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CTTheSeaWing · 1.3k words · 99 views

The Bite of XX

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Coming off the excitement from their wedding, Trixie and Starlight decide that for their honeymoon, they travel the world. However, their journey brings them to the heart of Changeling territory, and unease follows when they visit Thorax and see he’s on edge. But Chrysalis hasn’t been seen in moons… has she?

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queenpoisonstar #1 · 3 weeks ago · · ·

Well, it was fine, I guess? But I found it rather difficult to figure out what was happening.

The constant use of unnecessary commas, the talking without the name of the pony talking in a few cases. Plus the paragraphs were a bit rushed and crammed together, so my eyes got confused and couldn't comprehend what was happening.