Shining Armor is trying to be a better father. His little filly, Flurry Heart, has grown up so fast... she's almost 16! But things seems to be so distant between the two of them... is there some way that he could regain her love?
Option three because I'm a god damned insane idiot. At this point I'm just looking to see how far we can push things. To hell with random dice rolls. Pedal to the metal. Go for the extremes.
As Joseph once said. HOLY SHIT! That was really dangerous. I even thought he critically faled roll. I was in so much pain and anxiety. This is the first time his happened ever when I was reading any literature. That was so insane I love it. This salvage is godlike improved by 4?
Now onto choices. 3 for me or else its going to be wasted opportunity to immediately calm Flurry and also improve relationship. Gotta feel really bad with what happened in class.
1 is boring and really flavorless 4 me imo
2 is better but 8% chance difference from number 3 is not worth it. Also a date doesnt sound good especially since what happened in class.
Entertaining, but to be completely honest, I blanched for fear the story had been ruined when I saw over half of the vote was for what could have turned out to be the worst choice possible. I guess we got EXTREMELY lucky in the end.
Of all the brain dead no good horrible ways to get our cover blown its because she memorised our DICK?!. Huh...actually should have seen that one coming. So honestly I don't REALLY see a way for the 2nd option to go wrong. It REALLY doesn't help how oblivious shining is in this as the facts have actually been laid out in front of him.
In fact I think spending as much casual time with flurry as possible (without being obnoxious) is the real course to a GG here. Lets be honest its going to take some magic for shining to figure things out right now, more realistic is to get Flurry to realise her father could headbutt a rock apart with how dense he is...
EDIT: As I was reading what vote 2 actually consists of and I remember just how much vitality we lost I say durring the rest of 'today' we listen to our loving wife and head to the doc. After all it will do us no good to pass tf out on a walk tommorow. Even colds can kill if the situation is right.
Side note please tell me the tail bun came undone durring our decorating the sex ed. room. We really dont need to be giving up the goods 24/7...unless Flurry mentions it again.
Shining is a bit tired, sure... But he's got his wife replenishing him!
Tail bun may still be in place. Cadence probably enjoys staring at her husband's junk and letting all the other mares know what they're missing out on... Flurry going to have to tell him the truth.
"We better die (by snu snu) trying!" HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Holy heaven! This couldn't have been more nerve-wrecking! I love it!
OK! cards on the table! The average amount of votes have been cast so far and it looks like 2 is winning, and by good reason. Both 2 and 3 are medium reward actions, HOWEVER, the difference is of 8% (stated previously by this good fella 9680286) and I feel a disturbance in this moments of peace. One should ponder of even future moves, clops has a layout ready for us and why the change in risk with the same amount of rewards?, well, I believe this one high risk can lower future risk percentages even whilst unsuccessful in itself, if not, why else?
"just how much vitality we lost" - 9680409. Indeed, quite the compelling doubt. Knowing Shining could, at his best, endure such punishment doesn't guarantee the risk taken in option 3 go spiralling down, but we know, if there's a stallion, if maybe the only one, who can make it, is him.
Having stated that, the best option is to go for it now (3). He's a big boi and better take care of the wounds whilst those are fresh rather than later, it's even better when they are the most vulnerable and willing to talk openly. Granted we don't know what's she doing right now and it could be a bad time, but it makes other options less abrupt, since we learned from now that when Shining thinks, we may also bring the Armageddon with us....literally. So rushing things IS a good idea.
9680484 You make a rather compelling arguement for barging in however in looking towards future choices you gotta think not only about risk reward but what thise branches can be. Lets say we barge in now, its rather clear the end goal for the story AND these characters center around Flurry's birthday. With that in mind we need to analyse what we reasonably expect to happen in each choice pertaining to this end goal in a few weeks. If we barge in now here some possible routes: 1. We barge in on another 'massage session' 1-1: hey wait I recognise that smell thats not a massage! 1-2: DAD! SERIOUSLY? HOW DO YOU STILL NOT KNOW HOW TO KNOCK 1-3: UWU What's thaOh hi dad, fancy meeting you here 2. She is resting/writing in her diary 2-1: ugh what do you want daaaaad 2-2: SEE 1-2 2-3: SEE 1-3 3. Diary 3-1: Snoop (dealing with the security measures we know about) 3-2: Hunt down Flurry 3-3: Whelp we tried I'm going to take a nap Sooo yeah realistically the BEST outcome is Flurry sets shinning straight and either gives it up before her mental goal OR we have a few weeks of awkward 'she wants me to...what?'
