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Maybe Rarity teleports that couch because that's as much teleporting as she could learn? Or maybe she has a phobia about teleporting living matter that she can't bring herself to teleport herself to the couch, so she teleports the couch to her instead?
She's a prodigy at telekinesis, but perhaps that talents offsets the fact that she's not very good at teleporting, and "gifted" unicorns would be great at both.
Again, this was a really good job on this latest chapter. Really appreciated the effort that went into the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up once more. Definitely liked your shows of the aftermaths of a few of the episodes, especially Smolder and Spike's dialogue about Twilight's efforts to figure out Pinkie Sense, Smolder's chewing Rarity out for the stunt at the Best Young Fliers competition AND for her jealousy of Fluttershy and particularly Spike learning to already weaponize the "dragon growth" to protect Rarity and Smolder.
And, yeah, I have a theory that Twilight's admiration for her older brother led her to accidentally imprint a bit of Shining Armor's protectiveness onto Spike. It might be amusing to see Smolder meeting Shining Armor and commenting "Okay, now I'm starting to see where Spike gets it from."
But anyway, certainly looking forward to more of this.
Good couple of episodes in this one, still feel sorry for Smolder losing her voice twice in these by berating Rarity though!
Three episodes and one chapter nice smolder and Spike talking about how Pinkie Pie can sense things with her pinkie sense and then after the Flyers competition smolder really got upset of Rarities action and she lost a voice which she needs to take it easy and after the incidents of the Diamond Dogs and rescuing Rarity from them apparently Spike has another growth which that's a pretty unexpected but temporarily which that's a new one but smolder thank him for that and after the disaster of the fashion show smolder yelled her again about the incidents making Fluttershy look bad even though Fluttershy agreed that she wanted this to happen because she doesn't want to be a model boy there was a lot of yelling I wonder what I was could happen next guess we'll find out next time
ok, after all these issues, i can't keep reading
no matter how good the premise, the whole thing's rushed-feeling, there's typos aplenty(seriously, is it mandatory to misspell "definitely" as "defiantly"?) and no sense of build-up
shit just... happens, and we're left to attempt to fill in the blanks as to how
semi-relatedly, G O D, do i hate having to be angry with people like you
you're just trying to make your voice heard, to get your ideas and thoughts out there
but FUCK
someone's gotta point out your failings, or you'll never learn
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I don't see where I misspelled "definitely" at. If you would give a quote I will most certainly go and fix that.
That said, the episodes featured in this chapter weren't ones I could change that much of. The scenes you see are all I could add to. Well...except maybe the full chewing out Rarity got from Smolder for both letting wings go to her head in "Sonic Rainboom" and trying to sabotage her own friend in "Green Isn't Your Color" because of jealousy.
However, the reason I didn't go through that kind of trouble is that I would basically be spelling out the moral of both of those episodes which they would do in the form of Twilight's friendship reports all the same which for "Sonic Rainboom" would be about trying not to upstage your friends and for "Green Isn't Your Color" is being happy for your friend's success and not getting jealous over it.
So really, this was the best I could do where I wasn't also basically doing everything word for word from the show which is not the point of this story in the first place. The point is for there to be changes to certain things with Smolder being Rarity's adoptive sister (which harkens back to the title of the story in the first place) while also having a brewing romance between Spike and Smolder. But when Smolder's presence changes very little, there are going to be chapters like this and I apologize for not being able to avoid them. But I know that there would be people that would get upset at me if I completely skipped over these episodes altogether.
As such, in situations like this my hands are effectively tied as there wasn't much I could add to these episodes beyond what you see in this chapter without also having the episodes written out word for word and the site rules forbid out right plagiarism like that I'm sorry to say. So like I said, my hands are tied in both directions as I have to include these episodes regardless yet at the same time I can't just have them in the story word for word because of site rules.
So yes, I had to strike a compromise. If you want to in the future you could just skip chapters like this one when all they'll amount to is aftermath focused stuff. And I know this most likely won't be the only chapter like this.
Also, here's a video with lots of "annoying" incorrect grammar.
He Hulked out