Rex Rice survived on the Rimworld for two years. He believed that he would face adversity for the rest of his life, as the Rimworld see's to it that you fail. However, fate seems to have something else in store.
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Food always gets people talking. Well, at least not immediately when they're starving.
And it's a good thing Rex is a bartender; that profession'll go a long way in getting his compadre to open up. It also makes Rex a little more real, and I hope you flesh out that business a bit moreānot just through backstory dumps, but by utilizing his unique people skills as a barkeep to keep him grounded with Twilight.
Pacing is still good here, and I think for the setting, you made the right choice in having them talk now instead of prolonging it. I'll say it again, but it was very natural how you used food to start a conversation between them, and kept her watching Rex before then. I also think Rex letting her stay and eat his food shows how he has a bit of a soft spot after having to endure at least two lonely winters.
You're keeping on top of errors for the most part; a few here and there, but no major complaints save for "potato's" being used instead of the proper plural. Minor issues would be things like not capitalizing the 'I' in contractions like "i'm".
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I'll definitely fix those spelling errors soon. I usually don't think about it when i'm in the middle of writing, so thank you a ton for pointing those errors out.
I can't believe I spelled potatoes potato's.
Hopefully, next chapter will be out tomorrow. I'm currently mapping out a world in Rimworld using Debug Commands to get a good picture of what I want the place to look like in the story. It'll help me visualize it, and help me write how it looks in the story.
'Til the next chapter!
guys i made a MLP mod for Rimworld if you guys are interested
https://www.reddit.com/r/RimWorld/comments/fe05yq/ponies_of_the_rim_10_is_released_mlp_rimworld/
And yes i made a account just so i can tell you this.
I suppose i wanted to publish Fallout Equestria fanfic but looking over it, it wasn't good so i scraped it.
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That is definitely a cool mod! I'm going to have to check that out soon!
Is this story going to be implementing any of the mechanics of the royalty DLC? Also, If you make connections between magic and psychic abilities, that would probably make Twilight psychically hypersensitive. Have fun with that -48 mood debuff with a high psychic drone.
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I think unicorns and alicorns would have normal psychic sensitivity, would recover faster and be able to cast more psychic abilities, since this is how coded them in the mod. Also this affects changeling but to lesser extend.
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I'm basing the story off of the current version of rimworld, which includes the Royalty DLC.
She ate meat...
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And if I could add one tiny nitpick of my own. Ellipses come in threes, not twos. It's a horribly minor issue but just seeing two periods instead of three whenever you type an ellipsis is kind of driving me crazy. Great start to the story otherwise.
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So he just doesnt know that teleportation exists then.
Ate without table -3
This is really cute so far... Rimworlds don't do cute...
10413894 Lol indeed
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I fukkin hate that debuff. There's a perfectly good table inside, but my pop gets hungry harvesting potatoes and rather than going back inside to eat, he maws down his lunch in the field.
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If I remember correctly, there's max radius where pawns search for table when they want to eat. You may try to use nutrient paste (pawns don't take NPMs into inventory) or extend your dining room into corridors and throw additional small tables in remote nooks and crannies of your base (at middle/late game loosing bonuses from dining room is more of concern)
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Something something I like base building in Rimworld, and I like the aesthetic of tilled fields around my bases - a great mod, fyi. Apparently some of those fields get rather large when you approach the colonist soft-cap. I'm absolutely NOT playing North Korea simulator, I swear.