With the hangout we still stand the opportunity of her realising shining is so dense he attracts smaller planetoids but in a much lower 'risk' setting. Choices durring the dad-daughter outing (date is a poor word choice and that influenced your vote, clearly shining doesn't see this as more than a simple outing) are kore likely to be along the lines of where we go and or what we do: 1. Movies 1-1: surely we should see that new Human movie, she loved that as a filly 1-2: OOH theres that new Buck Killtrot movie I've heard about. They actually blew up a real orphanage during filming! 1-3: The hearts in our hooves? Sounds gorey lets check it out (definitely not gore) 2. Lets go to the park 2-1: Flurry loved picnics when she was younger, should be a good way to connect 2-2: Lets do some sports, Flurry may be a filly but as an Alicorn we should make sure she excercises all her tribes. 2-3: sure is a lovely day for a swim 3: Go out to eat Idk ice cream/fast food/fine dining. My point is going OUT has WAAAAAY less chances for 2-3 options that could be considered 'High Risk' especially with the freedom of being outside rather than in a bedroom which may provide improper context to anything we do.
TL:DR, I like this story and spend way too much time analysing things and think that going outside may prove less squicky to the filly long term.
Daaaaaaamn... An RPG is never more worth it than when the dice land that critical success at a key moment!
I just can't help but think this was too close.
Too close...
Y'know, it might be out of character for Shining, but a nice calm walkabout tomorrow is probably going to be easier on Flurry. The embarrassment we caused her probably means she doesn't want to see us quite yet, no matter how much we want to fix it now!
Also that awkward moment when you raise you typo'd in option three that it was high risk / medium reward and it was supposed to be high/high, and that's created a whole new hand dynamic, lol.
9680557 9680526 Hmm, a movie-date! I like that, and about a human huh? Maybe they'll go see that latest movie about a human named Alex and his friend the pony Etherea?
9680526 I was writing my reply when I accidentally moved to another page and got it deleted, so in short:
-Flurry doesn't like to be treated as a princess even if it's her dad that she wants to be with because he doesn't see her just as a high royal, we shouldn't fall in condescending territory. -I think of assessing the danger and if possible get a benefit out of it, not just numbers. -Calm your horses, have a drink. -Flurry knows how to control her powers now and time has passed since the Lustmageddon it's unlikely she may do those things at these times, if we find her in her bedroom things can go better, you just gotta believe.
Just giving my two cents for the marvel of insight.
... why not take his wife with him, whatever course he goes with? Or am I an idiot for thinking she would help? So far, she's known WAY more than she lets on. Only some of that was due to Flurry asking for secrecy. Perhaps she can be there to act as an intercessor?
Oh no, I missed a few days! But holy shit, that turned out way better than it had any right to!
"You lost a third of your body weight." That seems... Physiologically improbable, but ok.
I am loving this so far, and this is my favorite chapter by a long shot. It helps that "Princess of Lust Flurry" is one of my favorite character interpretations, and this chapter also included some of my favorite kinks (public/destigmatized sex, mind manipulation, etc.)
I just wish that Shining would LISTEN when Cadance tried to explain things to him. I realize that it's part of the premise, but I always hated when stories relied on characters not communicating in order to artificially manufacture conflict. This doesn't feel like that, but I am a little bit apprehensive the it could BECOME that when the exchange of, "hey, look, here's a comprehensive explanation that will explain EXACTLY what is going on: Flurry h-"
"Nah don't care, I'll figure it out myself. Bye!"
... Takes place several times. There's not communicating well, and there's actively REFUSING to communicate just for the sake of... Actually, I'm not sure WHAT in-character motivation would explain that.
So that's my suggestion/request moving forward. Have him learn about/listen to Cadance's explanation of Flurry's crush, and then have the rest of the story be about: * him coming to terms with that, realizing he reciprocates * figuring out that Cadance knew -- and, even more surprisingly, approved! -- all along (in regards to both of those) and finally: * finding a way to approach Flurry without scaring her off, * Sealing The Deal * Sealing The Deal again, but on her birthday, so with presents and a whole party and stuff. Maybe Cadance can play too.
Just because we have until the end of June doesn't mean it HAS to take until then. I think it would be fine to cut it short if the story has been told.
Let’s call Flurry Heart up to the front of the class!
I'm about equal parts this and option 2. Let's do this!
As soon as Flurry touched the small of the unicorn-teen’s hunched-over back, her muffled moans became a whining scream.
“Hnnnnmgggggh!”
