I suck at descriptions, even more so when I can't just answer specifics questions, but here I go:
A mostly first-person story from the POV of an alicorn who lost their memories. They wake up and seek to relearn who they are/were, and how the world works.
Cover image is drawn by me several years ago. The title is a german word, because I couldn't think of anything better 5 days ago (or now). Rating/tags are only for the current content, although it's likely I'll have to add more when I get there.
(hiatus: lost steam for the project, hoping to come back to it Soon:tm:)
Chapters (15)
First small critique: you try to make the gender of the character ambivalent in the first chapters. Great idea. But your short description spoilers it.
Also try to avoid using … for every character, it makes them samey. Try to make their voices/ speech pattern a bit more unique.
And coloring anything written is usually something to avoid with a few exceptions. I am not saying color-coded fanfiction is always bad; it can definitely be done well. It for examples makes it easy for figuring out who is talking only by seeing the color. But again if they have their own ways of speaking, without making it too melodramatic, it shouldn’t be a problem.
I cannot say much about the story, you’re still making it after all.
Also I love the cliché amnesia trope. It’s always a great way of introducing the world and story, and it makes up the story after all. And having your protagonist be an alicorn has also great potential. Some dislike oc alicorn protagonists because they can be op or in the other way should be powerful royalty but are then treated like normal ponies by the author. Or the power-levels are completely inconsistent.
But an alicorn has great potential for conflict, which I think you are using for your story. Their position in this world are still relatively unknown.
Personally, for a protagonist alicorn I would think about One Punch Man. The conflicts for a powerful being would not consist of the conflict/question of ‘can they defeat the bad guy?’ because the audience knows the answers, but of more internal conflicts and how the people around them react and live.
Or maybe I maybe I am thinking about this in the wrong way.
Anyway keep up the nice work.
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It's not actually a spoiler, because I messed up in the short description. I haven't actually decided on their gender yet, so for now being a non-binary critter suits them.
As for …s/coloring, I'm mostly just experimenting. This is my first more serious attempt at writing something for more than just my friends, after all. I'll try to get better at that. The coloring's likely to stay, I personally like it and unless I get major complaints about it I don't see a reason to not keep doing it.
Thanks for the comments :3