Fluttershy finds herself in a cave all alone. She can't remember how she got there, why she was sleeping there, or who else might be in there with her.
All she knows is that its dark and scary, and that for some reason she feels really cold.
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Ooooh, this looks like a keeper. You have my interest.
Go on...
Interesting. I like the concept.
This is a very interesting idea! I do hope that Fluttershy is able to eventually get in touch with her friends anyway despite Aerick's rules. That, and I hope that his magic keeps her from decaying! (Though that might be an interesting angle as well, having a harder time hiding things, etc.)
I'm looking forward to reading further and seeing how she handles her new "life" as well as maybe finding out just what happened to her!
interesting story. ill keep an eye on this one.
Very interesting! I really hope you continue this. ^-^
Is this story as dead as Fluttershy? It really had promise.
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Someone actually wants to read my fic? I didn't think I did very well. This was just like my first try at writing anything.
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Well, what can I say? The story concept grabbed me, and I'm curious how things would progress. I wasn't sure if Fluttershy would be trying to "secretly" reconnect with her friends, or if you were taking the story out of Ponyville. (I was under the impression that it was the "local town" Aerick meant.) I wondered why he's so insistent on her not contacting anyone that she knew, considering that her friends might understand. If he wants to learn more about magic, I can think of only one unicorn to go to, after all. I am guessing that discovery of what he did to Fluttershy wouldn't look good for him, even if he wasn't the cause of her death.
I can see two main possibilities: Trying to remain in familiar places and break those rules, contacting friends...or departing for parts unknown. Perhaps a bit of both, with the hope of return someday. I don't know. Either way, I hope you do continue this one! You may not think you did very well, but that's usually the sign of a good author. Sure, I've seen stories that are written better, but I've seen many stories that are written FAR worse, usually by authors who think that they are hot stuff. If you want to continue the story, I'll be reading it.
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Thank you for that. You brought a smile to my face.
Your predictions are pretty spot on to how I thought this story should play out. Maybe I'll give it another go.
Aside from a few typos and such, the story is looking good so far! I'm still wondering just what happened to Fluttershy, but it doesn't seem that important to the plot. Now the poor ponies are going to be separated after the death of their friend! That's rough, but it seems like they need to find someone who can bear the element of kindness. I wonder if "Ashlyn" would qualify (Could an undead pony even wield such magic?), since the only pony that could be as sweet as Fluttershy would be herself.
Keep going! I look forward to seeing how things develop, and I do hope that Fluttershy eventually bumps into one of the Mane 6...er...Mane 5.
I wonder if Fluttershy will stay preserved as she is, or if she'll eventually start to decay. Aerick seems to be familiar with necromancy, but he has nopony else with him, so I suspect that any others might have rotted away and were "dismissed".
Anyway, it's great that you decided to continue. Don't worry too much about bad criticism and only accept the constructive kind. It's YOUR story that you're sharing with us, so write it how you want.
Any idea when this story will update?