Sparks flew from the teen’s horn, silvery showers of magical energy spurting in little gushes that sparked and fizzled as they twinkled down to the floor. At the same time, Shining could hear a sloshing spatter - liquid spilling over the edge of the filly’s seat.
Flurry Heart’s wings extended even further - reaching nearly full extension - and the field of pink grew dangerously deep. All around the young alicorn teen, her classmates began to writhe and groan in discomfort. Feather - the vocal colt from earlier - had a hoof under his desk, pumping furiously… there was no doubt as to what he was doing.
And other students were getting swept away too - many fillies either had their hooves jammed between their thighs or had their horns casting not-so-surreptitious telekinesis spells. Little grunts, moans, and squeaks punctuated the sounds of teenage flesh being played with.
You are landing hits! Many, many hits!
Shining could see the clear spatter of teen-filly nectar as it shot from the winking pegasus. One of the unicorn colts stood up from his seat, dipping his nose to the puddle of potent pussy-juice… even lapping some of it up.
Why did he have call it pussy juice? You're doing great! Keep it up, Cloppy! M'boi!
He let out a nicker, stomping the ground and walking forward - his teenage erection bobbing underneath his chest. He mounted Silver without a word, humping wildly, the head of his cock bouncing against the groaning pega-filly’s belly.
“Hnnggg… y-yes!”
The pink field slammed against the walls of the classroom, knocking books and papers off the walls. ‘This is getting out of control!’
Shining didn’t have time to repeat himself though: the pink field was upon him.
He's facing down the barrel! Stand strong, you goddamn moron!
A rich aroma - as if his favorite meal was being prepared by a chef… except it wasn’t the smell of savory food: it was pure, dripping, sticky sex.
The sensual back massage became something much more erotic - pleasurable touches and sensations sprouting all over his body - nerves were firing like he’d just been kissed, or like he’d just gotten a deft rub in a sensitive area, or like something had licked him…
It's like the exorcist but with sex. The Exorsexst!
The fillyhood of the alicorn in front of him…
Gods she looked sexy. How had he never seen it before!? The way her sweaty mane tumbled over her face - those big innocent blue eyes, her cute little muzzle… those plump sexy lips!
And her tight little ass!
“I-I… t-told y-you…” Flurry pouted, staring right up at Shining Armor. The filly leaned in, nuzzling Shining’s neck playfully as she craned up to put her mouth near his left ear. “Mmnng… n-now… I’ve got it… sooo bad…”
Shining swallowed, trying to stand stock still. The only things moving were his pounding, racing heart - and his fat stallionhood spilling all the way down to the floor as it engorged with blood.
“And… I w-was saving myself for somepony special t-too…” Flurry whined, licking the lobe of Shining’s ear. “N-now… you’re going to have to… take…” She turned around bending forward and sticking her plot up in the air.
“Responsibility.”
How the hell is he going to escape this!? Also earplay!
dripping, winking, filly-cunt.
Alas for that c-word.
Two plump, juvenile lips framed the hint of her pink inner-lips, only interrupted by the fat bulb of her teen-lovebud. Steaming sticky strands of nectar dripped from the twitching clit, trailing gossamer threads to the floor below.
When reading a Clopficsinthecomments story, I know that when I see the word "gossamer", shit has gotten deadly serious!
‘Flurry’s… cum is all over… my face… this is so… wrong… r-right?;
Your punctuation is going super-Saiyan!
‘FluRRy’s hOoF is oN mY DicK!’ The impossible thought raced through his mind.
“M-megaspell charge detected, sir!” Her hooves flew over the keys, bringing up the point in question on the map of Equestria. “Center of charge is in the Crystal Empire!”
The fucking Zebras are attacking!?
“A suicide attack!?” The colonel threw his hat down. “It must be the Saddle Arabians! What’s the yield?”
Punch the keys for god sake! You're the man now, dog!
Shining’s eyes shut, and he grit his teeth. His daughter was snuggling with his cock - and she knew it was his cock!
Without me, my cock is useless. Without my cock, I am useless.
Flurry leaned in toward him, her eyes shut mouth opening, tongue parting to make way for a deep Prench-kiss her hoof pumping her daddy’s cock.
Shining could sense everything was wrong
Delete space.
Does Shining Armor manage to avoid catastrophe (50% chance of failure)? Shining Rolls… CRITICAL SUCCESS!
Does the story actually end here if she goes ka-boom? That would be pretty dark!
