pacing is the thing.
As for the way I write... I pretty much just sit down and write by the seat of my pants, so what you see is what you get tbh. I mean, a lot of this story's elements come from throwing the characters at each other like billiard balls. I come up with ideas on the walk to university, and they evolve into something completely different when I commit them to page. And it usually fits, is the worrying part. You think I planned on Twilight kissing Celestia? Ha! Oh, and if you like red and black alicorns I've got a treat for you.
Oftentimes an author will say, "I just wing it" when their style is brought up. That's kinda the point though. Everyone wings it differently. Some authors love their internal monologues to explain character development (the logicals), some like to explain the situation via their narrative and have the characters' reactions hint at their thoughts (the psychologicals) and others still like to have their character development crux on heavy emotions to carry the gravity of the situation across (the -- you probably guessed -- emotionals).
These are, of course, of my own design. Never before have I tried to find out what all the different styles are, and I don't think I could. That's just a "it sounds nice and I can communicate it semi-effectively to other people" kinda thing.
You write horse words nice. Tl;dr
EDIT: Poor Fluttershy? No Lady Lux? R&Balicorns? Be still, my beating heart.
3633459 Probably something like a gender-flipped version of Stratos, of Sacrifice fame. Although fame is probably rather relative, given how few people have even heard of that game, but still...
Skip to 4:32 if you just want Stratos' voice. I pictured Terminus as ethereal, generally feminine sounding (because neuter entity bonded to a mare) but with a speech pattern that's somewhere between neuter and masculine.
I'm not so sure about the part with Pinkie. Twilight is afraid of kissing Celestia, but when Pinkie does it it's ok? Kissing someone else like that while you love somebody else just annoys me I guess.
It almost felt like you needed something to fill in the blanks. I'm not saying that it was bad, but the sudden romance that Pinkie has towards Twilight threw me for a loop. Anyway, I guess it was an one time deal so no harm done. I just hope that the next chapter arrives on time:D.
3578466
I was iffy about it myself, since it sorta crept in while writing the scene, but please don't mistake what's happening there for romance, because I thought I made it pretty clear that Pinkie's not really after that from Twilight. It's more about bonding, and trust, since I got the idea that Pinkie is both very open and very physical when it comes to the way she loves other ponies. Even if she were in love with another (in this case Dash) that wouldn't stop her from wanting to be physically intimate with those she cares for greatly. Be it cuddles, kisses, or other things. Whatever makes that pony happy, and Twilight's been wanting to kiss someone for a little while now. I have a reason for wanting to write this, and it involves Twilight's outlook on life in general, and outlook on lust vs love in particular. It has its purpose, in theory, although I'm pretty sure I haven't handled it too well here . Maybe it's weird because I'm quite used to the concept of open relationships, I don't know. I could definitely do with cutting some sections down a little, though.
Since this is from Twilight's perspective, and she's been through a lot lately with little rest, she's probably not going to be in her right mind, especially since she's convincing herself that Celestia won't want her. That's basically why, whenever she has time to herself, she ruminates endlessly on the situation. Also, I never did make much use of that whole 'mental fluctuations' thing from chapter two, so now seemed as good a time as any. Frankly, though, if you've stolen a kiss from Princess Celestia, half convinced yourself it was a mistake (and that you've ruined your previous relationship with her), then found a friend who's apparently eager to cater to those frustrations for a night? Probably going to roll with it, at least until the overall weirdness of the situation catches up.
Still, I'd have preferred to foreshadow this a little more, so it isn't completely off-the-wall, but never really found the right time to do it. I guess I could've edited Ch 5 a little, but... I don't like editing stuff that's already up. Feels too much like retconning. Still, I'll probably want to revise this chapter a bit in the near future, most likely just before I release Ch 12. Unfortunately, due to the length of this section, a lot of the action I had planned needed to be bumped into 12, hence why I feel this chapter is a bit weak (hence the feeling of filler) .
I laughed far harder at this than should've been polite.
Loving how this is progressing, Sunder. I eagerly await more.
Oh god...
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Heh, I hate writing Pinkie, but it's getting to drop lines like those that make it worthwhile
Dammit, accidentally erased my comment somehow.
Anyway, didn't feel like filler to me. Reminded me a lot of a MLP Pathfinder game I was in, where we wound up spending like ten five hour game sessions talking about our feelings and playing jokes while running around our ship instead of actually adventuring.
So yeah, I really liked the chapter with no complaints to speak of.
This is officially one of my "Hey, it's updated? Drop everything and read it!" fics. This story's drawn me in ever since the first chapter.
3578565
It did kinda come out of left field, and it didn't really seem to fit in well with the rest of the chapter (which was awesome by the way).
