Interesting. Read bits of this when you were still writing it, but I enjoyed it.

Let's see what the finished product is...

Post-read: Definitely interested, will favorite. Holding my UV until another chapter's published.

awesome ending. can't wait for the next chapter cheers

criticism you said. ok then heres what i've got though its not really criticisms but questions. one what was the master of the creature that twi melded with? two Is their going to be shipping? three are the humans going to be run into later if so, then are they going to be the main villains? because I always love a good story where the humans get slaughtered by the creatures they invaded. four were the visions in twilights dream premonitions of the future or insights into the current state of those the depictions related to? just a few questions that popped into my head. as for grammar and stuff you'd have to ask first and put the story up on gdocs so i could check it out more thoroughly.

cheers

Kewl opening Chapter!
If this is the just the beginning.... I......
Ya know what..... I'll just read more......

A winged unicorn was carved in the above the gates.

You don't say?

1630689 is that a ciruelo cabral dragon as your avatar?

GLO-RI-OUS

OKay... I am now interested in this story.

I think you had me at

The planet felt cold.

Well... this definitly has my attention. It also has me going wtf a bit and theres a good amount of questions that i have.