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Snowfyre

Snowfyre #1 · Dec 10th, 2012 · · ·

a few noticeable problems the biggest is that you have to use some way to separate talking from the rest of the text usually " or ' is used
next unless its a math you should type out the number so instead of "Gordon look at your 3 ! , He see 2 aliens" it would be "Gordon, look at your three! He see two aliens"
also start a new paragraph whenever you change speakers and there is no spaces between a word an punctuation, don't put two or three spaces between words, in the above example you had two spaces between Gordon and look where a comma immediately after the name then a space would suffice

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