“Flurry! Honey! Are you OK?” Shining could swear he heard Cadence’s voice from just outside the classroom. But the sound quickly faded as dark tunnels surrounded him, his vision fading out as the last of his orgasm emptied him, his rigid stallionhood still bucking and firing blanks as his muscles gave out.
The last thing he saw was Flurry staring at her cum-covered hoof with a look of confusion before he passed out in a puddle of his own juices on the classroom floor.
Hooooliiiiiiiieee shit!
“Let’s just say it took about three mops to clean up the classroom floor.” Cadence giggled. “Though that was partially due to the other students’... reactions as well. The doctors said you lost almost a third of your body weight though…
Oh, cartoon physics... Not my cup of tea but I'll meet you halfway and add cervical penetration to nearly everything I write from now on.
“Easy there, hero.” Cadence chuckled. “No. The kids in her class pretty enthusiastically proclaimed the event as the ‘best sex-ed class ever’... it was a minor miracle that none of the fillies got pregnant.”
> How you know you aren't in an AJA fic.
The FLURRY HEART METER goes UP by 4!
Currently the meter is at 8 / 10 !
This is one of the best chapters of anything you've ever written! A smashing success! Take my favorite! I'll send this chapter off with a chorus of angels sending hundreds of souls to their doom.
1) Low Risk / Low Reward: Sit back and recover. Let Flurry come to us! She’s just had pretty much the most mortifyingly embarrassing experience that it is possible for a teen to experience through the entirety of all universes and space-times ever… maybe it’s not too much to ask to let the filly have some space and clear her head? (10% chance of failure - low reward)[/color}
The sensual back massage became something much more erotic - pleasurable touches and sensations sprouting all over his body - nerves were firing like he’d just been kissed, or like he’d just gotten a deft rub in a sensitive area, or like something had licked him…
the way this while scene was written had me groaning Very well done
Option three because I'm a god damned insane idiot. At this point I'm just looking to see how far we can push things. To hell with random dice rolls. Pedal to the metal. Go for the extremes.
And how does one use a CAPTCHA for comments?
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The captcha is for the poll!
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So wait... have my votes been not counting and I've just gotten lucky to see the same options I picked end up as the next chapter prompt?
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Maybe? You have to vote on the straw poll -_-
2)it is self-explanatory
As Joseph once said. HOLY SHIT! That was really dangerous. I even thought he critically faled roll. I was in so much pain and anxiety. This is the first time his happened ever when I was reading any literature. That was so insane I love it. This salvage is godlike improved by 4?
Now onto choices. 3 for me or else its going to be wasted opportunity to immediately calm Flurry and also improve relationship. Gotta feel really bad with what happened in class.
1 is boring and really flavorless 4 me imo
2 is better but 8% chance difference from number 3 is not worth it. Also a date doesnt sound good especially since what happened in class.
Entertaining, but to be completely honest, I blanched for fear the story had been ruined when I saw over half of the vote was for what could have turned out to be the worst choice possible. I guess we got EXTREMELY lucky in the end.
Shining is an absolutely lovable buffoon in this story, I love how you've portrayed him.
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Thanks! It's a bit over the top of course, but it is a comedy. Glad you're enjoying it!
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Click the word "HERE" in the author's note. That's where the poll is.
I'm normally a fairly safe person, but I think 2 actually has potential.
magaspells lol xD
Right, now that craziness has been dealt with, I think it's time for me to start voting sensibly again
Of all the brain dead no good horrible ways to get our cover blown its because she memorised our DICK?!. Huh...actually should have seen that one coming. So honestly I don't REALLY see a way for the 2nd option to go wrong. It REALLY doesn't help how oblivious shining is in this as the facts have actually been laid out in front of him.
In fact I think spending as much casual time with flurry as possible (without being obnoxious) is the real course to a GG here. Lets be honest its going to take some magic for shining to figure things out right now, more realistic is to get Flurry to realise her father could headbutt a rock apart with how dense he is...
EDIT: As I was reading what vote 2 actually consists of and I remember just how much vitality we lost I say durring the rest of 'today' we listen to our loving wife and head to the doc. After all it will do us no good to pass tf out on a walk tommorow. Even colds can kill if the situation is right.
Side note please tell me the tail bun came undone durring our decorating the sex ed. room. We really dont need to be giving up the goods 24/7...unless Flurry mentions it again.
When the flurry meter is up to 10 will the fic end or will it keep going
Also med risk/reward for me
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Liquid I love your comments so much!
Shining is a bit tired, sure... But he's got his wife replenishing him!
