Fear the old blood

MMy guiding moonlight
MLP: FiM
Dark Souls
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Horror
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After the success of Laurence’s rebirth, a mysterious being gives a second chance to the holy blade of the healing church.
Violence
Gore
Death
Profanity
Crossover
Human
Alt. Universe
Luna
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Main 6
King Sombra
The first vicar · 4.5k words · 106 views

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Sl3dg3-682

Sl3dg3-682 #1 · March 10th · 4 · 1 · Chapter 2: Respice intra mysterium te respice intra es bestia ·

I shall watch this story with great interest

Demonic Lemon

Demonic Lemon #2 · March 12th · 2 · 1 · Chapter 4: Timere ·

Does he get phase 2 where shits and vomits lava everywhere?

UltraFool616

UltraFool616 #3 · March 13th · 2 · 2 · Chapter 5: esti omnes ca vette sanguine sanctum. ·

This story has been pretty good, though I do have one question. Why did you make certain characters have colored texts?

The first vicar

The first vicar #4 · March 13th · 1 · 2 · Chapter 5: esti omnes ca vette sanguine sanctum. ·

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Great question! It’s to help differentiate between characters when they speak. I want to make sure people don’t get confused on which character is talking.

FXCF

FXCF #5 · March 19th · 2 · 2 · Chapter 7: Quam vis credo possumus ·

So far, this isn't too bad. A lot of talking, and boy howdy do I pray for your patience swapping the text colors as consistently as you are, but the only flaw I can find so far is some of the grammar. Some missing punctuation, the mass walls of text are a little too much, could use some breaking up here and there, but I'm interested.

The first vicar

The first vicar #6 · March 21st · · 2 · Chapter 8: Si discite Tibi vis sacramentum ·

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Thank you for the advice! Your assistance has earned you the title of honorary hunter. I will continue to work diligently to fix any mistakes in the story, so if you have any more tips, suggestions or advice, feel free to leave another comment.

CrazyShadow

CrazyShadow #7 · March 22nd · 1 · 2 · Chapter 8: Si discite Tibi vis sacramentum ·

I can only guess and imagine what happens next, but here I go:

Discord is an Autistic Great One that doesn't appreciate Odeon's "interference".
Discord messes with Laurence's mind, causing him to go berserk...Discord's hands and/or arms are ripped off, alongside his tail, and both Discord and Laurence are saved by Odeon's interference.
Discord gives the Mane 6 a peek into Yarnam, driving them "temporarily" insane.
Something, something, Pinkie's a Great One "Demi-god", yadda, yadda....
...and that's all I've got.