Under the Moon

After a slumber party with just Twilight and me, I'm awoken in the middle of the night by an emergency alert on my phone. It's not that odd, but...

Something just doesn't feel right.

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duckboy416

duckboy416 #1 · Oct 16th, 2019 · · ·

2spooky4me

Lainofthewired

Lainofthewired #2 · Oct 16th, 2019 · · ·

I feel like, unless you know local 58, there wasn't all that much conveying that something WAS wrong. Just the first NSA alert at the beginning and then the events at the front door. Clues left behind for us that Sunny missed as she went around the house, for example.

Otherwise, really nice.

Snake Man448

Snake Man448 #3 · Oct 17th, 2019 · · ·

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I don't know Local 58, and I was spooked to hell and back. Great use of the Nothing is Scarier trope and the unnatural way everyone else acted was well conveyed.

Mini Minrie

Mini Minrie #4 · Oct 17th, 2019 · · ·

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That was kinda the point of it. She just woke up in her friend's house at a sleepover in a world that typically doesn't have bad shit happen. I mean, have you ever gotten an emergency alert that wasn't "This is a test"/"Severe Weather/"Amber Alert"? If I didn't have a shitload of 'experience' with creepypastas and such I'd just assume my friends were tryna prank me like Sunny does, 'cause I mean who's going to believe that the moon of all things shouldn't be looked at?

It wasn't until the end, really, that Sunset started to realize that the feeling she was getting wasn't just the late night spooks.

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I know nothing of tropes save for a very select few, so glad I got it even if unintentionally.

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