yay chapter anyway now i get to see the 'spirits' guiding hand/hoof anyway the scene with celestia and luna was adaawable. and i like what you did with the timber wolf and the forest spirits. till next chapter.
Romance with only these three characters listed? Hmm... the bit in the summary about Twilight intrigues the hell out of me too. I am curious on multiple levels. I don't want to throw this in my read later list, cuz' I never get around to that...
I'll favorite it now, so that it's in my unread chapters list when I go to check that next, since it's too late to read now.
1647765 Yes. It may very well end up being Twilunestia, if the princesses keep being shippy... and from the comments section so far, it seems that would be well received. Hmm, not sure I can pull it off, but what the hell. I didn't put things like that in an author's note, because I feel those are immersion breaking, and they'd detract from the impact of my description. Maybe I should write a blog for once? Then again, it's not like half the people watching this story are watching me, so I'm honestly not sure where to put information like that. I'd assumed the romance + character tags would be enough, but meh. Bloody fimfiction interface *grumbles incoherently*.
i liked the first chapter a lot. i liked this chapter too, but there is one pretty major thing which hits me; i might just be tired, but it's hard to read this; there are quite a lot of grammar mistakes, mostly structural (both in the story telling in general as well as in a few of the dialogues), it disrupts the flow. you should get an editor, we have groups for that.
Changes in mental state?! What next, I'm going to turn into a stallion? All my friends inexplicably fall in love with me? I start needing to drink blood to live?
It looks like somepony has been reading a few too many fanfictions.
Amazing writing. Remember all these complaints I had about your last chapter? Well, the revised one deserves none of that as it's simply stunning. More!
Oh, and as I reread this, I find myself hearing Terminus as Stratos' voice from Sacrifice. Great game by the way - if you need more convincing watch the beginning of the video for some more amazing voice acting.
Twilight smelled honeysuckle when she showed Spike her mane and Terminus was speaking. Luna's mane smelled of honeysuckle when Celestia hugged her. I do wonder if these are related...
Pinkie Pie, her tomb adorned with confetti and streamers, all of which slowly disappeared in her vision. The fairytale mare from the gingerbread house, her magic could not defeat old age in the end. Rainbow Dash... a regal statue of the mare herself, bedecked in royal regalia, was unveiled as the Wonderbolts flew overhead. Soarin', his face wrinkled and pitted, saluted the statue tearfully, his costume donned for the last time. Rarity, a graceful burial in Canterlot, a white marble plinth carved with three diamonds amongst a small garden of wild flowers. Generous, even in death, she gave this beauty freely to those present. And lastly, Applejack, a simple headstone on her family's land, bearing her cutie mark, next to all those Apples who had come before her. Applebloom, her mane greying, cried on Twilight's youthful shoulder as she lay down a flower for her sister.
did the video below this inspire you to write the above quote?
After a time, Celestia began to hum, rocking Luna gently. The song was one she had sung to her sister during her stay on the moon, a calm lament for her mistakes.
yay chapter anyway now i get to see the 'spirits' guiding hand/hoof anyway the scene with celestia and luna was adaawable. and i like what you did with the timber wolf and the forest spirits. till next chapter.
cheers
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Yeah, that scene actually kinda worried me. Luna and Celestia seemed to have far too much chemistry, for sisters...
1631467 well i'm not against it but i cant decide what you like or not so till next chapter cheers
Okay... this story has my curiosity piqued.
It is interesting and I am enjoying it!
Favorited, upvoted and looking forward to more!
Romance with only these three characters listed? Hmm... the bit in the summary about Twilight intrigues the hell out of me too. I am curious on multiple levels. I don't want to throw this in my read later list, cuz' I never get around to that...
I'll favorite it now, so that it's in my unread chapters list when I go to check that next, since it's too late to read now.
1631467 cough wincest cough cough.
Very intriguing. Fav'd
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Princesst is Wincest?
i really like where this is going!!!! Is this a Twilestia?
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Yes. It may very well end up being Twilunestia, if the princesses keep being shippy... and from the comments section so far, it seems that would be well received. Hmm, not sure I can pull it off, but what the hell. I didn't put things like that in an author's note, because I feel those are immersion breaking, and they'd detract from the impact of my description. Maybe I should write a blog for once? Then again, it's not like half the people watching this story are watching me, so I'm honestly not sure where to put information like that. I'd assumed the romance + character tags would be enough, but meh. Bloody fimfiction interface *grumbles incoherently*.
i liked the first chapter a lot. i liked this chapter too, but there is one pretty major thing which hits me; i might just be tired, but it's hard to read this; there are quite a lot of grammar mistakes, mostly structural (both in the story telling in general as well as in a few of the dialogues), it disrupts the flow. you should get an editor, we have groups for that.
This is interesting so far.
It looks like somepony has been reading a few too many fanfictions.
Amazing writing. Remember all these complaints I had about your last chapter? Well, the revised one deserves none of that as it's simply stunning. More!
Oh, and as I reread this, I find myself hearing Terminus as Stratos' voice from Sacrifice. Great game by the way - if you need more convincing watch the beginning of the video for some more amazing voice acting.
Twilight smelled honeysuckle when she showed Spike her mane and Terminus was speaking. Luna's mane smelled of honeysuckle when Celestia hugged her. I do wonder if these are related...
Mother fucking BANANAS this fic is good.
Hmm, I wonder... Hey Lord Sunder, do you like bananas?
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did the video below this inspire you to write the above quote?
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