Tail bun may still be in place. Cadence probably enjoys staring at her husband's junk and letting all the other mares know what they're missing out on... Flurry going to have to tell him the truth.
"We better die (by snu snu) trying!"
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
Holy heaven! This couldn't have been more nerve-wrecking! I love it!
OK! cards on the table!
The average amount of votes have been cast so far and it looks like 2 is winning, and by good reason.
Both 2 and 3 are medium reward actions, HOWEVER, the difference is of 8% (stated previously by this good fella 9680286) and I feel a disturbance in this moments of peace.
One should ponder of even future moves, clops has a layout ready for us and why the change in risk with the same amount of rewards?, well, I believe this one high risk can lower future risk percentages even whilst unsuccessful in itself, if not, why else?
"just how much vitality we lost" - 9680409. Indeed, quite the compelling doubt. Knowing Shining could, at his best, endure such punishment doesn't guarantee the risk taken in option 3 go spiralling down, but we know, if there's a stallion, if maybe the only one, who can make it, is him.
Having stated that, the best option is to go for it now (3). He's a big boi and better take care of the wounds whilst those are fresh rather than later, it's even better when they are the most vulnerable and willing to talk openly. Granted we don't know what's she doing right now and it could be a bad time, but it makes other options less abrupt, since we learned from now that when Shining thinks, we may also bring the Armageddon with us....literally. So rushing things IS a good idea.
Also thanks clops for the words of encouragement.
Any chances of another story involving a couple as well?
1. REALLY pushed our luck with the last one, and we’re so close to the full meter that we can afford to take it easy for now.
Random caps has never been more appropriate.
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You make a rather compelling arguement for barging in however in looking towards future choices you gotta think not only about risk reward but what thise branches can be. Lets say we barge in now, its rather clear the end goal for the story AND these characters center around Flurry's birthday. With that in mind we need to analyse what we reasonably expect to happen in each choice pertaining to this end goal in a few weeks. If we barge in now here some possible routes:
1. We barge in on another 'massage session'
1-1: hey wait I recognise that smell thats not a massage!
1-2: DAD! SERIOUSLY? HOW DO YOU STILL NOT KNOW HOW TO KNOCK
1-3:
UWU What's thaOh hi dad, fancy meeting you here2. She is resting/writing in her diary
2-1: ugh what do you want daaaaad
2-2: SEE 1-2
2-3: SEE 1-3
3. Diary
3-1: Snoop (dealing with the security measures we know about)
3-2: Hunt down Flurry
3-3: Whelp we tried I'm going to take a nap
Sooo yeah realistically the BEST outcome is Flurry sets shinning straight and either gives it up before her mental goal OR we have a few weeks of awkward 'she wants me to...what?'
With the hangout we still stand the opportunity of her realising shining is so dense he attracts smaller planetoids but in a much lower 'risk' setting. Choices durring the dad-daughter outing (date is a poor word choice and that influenced your vote, clearly shining doesn't see this as more than a simple outing) are kore likely to be along the lines of where we go and or what we do:
1. Movies
1-1: surely we should see that new Human movie, she loved that as a filly
1-2: OOH theres that new Buck Killtrot movie I've heard about. They actually blew up a real orphanage during filming!
1-3: The hearts in our hooves? Sounds gorey lets check it out (definitely not gore)
2. Lets go to the park
2-1: Flurry loved picnics when she was younger, should be a good way to connect
2-2: Lets do some sports, Flurry may be a filly but as an Alicorn we should make sure she excercises all her tribes.
2-3: sure is a lovely day for a swim
3: Go out to eat
Idk ice cream/fast food/fine dining. My point is going OUT has WAAAAAY less chances for 2-3 options that could be considered 'High Risk' especially with the freedom of being outside rather than in a bedroom which may provide improper context to anything we do.
TL:DR, I like this story and spend way too much time analysing things and think that going outside may prove less squicky to the filly long term.
Daaaaaaamn... An RPG is never more worth it than when the dice land that critical success at a key moment!
I just can't help but think this was too close.
Too close...
Y'know, it might be out of character for Shining, but a nice calm walkabout tomorrow is probably going to be easier on Flurry. The embarrassment we caused her probably means she doesn't want to see us quite yet, no matter how much we want to fix it now!
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Love your comments too buddy!
Also that awkward moment when you raise you typo'd in option three that it was high risk / medium reward and it was supposed to be high/high, and that's created a whole new hand dynamic, lol.
Gonna let it stand as is.
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Hmm, a movie-date! I like that, and about a human huh? Maybe they'll go see that latest movie about a human named Alex and his friend the pony Etherea?
