You are pumping out these chapters thick and fast, I love it. I can't expect you to keep up this pace forever so don't burn yourself out, but you certainly know how to get a man hooked.

I love how you've written everything so far, though I do think Twilight might be succumbing to the harshness of the Rim a little too quickly. She arrives as a sheltered and naive pony from Equestria, and 3 days later, after no hardships other than being stranded, she's justifying killing animals already. Humans are omnivores, she's seen Rex eat potatoes, I'd think Twilight would fight harder to not kill any animals when Rex and her can clearly eat other things. It would be better if Twilight stood her ground a bit more, at the very least refusing to eat any meat until they ran out of vegetables. Rex presumably only stored enough food for the winter for 1 person. Twilight coming and doubling the amount of food being eaten would lead to shortages and necessitate extra hunting to prevent starvation, but she would not be happy about it.

Also, I know we haven't had any battles yet, but a trap a lot of authors fall in is that they put in too many fight scenes and try to one up the previous fight every time. Eventually you get a story like Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons, where it starts off dark and gritty, and by the end is ridiculous and almost comical by how absurdly powerful everyone's gotten. I love this story so far and I don't want you to fall into that trap.

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I'm glad you're liking the chapters. Yeah, I'm making sure I don't get burnt out on writing, so don't worry about that. The pace will die down soon enough!

Twilight succumbing to the planet's hostility quickly is something I thought about earlier on. I agree that she would most likely try to not hurt any animals unless required, however I wanted to write it in a way where she understood that in order to live on the planet, she needed to learn the hardships. Also, I wanted to add that she loved meat despite ponies disliking the idea of it, adding a sense of 'violent tendencies' in every species, no matter where they lived.

The food supply thing will be addressed soon in the other chapters!

Also, believe me, I like writing battle scenes, but I hate if stories are comprised of it all the time. I like the down-time more than the battles themselves, and every battle, no matter how big or small will be deathly important. I like to write characters who mess up, who make mistakes and who aren't lucky all the time.

Project Horizons is definitely dark and gritty, which sets the tone for the story, but I have to agree with your points. In Rimworld, I love the fact that there is a sense of struggling for survival, but that isn't the total aspect of the game. Colonists talking to eachother, forming opinions and bonds, and doing regular tasks like hunting, mining, and chopping wood. Once the combat kicks up in the game, you realize that a single shot could completely change the colony forever. One shot to the eye prevents a colonist from seeing properly, or even a shot through the throat could completely kill them off. I love that, because even if its a single raider, they're still realistically dangerous. You don't need an insectoid hive full of 500 insectoids to kill any colonist. All it takes is a single second, and a single bullet.

Combat will be introduced into the story eventually, but when that does happen, I will take into consideration the realism of the battle, and the effects of it. Even if you survive a couple hundred raids, you aren't an automatic killing machine that can outlive anything.

Thank you for your insight! I hope I explained some things and my thoughts here, and I will take all that you've said into consideration. I'm glad that I have readers that give their thoughts, and reasoning behind it. Thank you!

'Til the next chapter.

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Once the combat kicks up in the game, you realize that a single shot could completely change the colony forever.

My first ever colony, it was the third or fourth raid, first guy to turn up with a gun. Just one dude with a crappy auto pistol. I'd just researched gunsmithing and made an extra bolt action rifle, so I had 2 rifles, a revolver, and a guy with a sword. Outnumbered him 4 to 1, had way more firepower, and we had cover. Nothing could go wrong...

First shot he fires, straight through my favourite colonist's brain.

She just got married a few days prior. And her name was Belle, which reminded me of Sweetie Belle.

Her husband would go on a mental break and take his wife's dead body out of her sarcophagus.

Fun times

Haven't read this yet. From harsh experience, I've learned not to expect a story to be completed, so I just track until it's either complete or over 100,000 words.

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Does this have anything to do with the old Captain Grimes series of sci-fi books written by Chandler?

On the Fallout Equestria relation, I still remember Steelhooves death. It was unexpected, almost instant, and meaningless. Ambush, Decapitation, and his story was over. Not an assassination, or a last stand, or anything. Just Hellhound claw to the neck.
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Good story thus far. I can see that you are only using Rimworld mechanics as a guideline, which is cool. Given the "Two Years" and still having what is a pretty small base, with a single person, I assume construction is more realistically slow at least.

Can't wait for more.

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Sounds like rimworld for sure. Fun times indeed.

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Yeah, my story is definitely going to be taking a more realistic approach to some aspects, while taking game logic for others.

Construction is slow in this story though, that is for sure.

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I hope that you'll read it eventually, or even when it is completed! I plan to complete all my stories, but I'm sure you've heard that from plenty of authors who've failed that promise. I'll still try my best.

No, my story is not related to either of those.

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Same here thing buddy, got a story with three chapters just sitting on the dust for a few months, but like I said to many here, I don’t plan to stop anytime soon, my mind is a story-making machine. I see something ( a story from a book, a game or a movie ) and I almost instantly know how to insert them in a semi-logic way into a story. I have a few stories on the making ( none of them published as of yet ) and I already have another Idea, utilizing the monsters from Evolve mixed with a head cannon for that universe.

Even better than the last story of yours i read keep up the great work cant wait to see the next chapter! 👍

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I know how it feels, to constantly want to make more and more stories.

We shall entertain those who are wanting to read!

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I see that you commented on 'The Diary.'

Currently that story is on hold, as I'm figuring out what to do with it. I'm spending my time however writing these three new stories, and I'm loving it so far.

