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Mint_Keyphase


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Hiatus for exam

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|Timespan: Nova Aetas 3, Jan 20-Nova Aetas 14, Nov 12)
|Author: Mint Keyphase


This story takes place in the current iteration of the paracosm I maintain, I built quite a world in there, I've put up some world-building in the form of archive entries, like what they do in games. I recommend reading those first or a lot of thing may not make sense.
Anyways, this is just something I threw together in my spare time, so don't expect regular or frequent updates. I wrote this in Chinese on paper, but I figured that I might as well as translate it and put it up here because why not. It is probably kinda terrible, but whatever. Also, the story is super long so I don't even know how long it would take to finish it. First actual story I wrote, please be gentle, but don't lower the bar for me, any constructive criticism is welcomed.
Also, if you think the story is too bland for a violence tag (as in having very little direct description of bloodshed or violence), it is because I try to keep those at the minimum, that's because if I include those too much my social worker will get worried because of my history of being self-destructive, I may add a bit of those when I graduate.
Current version is not final, probably gonna rewrite as I go. Also, not proofread yet, sorry in advance for any stupid mistakes.
ChatGPT was used, but only for generating names of minor locations and sometimes a bit of advice.

Chapters (10)
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This would look interesting, except for one glaring problem. You make the chapters too short. Whoever says short chapters are the right way to go is an idiot.

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:p Yeah my bad, gonna pull it down now lol, didn't expect it to be approved so quick, haven't even got time for my teacher to help review it.

I pulled all chapters down because I thought I could rewrite the thing before approval is done, which was wrong and now I need to do this as a result of my terrible habit of throwing out the first draft and deal with all the elaboration, editing, proofreading, etc. before the deadline as I always do in my homework submission...

:facehoof: This is why you never hit the submit button until you're sure the story is ready. It's not going anywhere if you let it sit unsubmitted.

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