I don't know....maybe it's just because of all the talk about 'trust', and yet it really feels like a complete betrayal of Celestia to spend all that time dwelling on how much Twilight cares about her, and then have her turn around and basically have sex with Pinkie just because she's there and willing as soon as Twilight's attempts to woo the princess don't turn out like a fairy tale romance. Maybe it's because Twilight's logic for even considering it in the first place amounts to nothing more than the fact that she's horny and telling Pinkie that she doesn't want to sleep with her will make her sad (can you say emotional blackmail? 'Cause Twilight sure can't.....). Or maybe it's just because the whole 'open relationship' thing is generally a huge turn off for me on a personal level. I dunno, but for whatever reason, the whole inclusion of a sexual aspect in the relationship between Pinkie and Twilight felt unnecessary, arbitrary, and, quite frankly, out of character for both of them (given what we've seen of them so far in the story).
On a more positive note though, I really like all of the stuff you did with Twilight's magic and the spark. I hope we get to see more of that mindscape and the link in the future, because that was pretty awesome. I assume we will, at least in passing, since the other Twilight mentioned that it wasn't her first time there. One question about that honeysuckle smell that Twilight keeps mentioning: is that a side effect of Terminus using her abilities, or Twilight tapping into the link, or something else entirely? It's been a while since I read all the earlier chapters, so I'm probably missing some important detail......I should reread them at some point.........
Is it filler? Kinda in my opinion? Do I care? Nope!
Seriously, seeing that this has updated in my inbox makes me super happy. I sneaked time at work to read this on my phone, couldn't wait to read it.
Twilight feels very much in character with how she is taking things considering the situation. And Pinkie Pie is Pinkie Pie. Considering how she has been on the show lately, this one was a lot more... lucid than the canon version has been!
Really looking forward to the next chapter!
I see. So are you going to see the next movie about a hobbit?
3580702
Perhaps. I did love the book, actually a lot more than I liked LoTR (in book form), mainly due to FoTR feeling like a complete slog. Also, it was a toss-up between 'Smog' and 'Embermaw'. He's pretty much Smaug atop the Lonely Mountain in canon, minus the attitude, and he doesn't have a canonical name, so... well, Smog also fits the way he was introduced in Dragonshy, so I rolled with it.
3578565 Don't touch this. Please. Revisions are bad, revisions based on comments are worse. More on this later.
This, this right here made my day.
3581430
Hmm, I know, I just had second thoughts about the way I've handled some of this, that's all. Like, before I posted it. It's sorta like kicking a shipping hive, tbh.
Dear Princess 3581503
3581430 understands. Don't change it! Even if it feels a little like filler, I think sometimes stories just need a gentler chapter once in a while.
Your faithful reader,
Selenelion
3581784
I think the issue was more with where I decided to cut the chapter, now that I've had time to mull it over. Really, I should've just cut it after she linked to the spark, although the 'Pinkie in your face' joke would've lost some impact.
3582397
I appreciated the degree of progression it brought when you finished out the scenes in the library. Too many authors try for the per-chapter impact of cutting very shortly after a climax point, but you're eleven chapters in. Explanations and lulls are important to toss in now and again.
We followed you this far. It's safe to assume you have our attention. Keep up the good work.
3578565
Eh the thing about physical intimacy vs emotional intimacy is that there is still the key word 'intimacy' there. Also when you make a character more into 'open relationships' and 'physical intimacy' it's rather a nice way of saying that they are a slut, and it devalues the impact of actions they would take towards 'emotional intimacy'.
Though I can understand where you are going with this seeing as the story is intended to be a Twilunestia type story, I just assumed you would be taking a different route and that was presumptuous of me.
3591560
Well, that was awfully passive aggressive of you. You seem to imply that those in open relationships cannot be emotionally intimate, because they are 'sluts', whatever that word means anymore. Usually, the meaning of that word has trended toward 'woman who likes to have sex, just not with <man doing the slut-shaming>'. It's a word used when a woman who has declined your generous offer of strings-free sex, usually uttered with a bitter sneer. I doubt you're basing these assertions on your own experiences with open relationships.
Being 'into open relationships and physical intimacy' devalues emotional intimacy? Bullshit. Open relationships don't work that way (It's actually more about emotional intimacy with more than one person, silly), but if you're in the business of slut shaming, perhaps this isn't the story for you. I highly doubt you'd have an issue with Pinkie's behaviour in this chapter if she were male. I'm amazed you can handle the lesbian shipping, honestly. As for this being a Twilunestia, read more than the character tags next time. I have said in the past that I was considering making this a Twilunestia, but as of now, Luna is merely an important character uninvolved in the Twilestia shipping.
Thanks for the criticism. Leave your assumptions at the door, please.
3596134
I actually considered adding a parenthesis of "Or a sleaze if its male" but it seemed arbitrary. Slut is just a word, apologies if it triggers a need for social justice.
"It's actually more about emotional intimacy with more than one person, silly" For when that special someone is actually that special some people? Hahaha. And in moments of intimacy you will know that its intimate because they would do it with any other?