I wonder how the movie ends?
If only we knew!
Just teasing.
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I think we as the readers have to get that meter to 10 and maintain it before the end of June with our choices.
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Fantastic! We rode our luck. Let's bank the +4 and take things slowly. 1 is out of character, so 2.
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I was writing my reply when I accidentally moved to another page and got it deleted, so in short:
-Flurry doesn't like to be treated as a princess even if it's her dad that she wants to be with because he doesn't see her just as a high royal, we shouldn't fall in condescending territory.
-I think of assessing the danger and if possible get a benefit out of it, not just numbers.
-Calm your horses, have a drink.
-Flurry knows how to control her powers now and time has passed since the Lustmageddon it's unlikely she may do those things at these times, if we find her in her bedroom things can go better, you just gotta believe.
Just giving my two cents for the marvel of insight.
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... why not take his wife with him, whatever course he goes with? Or am I an idiot for thinking she would help? So far, she's known WAY more than she lets on. Only some of that was due to Flurry asking for secrecy. Perhaps she can be there to act as an intercessor?
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With this victory won, we must consolidate the newfound territory.
I vote 2.
This story is so stupid. I love it.
Oh no, I missed a few days! But holy shit, that turned out way better than it had any right to!
"You lost a third of your body weight." That seems... Physiologically improbable, but ok.
I am loving this so far, and this is my favorite chapter by a long shot. It helps that "Princess of Lust Flurry" is one of my favorite character interpretations, and this chapter also included some of my favorite kinks (public/destigmatized sex, mind manipulation, etc.)
I just wish that Shining would LISTEN when Cadance tried to explain things to him. I realize that it's part of the premise, but I always hated when stories relied on characters not communicating in order to artificially manufacture conflict. This doesn't feel like that, but I am a little bit apprehensive the it could BECOME that when the exchange of, "hey, look, here's a comprehensive explanation that will explain EXACTLY what is going on: Flurry h-"
"Nah don't care, I'll figure it out myself. Bye!"
... Takes place several times. There's not communicating well, and there's actively REFUSING to communicate just for the sake of... Actually, I'm not sure WHAT in-character motivation would explain that.
So that's my suggestion/request moving forward. Have him learn about/listen to Cadance's explanation of Flurry's crush, and then have the rest of the story be about:
* him coming to terms with that, realizing he reciprocates
* figuring out that Cadance knew -- and, even more surprisingly, approved! -- all along (in regards to both of those)
and finally:
* finding a way to approach Flurry without scaring her off,
* Sealing The Deal
* Sealing The Deal again, but on her birthday, so with presents and a whole party and stuff. Maybe Cadance can play too.
Just because we have until the end of June doesn't mean it HAS to take until then. I think it would be fine to cut it short if the story has been told.
I'm about equal parts this and option 2. Let's do this!
You are landing hits! Many, many hits!
Why did he have call it pussy juice?You're doing great! Keep it up, Cloppy! M'boi!thumbs.gfycat.com/BronzeElegantAfricancivet-max-1mb.gif
This is everything I could have ever dreamed!
He's facing down the barrel! Stand strong, you goddamn moron!
It's like the exorcist but with sex. The Exorsexst!
How the hell is he going to escape this!? Also earplay!
Alas for that c-word.
When reading a Clopficsinthecomments story, I know that when I see the word "gossamer", shit has gotten deadly serious!
Your punctuation is going super-Saiyan!
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This looks like a great place to stop for the night and recuperate. So far so good.
The fucking Zebras are attacking!?
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Punch the keys for god sake! You're the man now, dog!
Without me, my cock is useless. Without my cock, I am useless.
Delete space.
Does the story actually end here if she goes ka-boom? That would be pretty dark!
Hooooliiiiiiiieee shit!
Oh, cartoon physics... Not my cup of tea but I'll meet you halfway and add cervical penetration to nearly everything I write from now on.
> How you know you aren't in an AJA fic.
This is one of the best chapters of anything you've ever written! A smashing success! Take my favorite! I'll send this chapter off with a chorus of angels sending hundreds of souls to their doom.
1) Low Risk / Low Reward: Sit back and recover. Let Flurry come to us! She’s just had pretty much the most mortifyingly embarrassing experience that it is possible for a teen to experience through the entirety of all universes and space-times ever… maybe it’s not too much to ask to let the filly have some space and clear her head? (10% chance of failure - low reward)[/color}
This.
the way this while scene was written had me groaning
Very well done