Thank you for the encouragement.

You know, this story has some promise. You've got me interested. I'll be tossing this stories into my Que folder until more chapters arrive.

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More chapters will keep arriving, and I hope I sate your interest!

Nice! Keeping it smooth.

It's well written, but it's a tad on the nose.

🥰🥰🥰👍👍

Does this story include "Full Rimworld Experience" you know what I mean.

Maybe I am biaised, I'm no expert, but I would have expected Rex to be far more wary of Twilight, at least during their first talk. Notwithstanding the fact that Twilight is an alien, a no-human being with apparently paranormal power, I doubt Rex would have accepted without cautious or mistrust another human like that. Okay, she seems cute and innofensive, but he witnessed a bit of her power, and have no knowledge of her specie and her motivation. To be honest, if I had no knowledge of MLP and faced a weird winged unicorn thing, in a planet I know almost nothing of, while being alone for 2 years, I would have questionned my sanity and/or her intention. I don't think I would be more trusting if I was alone for half this period. Of course, they can warmed up pretty quickly after a few talk, but offering to sleep in the same room without my gun close to my bed and ready to be triggered the first night? I wouldn't think of it, far too dangerous.

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Yeah, I completely get what you mean.

The thing I was going for was that Rex was numb to strange things happening. Insectoids, Ancient Soldiers, Mechanical Scyther and Lancers, and later on people who can literally manipulate objects with their minds. There are animals that can explode upon death, which you can harvest gas from, and plenty of other strange creatures.

I still get where you're coming from. I didn't mean for Rex to trust her because she seems nice, but more of the fact that he doesn't seem to care anymore. He's numb to the weird shit thats happened on the world.

Still, I hope that I can still write a good story you'll enjoy! Thank you for your insight.

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Ahhh~ Rex.

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A story about rimworld would be nothing without the True Rimworld Experience~

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Huh-?

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Ah, yeah.

I dunno. I know its not technically right writing, but I prefer the two dots instead of three.

Also, years ago I had a huge problem with using ellipse's, and I fixed that by only using two dots or not at all.

Still, thank you for pointing that out! I'll try to fix it.

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I hope you'll still enjoy it!

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Smooth as the calm waters in the ocean before a hurricane.

As things tend to be in rimworld, that is.

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You can disregard most of this since we can go with Solaire's explanation that Rex has become numb to the strange, since my internet went down before I could post this reply. Will post it anyway.

To be fair, in Rimworld, people will wander into the colony and join for seemingly no reason other than to settle down. This concept seems pretty consistent across all rimworlds (which, according to what little Rimworld's lore offers, all rimworlds could be manipulated by the AI storytellers like Randy Random, almost like a simulation).

Something to recognize—and that Rex explains—is that the rimworld is a far different environment than what normal humans are used to. As an example from the game world, space-tech raiders, bronze-age tribals, and wild-western colonists live on this planet with Rex. It's day-to-day survival in a hodge-podge of groups with vastly spread technology and culture.

In a different light: Solaire's painted Rex as a pretty lonely guy, but in the way that he just gets visitors and has nobody else to help run the home. So I'd say that the mindset that Rex has is along the lines of "they can talk, and they can move on their own; maybe they can help me?" This as evidenced by Rex taking Twilight hunting, and she proves her talent with magic there.

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Thank you for explaining that better!

When you're in a herd, you follow the herd's lead. Big guy says follow, you follow. I've always held that pony instincts are to band together and trust each other, especially when they're alone, which is when they tend to get desperate for someone they can trust because they know how vulnerable they are on their own. That kind of trust is what helps Twilight deal with things and go along with Rex, for better or worse. Killing an elk like that is terrible, but the alternatives, like starving or freezing to death, are even worse.

I hope Twilight can come to appreciate that her nature is saving her, here, rather than feeling like she's betraying it. She'll find her own ways to help out, I'm sure. I'd put her Research score firmly in the Master category. Can't wait to see where this goes!

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I'm glad your enjoying it.

I'm also glad that you understood the point I was going for!

I'll be putting out another chapter today, so stay tuned for that!

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Ponies also tend to become emotionally and mentally unstable if they don't have a stable connection with another being/pony.

Which does a hell of a lot to explain Starlight, Sunset, Tempest, Stygian, and Luna. And Trixie and Moondancer to an extent. Not to mention Pinkie going crazy when she thought her friends abandoned her.

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Glad you caught the reference~

I got a complaint about this chapter. Critter from world of peace and harmony, not meat eating either shows up terrified. Immediatly ruin its daywith grim tales of cold survival murder.. then immediatly make it kill something.
Bro whut.
Then make them watch as you dont shoot the second elk, just whip out a knife and serial killer it infront of their eyes.
Thats some sociopathic bullshit right there.
Otherwise, the rest of the story is mostly good stuff and i'm sticking with it.

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Then make them watch as you dont shoot the second elk, just whip out a knife and serial killer it infront of their eyes.
Thats some sociopathic bullshit right there.

not really. the poor thing was slowly dying from from the gunshot wound. killing it quickly with a knife is a mercy rather then being slowly bleeding out.

10412223 That's survival, not sociopathic. You might not want to stick around for what comes later if that's your take on sociopathic. What's coming is going to be fucking dark by comparison.

I like this story and the fact you didn't have meat instantly make Twilight vomit violently like every other author.

"Does that mean I can continue?"

She smirked and turned to look at me. "Do you want to continue?"

I ship it~

Also good thing this isn't a heavily modded version lol. Otherwise she'd be dealing with even crazier stuff.