Of course I'm fine with the lesbian shipping or the m/m shipping, do you really think that because one has monogamist views they are immediately unprogressive, or that monogamy is solely for straight people?
I've actually been reading it for some time, this is after all not the first time I've posted here. It just strikes me as odd for example, why when she was horny did she simply not proposition Pinkie Pie or her friends if she was openly intimate the whole time, or Dash when she confronted Twilight in the act of masturbating?
3596294
I getcha. I have a little explaining to do, but I'll send you a PM so as to avoid spoilers for the other readers regarding some of the stuff in play at the moment.
Always fun to read what you write, but the whole conjuration bit took its sweet time. You do a fine job of constructing and distilling the concept in a way we can understand it, but it was not able to hold my interest over the course of thousands of words. Something may have been getting accomplished in a narrative sense (I can only presume this is not pointless and in fact is important later on), but it is common practice for important things like this to be spread out in a way that doesn't frustrate the reader/try his/her patience. Save some of Twilight's practice for later. Or, if you feel you are in a hurry to get it all out now so that it can be used shortly and you feel you can't waste any more time before explaining it, you need to start taking a deboning knife to it. The "kill your darlings" advice might be best used here: You may like what you write, but if it doesn't get the job done quickly enough, kill it with extreme prejudice. "But, my darlings," you will say. Kill them and get the job done.
3600876
Heh, I've no issue with editing my work, it's just editing parts that have already been posted makes me a little nervous, idk. As I said, I'll probably rework this later since that whole section should've been two chapters in my own opinion, just so it won't irk me so much. It was sorta important to shut down the conjuration avenue of inquiry for now, since I'd mentioned it several times previously, and having her talk to Terminus while drained seemed like a really, really good time to explain the deal with the honeysuckle. It's a little slow, but I realised I hadn't had any of those magic sections for a little while (spark doesn't count), and I'd mentioned conjuration too much to let it hang. Too much was going on at once, and I felt if I pushed any further without giving Twilight the mental reprieve of a magic lesson she'd snap, honestly. As it is, my draft for chapter 12 isn't looking too hot for her continued sanity.
As it is, I'm not sure whether to split it into two chapters, or try to rework the pacing there, because I don't really see where else I can put certain scenes. It's a lull, really, but then I didn't want this story to be all drama. I mean, I wanted to go with Adventure/Slice of Life, but apparently those aren't kosher on fimfic.
3601392
You're worried about Twilight snapping?
I mean, you've basically walked into this great oasis of drama, and you're walking the other direction? Hell, let her snap! Use it! It's right there. Unless her loss of sanity completely destroys what you're trying to do, of course. Don't be nice to your characters - put them through the wringer. People love that shite (or at least their subconscious does), which is why slice-of-life and adventure tend to garner less interest: General lack of drama.
Meta-thinking indeed! Your writing style is a much different one compared to what I'm used to. I feel like you're writing with emotions and psychology in equal parts. This taxes my poor brain in ways it desperately needs.
That said, I was sad to notice a glaring lack of the Princess Celestia in this chapter.
As an aside, I really like how Terminus speaks.
3609060
Heh thanks. Writing chapter twelve right now, actually. I'll try to put in some Celestia, but it likely won't be loads because chapter twelve is looking like it'll be pretty packed as it is. I've got 6k words at least, and, well... poor Fluttershy . Celestia's not so much out of the picture as 'important, but there are some really pressing matters that have arisen', and since her feelings aren't an immediate issue right now, throwing her in here might screw up the pacing is the thing.
As for the way I write... I pretty much just sit down and write by the seat of my pants, so what you see is what you get tbh. I mean, a lot of this story's elements come from throwing the characters at each other like billiard balls. I come up with ideas on the walk to university, and they evolve into something completely different when I commit them to page. And it usually fits, is the worrying part. You think I planned on Twilight kissing Celestia? Ha! Oh, and if you like red and black alicorns I've got a treat for you.
3609887
Oftentimes an author will say, "I just wing it" when their style is brought up. That's kinda the point though. Everyone wings it differently. Some authors love their internal monologues to explain character development (the logicals), some like to explain the situation via their narrative and have the characters' reactions hint at their thoughts (the psychologicals) and others still like to have their character development crux on heavy emotions to carry the gravity of the situation across (the -- you probably guessed -- emotionals).
These are, of course, of my own design. Never before have I tried to find out what all the different styles are, and I don't think I could. That's just a "it sounds nice and I can communicate it semi-effectively to other people" kinda thing.
You write horse words nice. Tl;dr
EDIT: Poor Fluttershy? No Lady Lux? R&Balicorns? Be still, my beating heart.
3633459
Probably something like a gender-flipped version of Stratos, of Sacrifice fame. Although fame is probably rather relative, given how few people have even heard of that game, but still...
Skip to 4:32 if you just want Stratos' voice. I pictured Terminus as ethereal, generally feminine sounding (because neuter entity bonded to a mare) but with a speech pattern that's somewhere between neuter and masculine.